考点03 读后续写之写好记叙文的句子（教师版）

资料收集整理【淘宝店铺：向阳百分百】考点03读后续写之写好记叙文的句子（核心考点精讲精练）读后续写的语言升级考点1利用词汇手段提升文章的表现力考点2利用高级句式让人物形象栩栩如生考点1利用词汇手段提升文章的表现力方法①把话写具体使语言更具表现力①Becauseofherhatred,shelookedathim.→Becauseofherhatred,sheglaredathim.②Asscheduled,weparticipatedinseveralgoodactivities.→Asscheduled,weparticipatedinseveralinstructiveactivities.方法②使用高级词汇提高文章品质①TheadvicetheoldmangaveTomwasveryimportant.→TheadvicetheoldmangaveTomwasverysignificant/vital/critical.②Ishouldbefreeanytimeafterschoolnextweek.→Ishouldbeavailableanytimeafterschoolnextweek.方法③使用相关短语让表达更具体、更形象。①Hearingthebadnews,theboycriedsadly.→Hearingthebadnews,theboyburstintotearssadly.②Afteraday'swork,wealltired.→Afteraday'swork,weallwornout.方法④恰当使用非常形象地描述事物或反映细腻的感情色彩变化①Thedaywasbitterlycold;themoonwasshiningbrightlyinthesky.②Havingnochoice,Islowlyraisedthebook,hopingtohidemyself.③Iwasquietly,joyfullyandpatientlywatchingasthesunpaintedabrand-newday.④Onourwaybackhome,myfatherheldmetightly,wearingabigfrown.方法⑤运用介词短语增加句子的多样性①Shegazedupathim,glowinghappily.→Shegazedupathim,glowingwithhappiness.②Likealamp，themoonshonefromabove.Thestarstwinkledtheireyescuriously.→Likealamp，themoonshonefromabove.Thestarstwinkledtheireyeswithcuriosity.考点2利用高级句式让人物形象栩栩如生一、描写外貌与性格的结构及句型句型1学会熟练使用with介词短语及with的复合结构，使人物外貌、性格表达活灵活现，生动形象。典例1①Sheisagirlwithapairofblackeyes.她是一个有一双黑眼睛的女孩。（介词短语作定语）资料收集整理【淘宝店铺：向阳百分百】②Sheisagirlwithlovelydimplesonherroundface.她是一个女孩，圆圆的脸上有几个可爱的小酒窝。（with的复合结构作定语）③Sheisagirlwithapairofblackeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.她是一个女孩，有一双黑眼睛，圆圆的脸上有几个可爱的小酒窝。（综合使用介词结构作定语）句型2学会熟练使用定语从句，使人物外貌、性格表达信息更丰富。典例2①Heisamanwithgreatdetermination.他是一个意志坚强的人。（with介词定语作定语）②Hisperseveranceisoccasionallyunimaginable.有些时候他的毅力是你没法想象的。③Heisamanwithgreatdetermination,ofwhomtheperseveranceisoccasionallyunimaginable./Heisamanwithgreatdetermination,whoseperseveranceisoccasionallyunimaginable.他是一个意志坚强的人,有些时候他的毅力是你没法想象的。（综合使用介词短语和定语从句）句型3学会熟练使用倒装句，突出人物形象的核心内容。典例3①Apairofblueeyesandlovelydimples（酒窝）areonherroundface.→Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples（酒窝）.在她的圆脸上，有一双黑眼睛和几个可爱的小酒窝。(倒装句型)②SuchisLinQiaozhi,aneasygoing,kindandwarm­heartedwoman.这就是林巧稚，一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。句型4学会熟练使用并列连词and，突出人物形象的多种特征和品质。典例4①Herfaceblushedwithrosyhealth,andherlipshadafreshestsmiles,andhereyessparkledwithbrightgood-nature.她脸色红润，显得很健康，嘴角挂着最明艳的笑意，眼睛里闪耀着欢快的光芒。②Shewasdressedinwhite,apictureofyouth,unprotectedinnocence,andhumblegirlishsimplicity.她穿着一身白色衣服，显得年轻美貌、天真烂漫，像个又温顺又单纯的姑娘。句型5学会熟练使用but，though和although，对比突出人物不同时期的特征，使表达更强烈。典例5①Shelooksasifshehadbeenhandsomeonce,butsheispaleandthinanduntidyandhasnotawordtosayforherself.看上去她从前长得相当漂亮，可现在苍白又消瘦，而且不大整洁，见了人不大说话。②Althoughnotastrongboy,therewasnothingofthecowardabouthim.他虽不是一个强壮的少年，但却没一点胆怯的迹象。句型6学会熟练使用一些简单的修辞手法，使外貌、性格表达栩栩如生。典例6Heisaboybutheistooshylikealittlegirltospeakinthepublic.他是一个男孩，可是他腼腆的像个小姑娘，不敢在公共场合讲话。句型7学会熟练使用进行时描述人物形象，让人物活起来。①Herbigbrowneyesaredancingwitheagerness.她那双棕色的大眼睛急切地转动着。②Hereyeswereshiningsoftly.她的眼光温柔地闪动着。二、常用表达动作、行为的经典结构及句式1.熟练使用介词短语、副词修饰动词，赋予人物动作丰富的情感。①with+情感名词withdelight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/rage/patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride/caution/care/patience/certainty【例】Jack'sfaceflushed/burnedwithembarrassment.杰克窘得满脸通红。资料收集整理【淘宝店铺：向阳百分百】②with+身体部位withitshungryredeyes/itssharpteeth/hershakyhand/herpalelips等等【例】ShekissedOliverwithherpalelips.此处用withherpalelips来修饰动作kiss，体现了母亲当时虚弱的状态，和对Oliver满满的爱。③in+名词insurprise/amazement/shock/sorrow伤心inahigh/low/sweet/loud/soft/weakvoice用..的嗓音Inatoneofsurprise/curiosity/impatience/regret/command用...的语气【例】Hehung/dropped/lowered/bent/bowedhisheadinshame.他羞愧地低下了头。④副词suddenly/immediately/instantly/rapidly/firmly/slowly/angrily/happily/excitedly【例】Hecarefullyjumpedoverthebrokenglasses.此处也可以把副词carefully提高句首，强调他的小心，效果更好。高分表达：Carefully，hejumpedoverthebrokenglasses.2.熟练使用一些简单的修辞手法，让你的写作更加形象生动。【例】Shewenthomeinafloodoftears.她泪如泉涌地回家去了。此处在动作描写中添加了inafloodoftears夸张描写，生动传神地体现她当时的情感状态。3.使用时间状语从句，突出动作的发生背景。如when，while，as，before，after引导的时间状语从句来体现。【例】①WhenIarrivedthere,Iwalkedtothedoorandknocked.②AsIwaitedatthestop,Iheardabignoise.4.使用并列谓语动词让动作像电影一样，连续起来，让人物活起来，即Action1andAction2或者Action1，Action2andAction3。【例】①Shehailedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverherdestination.②Hereacheddeepintohispocket,pulledoutahandfulofchange,andheldituptothefarmer.5.使用非谓语来体现动作的即时性，同时尽显英语表达的功力。⑴V1-ing，V2或者V1，V2-ing【例】①Lookingupattheteacher,theboysaid,“Thankyou.”②Withoutanyhesitation,hepackeduphiscampinggear,headingstraighttothewoods没有多想，他收拾好野营装备直奔树林。⑵V1andV2,V3-ing或者V1，V2-ingandV3-ing或者V1-ing，V2，V3-ing【例】①Pattingonmyshoulder,myfatherencouragedmenevertogiveupmydreams.父亲拍着我的肩膀，鼓励我永远不要放弃自己的梦想。②Thestudentscamein,talkingandlaughing.学生们说着，笑着走进来。③Hearingthecry,outrushedtheneighbors,tryingknowwhathadhappened听到呼喊，邻居们冲了出来，想知道发生了什么。⑶Havingdone..,主句【例】①Havingleftmykeysinthedormitory,Iwentbacktogetit.=AfterIhadleftmykeysinthedormitory,Iwentbacktogetit.②Havingthoughtaboutthesituationforawhile,IdecidedtogiveuptheideathatIshouldgohome.资料收集整理【淘宝店铺：向阳百分百】=AfterIhadthoughtaboutthesituationforawhile,IdecidedtogiveuptheideathatIshouldgohome.这个句型可以和after引导的时间状语从句互换6.综合使用各种手段，让人物在立体