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高中英语复习写作讲评课Assessment&practiceofWriting•2008年奥运会刚刚落幕，一家英文报刊在其网站上征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议。假设你叫李华，是该报的一名读者，请给该报编辑部写一封信，谈谈你的建议和理由．内容包括：•１．向公众开放，用于健身•２．租给体育公司，创造经济效益•３．开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客．•４．………•Deareditor,•IamLiHua,areaderofyourpaper.•………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………………内容语法思想框架---组织结构要点全，拓展有度，有效连接词，作文结构紧凑；流畅准确，复杂语法结构，高级词汇，多种句型开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂1.单词拼写或用错：GiveyousomeadviseIjustprovideyoumyownsuggests.Theycanattactvisitors.advicesuggestionattract2.时态语态问题WemaygivenittothePEcompany.WemaygiveittothePEcompany..3.主谓一致问题Thesportstadiumsisverygreatandishighlyspokenofbytheforeigners.Thesportstadiumsareverygreatandarehighlyspokenofbytheforeigners.4.逐字翻译问题Thestadiumscanopentopeoplefordoexerciseuse.Thestadiumscanbeopenedtopeoplefordoingexercises.5.词性混淆问题Itcancreativemoney..Itcancreate/bringinmoney.Manypeoplecanusethemtostrongourbody.Manypeoplecanusethemtostrengthenourbody.6.介词短语的运用问题Iamwritingtomakesomeadviceforhowtomakefulluseofthesportsstadium.Iamwritingtomakesomeadviceonhowtomakefulluseofthesportsstadium.7.句子结构不完整Onlymakefulluseofthemdoesitmakesense.OnlybymakingfulluseofthemdoesitmakesenseThe29thOlympicGameswhichhostedinBeijingwereheldsuccessfully.The29thOlympicGameswhichwerehostedinBeijingwereheldsuccessfully.1.审题2.列提纲/要点3.连词成句4.连句成篇5.润色修正6.定稿体裁时态结构要求字数内容信息2信息3信息4开头正文结尾体裁人称时态要求结构字数内容一般现在时Para.1Para.2Para.3抓要点,120个左右信息1信息5①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.③你想写一些建议.向公众开放，用于健身总结，意愿……书信格式租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客第一,三人称①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.③你想写一些建议开头信息1①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.③你想写一些建议..Wanttowritesomeadvice/WouldliketogiveyousomeadviceContributesomesuggestionstoyou.CollectsomeadviceHowtouse/makeuseof/makethebestofthestadiums.AftertheOlympicGamesAfterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.The2008BeijingOlympic/wereover/finished/heldsuccessfullyinBeijing.①向公众开放，用于健身.②租给体育公司，创造经济效益.③开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客.Useitas/beusedfor/as;takeitas;openitforPlacesofinterest/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitorsGive…to/Rent…to/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/createmoney;bringinmoney/makemoreprofitsOpen/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbodies/strengthenourbodies信息2信息3信息4向公众开放，用于健身租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客正文.信息5总结，意愿……结尾Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned../frommypointofview.Iwouldappreciate…Iwouldyouwillthinkof/take…intoconsideration….开头信息1①08年奥运会刚刚落幕.②征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.③你想写一些建议..①The2008BeijingOlympicGameswereover/finished.The29thOlympicGameswereheldsuccessfullyinBeijing.Beijinghostedthe29thOlympicGameswithagreatsuccess.①The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Beijingachieveditsdreamofhostingthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.②CollectsomeadviceHowtouse/makeuseof/makethebestofthestadiums.AftertheOlympicGamesAfterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.②YouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakeuseofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.IhearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.③Wanttowritesomeadvice/WouldliketogiveyousomeadviceContributesomesuggestionstoyou.③Iwouldliketogiveyousomeadvice.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou4.Useitas/beusedfor/as;takeitas;openitforPlacesofinterests/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitors3.Give…to/Rent…to/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/createmoney;bringinmoney/makemoreprofits信息2信息3信息4向公众开放，用于健身租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客正文2.Open/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbody/strengthenourbodies2.Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheirbodies/strengthentheirbodies3.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmoremoney/makemoreprofits4.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors..信息5总结，意愿……结尾Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned../frommypointofview.Iwouldappreciate…Iwouldyouwillthinkof/take…intoconsideration….Inaword…Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefulluseofthestadium.IwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsiderationPara.1:The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Para.2:Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheirbodies/strengthentheirbodies.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmoremoney/makemoreprofits.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Para.3:Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.IwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsiderationPara.1:The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Para.1:Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Her