1读后续写专练答案提供详尽解析,旨在指导考生拓展写作思路,提升写作能力。读后续写专练(一)A(2018·金丽衢十二校高三第二次联考)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。ItwasanunusuallyquietdayintheemergencyroomonDecember25.Quiet,thatis,exceptforthosewhowerestandingaroundthenurses’stationcomplainingabouthavingtoworkChristmasDay.Iwastriagenursethatdayandhadjustbeenouttothewaitingroomtocleanup.Justthenfivebodiesshowedupatmytriagedesk,apalewomanandfoursmallchildren.“Areyouallsick?”Iaskedsuspiciously.“Yes,”shesaidweaklyandloweredherhead.Butwhenitcametodescriptionsoftheirpresentproblems,thingsgotalittlevague.Twoofthechildrenhadheadaches,buttheheadachesweren’taccompaniedbythenormalbodylanguageofholdingtheheadortryingtokeepitstill.Twochildrenhadearaches,butonlyonecouldtellmewhichearwasaffected.Themothercomplainedofacoughbutseemedtoworktoproduceit.Somethingwaswrong,butIdidn’tsayanything.Iexplainedtothemotherthatitmightbealittlewhilebeforeadoctorsawher.Sheresponded,“Takeyourtime;it’swarminhere.”Sheturnedand,withasmile,guidedherchildrenintothewaitingroom.Onahunch(callitnursingjudgment),Icheckedthechartaftertheadmittingclerkhadfinishedregisteringthefamily.Noaddress—theywerehomeless.Thewaitingroomwaswarm.IlookedoutatthefamilyhuddledbytheChristmastree.Thesmallestonewaspointingatthetelevisionandexclaimingsomethingtohermother.TheoldestonewaslookingatherreflectioninadecorationontheChristmastree.Iwentbacktothenurses’stationandmentionedwehadahomelessfamilyinthewaitingroom.Thenurses,complainingaboutworkingChristmas,turnedtocompassionforafamilyjusttryingtogetwarmonChristmas.Thenourteamwentintoaction,muchaswedowhenthere’samedicalemergency.ButthisonewasaChristmasemergency.AspecialChristmaspartywastobeheld.注意:21.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:WewereallofferedafreemealinthehospitalcafeteriaonChristmasDay,Paragraph2:Whenthepartyended,asthefamilywalkedtothedoortoleave,一、试题详解1.核心内容短文主要内容为:圣诞节当日,作者在医院护士站加班时遇到无家可归的一家人,一位母亲带着四个孩子以看病为由留在医院候诊室取暖。得知这件事,护士站所有的护士停止了对加班的抱怨,用心地为这家人举办了一个紧急而特殊的圣诞聚会,不仅给这一家人带来了温暖,也为自己留下了难忘的记忆。2.写作思路(1)明确故事人物。故事中主要人物为作者(护士)、护士站的护士们、无家可归的一家人(一位母亲和四个孩子)。(2)理清故事主要事件。作者(值班护士)遇到前来看病的一家人;作者发现这一家人无家可归,想以看病为由留3在医院候诊室取暖;作者将此事告诉其他护士,护士们出于同情,决定帮助这一家人举行一个紧急而特殊的圣诞聚会。(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落的开头语预测故事发展。故事总体的发展可能是护士们在短时间内精心为这一家人准备圣诞聚会,这一家人度过了温暖而美好的圣诞节,并向医院的护士们表达他们的感激之情。续写第一段:护士们圣诞节这一天在医院可以领取免费餐,很可能他们用这个机会为聚会准备了食物。过圣诞节还需要准备礼物,可以写护士们如何想办法准备礼物。这一段主要描述护士们精心准备的过程。续写第二段:聚会结束,这一家人准备离开。这样的场合可以描写这一家人的感受和反应。他们内心一定是充满感激的,也一定会通过言语和行为表达这种感激之情。同时,可以考虑护士们的反应和感受,对照文章一开始的抱怨,护士们此刻的内心应该也是感动和幸福的。(4)结合下划线词语罗列写作要点。结合下划线词语和短文内容,展开尽可能丰富的想象,罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如,第一段可以通过提出以下问题来获取写作要点:WhatdidthenursespreparefortheChristmasparty?Howdidthenursesgetwhattheyneededforthepartyinsuchashorttime?Wherewasthepartyheld?Whatdidthefamilydointheparty?Didtheyenjoytheparty?第二段可以通过提出以下问题来获取写作要点:Howdidthefamilyfeelaftertheparty?Whatdidtheysaytothenurseswhentheyleft?Whatdidtheydowhentheyleft?Howdidthenursesfeelwhenthefamilyleft?DidtheystillcomplainaboutworkingonChristmasDay?二、参考范文Paragraph1:WewereallofferedafreemealinthehospitalcafeteriaonChristmasDay,soweaskedforthatmealandpreparedabanquetforourChristmasguests.Wealsoneededpresents,soweputtogethercandies,fruitsandotherthingsavailablefromdifferentapartments.Rushinginandoutofthewaitingroom,ourteammadegreateffortstomakeawarmpartytomeettheneedsofthehomelessfamilywhojustwantedtowarmthemselvesonChristmasDay.Paragraph2:Whenthepartyended,asthefamilywalkedtothedoortoleave,themothercame4runningback,gavemeahugandwhispered,“Thanksforbeingourangelstoday.”Asshegotbacktoherchildren,theyallwavedonemoretime.Insidethenurses’station,therestoodagroupofnurseswithtearsofjoyintheireyes,whoworkedaChristmasDaythattheywillneverforget.三、范文解析范文围绕短文的内容进行了合情合理的续写。根据原文的最后一句话,以及续写第一段所给的开头语,可以推测文章接下来描述护士们忙着准备聚会的过程。根据生活常识,聚会需要准备食物、礼物。根据上文,聚会的地点应该在候诊室,护士们匆忙进出,为准备聚会付出了极大的努力。第二段根据所给的开头语“聚会结束,一家人准备离开”,描述离开时这一家人表示感激的语言和行为。同时,呼应短文开头护士们的埋怨的情绪,描述故事结尾护士们的感受,通过情感的变化体现故事的主题。四、提炼归纳1.立足主体拓展情节万事开头难。续写最难的是从何开始。在这一点上我们可以立足主体。主体的选择应参考短文所提供的关键词语以及续写两段给出的开头语。然后从主体出发,结合故事情节的发展,提出以主体为中心的各个问题,进行筛选和整合。例如范文中我们抓住“ourteam(nurses)”,“thefamily”以及“theparty”三个主体,第一段的续写根据首句主语We以及原文的最后一句“AspecialChristmaspartywastobeheld.”来确定本段的主体为“ourteam”和“theparty”,围绕这两个主体确定本段围绕“Howdidourteampreparefortheparty?”这个话题展开。第二段根据时间状语从句中的主语“thefamily”来确定本段的主体“thefamily”,结合故事发展,确定本段围绕“Howdidthefamilyreacttowhatwedid?”这个话题展开。2.巧妙利用空间名词衔接记叙文经常按照时间顺序或空间顺序来衔接语篇。在进行构思续写的时候,时间顺序往往是最先考虑到的。但很多时候,空间名词的巧妙利用不仅可以起到衔接的作用,还可以给人以生动的画面感。例如范文第一段的续写中,“Rushinginandoutofthewaitingroom”,以及第二段的“Insidethenurses’station”两个空间名词的使用,既衔接了前后的内容,又以一种镜头切换的方式给人以生动的画面感。B(2018·台州中学高三上学期统练)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。Steve,atwelveyearoldboywithalcoholicparents,wasabouttobelostforever,5bytheU.S.educationsystem.Hecouldread,yet,inspiteofhisreadingskills,Stevewasfailing.Hehadbeenfailingsincefirstgrade.Stevewasabigboy,lookingmorelikeateenagerthanatwelveyearold,yet,Stevewentunnoticed...untilMissWhitecame.MissWhitewasasmiling,young,beautifullady.Forthefirsttimeinhisyounglife,Stevecouldn’ttakehiseyesoffhisteacher;yet,stillhefailed.Inthemiddleofthefirstsemesterofschoo