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2018Howtomakeyourwritingbetter青西新区第四初级中学王春燕Howtomakeyourwritingbetter青西新区第四初级中学王春燕3Lookatthepicturescarefullyandanswermyquestions.01HowmanyChinesefestivalsdidyousee?02Whatarethey?03Whenarethey?4Let’smatch!InSeptemberorOctoberInJanuaryorFebruaryonthe5thdayofthefifthlunarmonthonthe15thdayofthefirstlunarmonthTheSpringFestivalTheDragonBoatFestivalTheLanternFestivalTheMid-AutumnFestival5Whenwetalkaboutafestival,Whatelsecanwewrite?reason？feeling？story？ThingsTodo？Thingstoeat？Beforewriting6noodlesdumplingstangyuan……zongzimooncakesThingstoeatTraditionalfood7ThingstodomakezongzicleanthehousesguessriddlesgivebestwishesadmirethemoonsharemooncakeswithfamiliesmakelanternsgettheluckymoneywearnewclothesSayHappyNewyearhavedragonboatraces8Thestoryofchang’ePoetQuYuanThestories9ThestoriesThemonsternianThegod’sbird10Ithinkit’srelaxingtoadmiringthemoon.HomeisthewarmestplaceWecanspendtheholidaywithfriendsIcangetluckymoneyandgiftsthenIthinkit’sinterestingtowatchtheracesthemostimportingthingistogettogetherwithfamilies.Reasons/feelingsWhydoyoulikeit?11紧扣主题要点齐全开门见山DividethepartsBeginningBodyEndingAwritingBeginning:name,dateBody:thingstoeat,activities,storyTheSpringFestival,inJanuaryorFebruary…dumplingszongzisharemooncakeswithrelativesadmirethemoongivebestwishesThisfestivalisinhonorofQuYuan,oneofthegreatestChinesepoets.Itcelebratesthebeginningofnewyear…Ending:feeling/reasonNotonlycanIspendmoretimewithmyfamilies,butIgetmuchluckymoney……13MyfavoriteChinesefestivalistheDragonBoatFestival.ItisoneofthemostimportantChinesefestivals.________.TheDragonBoatFestivalisinhonorofthepoetQuYuan.Itissaidthat_________.Onthatday,familymembersgettogetherandhaveabigmeal.Afterdinner,theyenjoythedeliciousfruitsandzongzi,watchingtheexcitingdragonboatraces.TheoldalwaysteachkidshowtomakezongziandtellthestoryofQuYuan._______________.IliketheDragonBoatFestival_____________.D.hekilledhimselfbyjumpingintoMiLuoriver.A.Weallagreethatitisthemosttouchingstory.B.becausenotonlycanIspendtimewithmyfamiliesbutalsoIcanknowaboutChineseculture---thesymbolofChina.C.Itiscelebratedonthe5thdayofthefifthlunarmonthCBAD14MyfavoriteChinesefestivalistheDragonBoatFestival.ItisoneofthemostimportantChinesefestivals.Itiscelebratedonthe5thdayofthefifthlunarmonth.Itissaidthat“Eastorwest,homeisthebest.”TheDragonBoatFestivalisinhonorofthepoetQuYuan.Onthatday,familymembersgettogetherandhaveabigmeal.Afterdinner,theyenjoythedeliciousfruitsandzongzi,watchingtheexcitingdragonboatraces.TheoldalwaysteachkidshowtomakezongziandtellthestoryofQuYuanWeallagreethatitisthemosttouchingstory.IliketheDragonBoatFestivalbecausenotonlycanIspendtimewithmyfamiliesbutalsoIcanknowaboutChineseculture---thesymbolofChina.BodyEndingMakethesentencesbetter•Istudy.•Istudyhard.•Istudyhardeveryday.•Itrymybesttostudyhardeveryday.•ItrymybesttostudyhardeverydaysothatIcangetgoodgrades.1.Ilikereadingbooks.------Ilikereadingbooks,suchasnovels,shortstories,magazinesandnewspapers.2.Weshouldpracticemore.------Asweallknow,“Useitorloseit”.Soweshouldpracticemore.3.Ioftenjoininmanyactivities.-----Ioftenjoininmanyactivitiesinordertocommunicatewithotherstudentsbetter.17Improvement123HowtomakeitperfectNotonly…butalso…;So…that…;evenif;Inmyopinion;asforme;AsfarasIknow…1.Practicemakesperfect.2.Eastwest,homeisthebest.3.Homeiswheretheheartis.1.Peolestartedthetraditionofadmiringthemoonandsharingmooncakeswiththeirfamilies.2.Behindallthesethingsliesthetruemeaningof….恰当使用连接词;合理运用名言警句；使用经典例句高级词汇及句型；…18MyfavoriteChinesefestivalChinahasmanytraditionalfestivalseveryyear.Asforme,theSpringFestivalismyfavorite.Itfallsonthe1stdayofthe1stlunarmonth.Beforethefestival,myfamilyusuallycleananddecoratethehouse,buynewclothesandputupSpringFestivalcouplets.Wearesobusy.DuringtheFestival,wehavealotofdeliciousfoodeveryday.Amongthem,Ilikethedumplingsmadebymymotherbest.Atnight,Mygrandmatellsmylittlesisterthestoryofmonsternian,fatherandIplaythefirework,“Asthenewyearbegins,letusalsostartanew”.Allofthepeoplemakepromisesforthecomingnewyear.What’smore,Icangetluckymoney.ItistheChinesecustomthattheoldwillgivechildrenluckymoneytowishagoodluck.That’swhyIlikeitmost!写作话题：Festivals,holidaysandcelebrations(节假日活动)MyfavoriteChinesefestival主要人称：_________主要时态：_________thepresenttense(一般现在时)Thefirstperson(第一人称)Appreciating&Evaluating欣赏与评价一.请自我检查二.交换习作互相欣赏①用红笔划出对方的亮点,并对不足的地方进行适当修改。②你能给同学什么建议，使得对方的习作更好呢？③根据worksheet上的评分标准，给同伴的习作打分。ExercisesAfterwriting我欣赏，我快乐!分数_____ExercisesAfterwriting注意：作文通用修改字符：优美句子～；漏词∧；错处○；去掉／;注意有无语法错误.人称错误.时态错误。231仔细审题，明确要求2分析要点，提炼关键3围绕主题，编拟提纲4组织语句，补充要点表达准确恰当文章层次清晰卷面整洁悦目Summary24在西方节日当中，你最喜欢哪一个？请你从中选取你最喜爱的一个节日,以”MyfavoriteWesternFestival”为题写一篇作文。内容包括:1.节日的名称和日期2.人们怎么庆祝这个节日要求：1．词数：80-100。不计入总词数。2．文中不得出现真实的校名和人名。Therearemanytraditionalfestivalsinwesterncountriesamongtheyear________________________________________________.Homework延时符谢谢大家青西新区第四初级中学王春燕GOODBYE