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考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站号《写作160篇》考研英语话题作文经典必背20篇之“因材施教”读者练习写作原文Asisvividlydemonstratedinthepictureabove，aduckmotherisbeggingthemonkeyteachertoteachherlittlechildtoclimbthetree.Themonkeyteacherisastonishedandpuzzledwhenhearingthat.Thedeepermeaningofthisinterestingcartoonisthatparentsdespiteofchildren'stalentsandcapabilitywhensearchingforateacher.Athoughtheteacherisfamousinthisfield,hecouldnotteachthechildrenwell.Thatistosay,afishcanneverfiyintheblueskyandachildcanneversuccessinthefieldheorshehavenocapabilityandinteresting.Thisphenomenonisnotuncommonintoday'ssociety.Therearemanyreasonscanaccountforthissocialproblem,butthemostcrucialoneisthatparentsholdhighhopesfortheirchildrensothatregardlessofpersonalityofchildrenandmakethemlosehopeafterservalfailures.Withtheregardtomyself,parentsshouldgiveuptheblindeducationanddiscoverchildren'sinterestsandtalentscarefully.Onlybydoingso,canthechildrendevelopedfreelyandhaveapromisingfuture!原作点评第一段点评①Asisvividlydemonstratedinthepictureabove,aduckmotherisbeggingthemonkeyteachertoteachherlittlechildtoclimbthetree.②Themonkeyteacherisastonishedandpuzzledwhenhearingthat.首段描述漫画内容。写作者观察的很仔细。⑴第一句，the→a。第二段点评①Thedeepermeaningofthisinterestingcartoonisthatparentsdespiteofchildren'stalentsandcapabilitywhensearchingforateacher.②Athoughtheteacherisfamousinthisfield,hecouldnotteachthechildrenwell.③Thatistosay,afishcanneverfiyintheblueskyandachildcanneversuccessinthefieldheorshehavenocapabilityandinteresting.④Thisphenomenonisnotuncommonintoday'ssociety.⑤Therearemanyreasonscanaccountforthissocialproblem,butthemostcrucialoneisthatparentsholdhighhopesfortheirchildrensothatregardlessofpersonalityofchildrenandmakethemlosehopeafterservalfailures.二段揭示漫画主旨并运用道理和事实进行论证。⑴第一句，despite不能动词，不能充当谓语，建议改成ignore。⑵第二句，could→can。考研英语【考研1号】系列图书为您提供诚挚的服务！更多考研资料获取请登录考研1号网站⑶第三句，注意主谓一致，建议将画线部分改成，heorshehasnogift（天赋）andinterest（兴趣）。⑷第五句，一句话中是不能出现两个谓语的，建议将画线部分改成，therearemanyreasonsthataccountforthissocialproblem；butthemostcrucialoneisthatparentsholdhighhopesfortheirchildrensothatregardlessofpersonalityofchildrenandmakethemlosehopeafterservalfailures.→andthemostcrucialoneisthatparentsholdhighhopesontheirchildrenandneglectthepersonalityandinterestofchildrensoastomakethemlosethemselvesafterservalfailures.第三段点评①Withtheregardtomyself,parentsshouldgiveuptheblindeducationanddiscoverchildren'sinterestsandtalentscarefully.②Onlybydoingso,canthechildrendevelopedfreelyandhaveapromisingfuture!总结全文，写作者给出自己的观点。⑴第一句，这里建议将withtheregardtomyself改成inmyopinion会更好。⑵第二句，developed→develop。总体点评文章亮点：文章表达完整；思路清晰准确；部分句子写得很地道。文章错误：①语法错误：有少量语法错误（主谓一致等）。②表达问题：个别句子在一定程度受到汉语的影响。③整体把握：个别地方用词不够准确。修改意见：落实写作160篇中的必背20篇的揣摩与背诵工作；多看外文刊文，减少汉语对英文的影响；写完习作，建议多查字典矫正词汇、短语等方面的小错误。参考分数（满分20分）：13修改展示Asisvividlydemonstratedinthepictureabove，aduckmotherisbeggingamonkeyteachertoteachherlittlechildtoclimbthetree.Themonkeyteacherisastonishedandpuzzledwhenhearingthat.Thedeepermeaningofthisinterestingcartoonisthatparentsignorechildrens'talentsandinterestswhensearchingateacherforthem.Athoughtheteacherisfamousinthatfield,hecouldnotteachthechildwell.Thatistosay,afishcanneverfiyintheblueskyandachildcanneversuccessinthefieldthatheorshehasnogiftandinterest.Thisphenomenonisnotuncommonintoday'ssociety.Therearemanyreasonsthatcanaccountforthissocialproblem,andthemostcrucialoneisthatparentsholdhighhopesontheirchildrenandneglectthepersonalityandinterestofchildrensoastomakethemlosethemselvesafterservalfailures.Inmyopinion,parentsshouldgiveuptheblindeducationandfindchildren'sinterestsandtalents.Onlybydoingsocanchildrendevelopfreelyandhaveapromisingfuture!