中考英语书面表达常见错误分析

中考英语书面表达常见错误分析(一)审题错误要点领悟与汉语作文一样,英语书面表达的审题也十分重要。审题包括此篇文章要传递给读者什么样的信息,告诫读者什么(即写作目的)。由于英语书面表达的篇幅很有限,所以要求作者在写作时要精心组织材料,紧扣主题。信息提示太白山是陕西著名的森林游览胜地。一年四季都有其独特的景色(scene)。不过,游览太白山的最佳时机是春天。每当春天来临,青山滴翠,美丽的景色吸引了许多游客前来踏青观光。可几年前,游人不注意保护环境,乱扔垃圾,攀折树枝花草,猎杀野鸟,点火野餐,致使环境一度恶化。请你写篇报道,说明太白山旅游环境的变化。习作实况TaibaiMountainisafamousplaceofinterestinShaanxiProvince.Ithasitsspecialscenesalltheyearround,andspringisthebesttimetovisitit.Whenspringcomes,thedaysgetlongerandlongerandtheweathergetwarmerandwarmer.Treesarebeginningtoturngreen,andflowerscomeout.Everythingbeginstogrow(1).Themountainsarecoveredwithalotofgreentalltreesandallkindsofcolorfulwildflowers.Itissobeautifulthatalotofvisitorscomehereandenjoyitsbeautyeveryday.Butafewyearsago,someofthevisitorspaidnoattentiontoprotectingtheenvironment.Theyusedtothrowlotsofrubbishsuchasplasticbags,fruitskinsandwastepaperontheground.Theydon’tknowthatcleanersworkfrommorningtillnighttosweepawaytherubbishandwastethings(2).Sometimestheybrokesomebranches,pickedflowersandevenkilledbirds.Someevenmadefiresintheforesttocookfood.Howdangerousitwas!Luckilyenough,thelocalgovernmenthasbeguntodosomethingtostoppollutingthearea.Greatchangeshavetakenplacehere.Newroadsandnicehotelshavebeenbuilt;treesandflowersareplantedaroundthem.Visitorsareaskedtotakeplasticbagsandputtheirrubbishinthem(3).精讲点拨(1)这一部分应当删掉。文章应围绕太白山景区的景色和环境保护主题展开,与太白山有关的春景可以略写,但不宜用太多的笔墨去描绘春天,这不仅加长了篇幅,也冲淡了主题。(2)这一部分也应当删掉。因为,这里批评了游客乱扔垃圾的不良现象,由于篇幅的限制,没有必要再去谈论清洁工是如何清理这些垃圾的。(3)这一部分同样需要删掉。根据上文不难看出,本文主要谈论太白山旅游区的环境污染问题,以及政府采取措施后环境的变化。没有必要去描述基础设施的变化。总而言之,英文作文中,应特别注意避免想起什么写什么,随意发挥,淡化主题。精彩例文TaibaiMountainisafamousplaceofinterestinShaanxiProvince.Ithasitsspecialscenesalltheyearround,andspringisthebesttimetovisitit.Whenspringcomes,themountainsarecoveredwithagreatmanygreentalltreesandallkindsofcolorfulwildflowers.Itissobeautifulthatalotofvisitorscomehereandenjoyitsbeautyeveryday.Butafewyearsago,someofthevisitorspaidnoattentiontoprotectingtheenvironment.Theyusedtothrowlotsofrubbishsuchasplasticbags,fruitskinsandwastepaperontheground.Sometimestheybrokesomebranches,pickedflowersandevenkilledbirds.Someevenmadefiresintheforesttocookfood.Howdangerousitwas!Luckilyenough,thelocalgovernmenthasbeguntodosomethingtostoppollutingthearea.Greatchangeshavetakenplacehere.中考英语书面表达常见错误分析（二）文不达意【要点领悟】在英语书面表达的提示信息中,常有这样的语句“可适当增加细节”或“可适当发挥”,但所增加的内容应该与文章相关。如果所“发挥”的内容与文章无关,就是“画蛇添足”了。【信息提示】根据下面的4幅图画用英语写一篇短文,要求故事包括所有图画的主要内容,可以适当增加细节,使意思连贯。词数在100以上。【习作实况】Oneday,anoldwomanwascrossingthestreetwithabasketinherhand.Shewenttodosomeshopping.Justthenacarcameupandshewasknockeddownontotheground.Shewasbadlyinjuredandcouldn’tmove.Buttoeveryone’sanger,thecarranawayasquicklyasitcould.Theoldwomanhadtolieonthegroundandcried(1).Luckily,aman,whowassweepingthestreetnearby,sawthis.Heranquicklyuptoherandhelpedherstandup.Hewasangrywiththedriver(2).Thenhetookhertothenearesthospital.Thereadoctorexaminedhercarefullyandgavehersomemedicalcare.Afterthat,thedustmantookherhome.Whentheoldwoman’sdaughterknewwhathadhappenedtohermother,shewasmoveddeeplyandthankedhimverymuch.Afterawhilethedustmanleftandwenttodohiswork.Thedaughterthankedhimagain(3).【精讲点拨】(1)此句与图中提示不相符,应删去。(2)此处加写这句属多余,也与图画内容不符。(3)文章写到“...verymuch.”处已经很完整了,加上这一句使行文显得重复、累赘。【精品范文】Oneday,anoldwomanwascrossingthestreetwithabasketinherhand.Shewenttodosomeshopping.Justthenacarcameupandshewasknockeddownontotheground.Shewasbadlyinjuredandcouldn’tmovealittle.Luckily,aman,whowassweepingthestreetnearby,sawthis.Heranquicklyuptoherandhelpedherstandup.Thenhetookhertothenearesthospital.Thereadoctorexaminedhercarefullyandgavehersomemedicalcare.Afterthat,thedustmantookherhome.Whentheoldwoman’sdaughterknewwhathadhappenedtohermother,shewasmoveddeeplyandthankedhimverymuch.中考英语书面表达常见错误分析(三)名词单复数【要点领悟】同学们在写作时,往往把重点放在文章的构思和句子结构上,有时忽略了名词的单复数。在中考作文中,如果名词的数使用混乱,也会导致较多的失分。【信息提示】假如你是吴强,去年春天和几位同学到东浦岛野餐,以“Thehappiestday”为题写一篇80-100词的作文。要求条理清晰、意思连贯、语句通顺、标点规范。【习作实况】ThehappiestdayLastspringmyclassmate(1)andIwenttoDongpuIslandtohaveapicnic.ItwasMarch2.Theweatherwasfineandtherewashardlyacloudinthesky.Westartedearlythatmorning.Weallcarriedsomethingnicetoeatanddrink.Wesanghappilyonourways(2)there.Afteraboutoneandahalfhour(3),wegottotheisland.Thewaterinthelakewasniceandcleanandwecouldseeflowersandgrasses(4)allaroundus.Howbeautifulitwas!Afterabouttwentyminute’s(5)rest,wedividedourselvesintofourgroupsandcookedourlunch.Mostofusdidthecookingforthefirsttime.Afterawhile,everythingwasready.Weputallthefoodonabigpieceofpaper.Therewasmeat,fish,fruitandvegetable(6).Howdelicioustheywere!Weenjoyedourlunchandtherewasabigsmileoneveryone’sfaces(7).【精讲点拨】(1)classmate在本句中看不出错误来,如果结合第二段的...fourgroups就可发现classmate要用复数形式。(2)在onone’sway结构中,way没有复数形式。(3)这儿不是半个小时,而是一个半小时,所以hour要用复数。(4)此处指普通的草,多用单数。(5)此处应将minute’s改为minutes’,即twentyminutes’rest。(6)此处应用vegetable的复数形式vegetables。(7)这儿指的是每个人的脸上,应将faces改为face。【精品范文】ThehappiestdayLastspringmyclassmatesandIwenttoDongpuIslandtohaveapicnic.ItwasMarch2.Theweatherwasfineandtherewashardlyacloudinthesky.Westartedearlythatmorning.Weallcarriedsomethingnicetoeatanddrink.Wesanghappilyontheway