Oncollegestudents’establishingtheirownbusiness

Interestingfirst;Shouldnotaffectthemajorclasses;Arrangethemproperly;Asmuchaspossibly;Whatelectivestochose?Itisaquestionindeed.Isupposemanystudentsholdthesamequestionespeciallyforsomestudentswhojustjointhecampus.Itisafreshenvironmentformanyfreshmenwhojustjointhecampuscomefromthehighschoolorfromotheruniversity.BeforewehavenotsomanychoicesduetothearrangementbythehighschoolortheEducationBureauexceptChinese,Englishandsoon,butnowwehavetofacemanychoicesinstantlycoming.Soletusfacethemusic.Howtochoose?Differentpeopleholddifferentopinion.Somepeoplethinkelectivesshouldbeenjoyableduetotheythinkalreadygottoomuchpressurefromcompulsorycourse.Sotheyprefersomefunnycourses,suchastalkshow,musicandsoon.Ithinkweshouldbaseonourpersonnelrequirementswhenwemakeachoice,accordingtomeIthinkIwillputthebalancewhenImakeachoice.Ithinkweshouldpayattentiontobothphysicalandmentalhealth.WriteanessaycommentingonthetopicOnCollegeStudents'EstablishingTheirOwnBusiness.Youcanciteexamplestoillustrateyourpoint.Youshouldwriteatleast150wordsbutnomorethan200words.1.政府鼓励大学生自主创业，原因为。。。现在就业岗位少；鼓励创业能产生新的就业岗位；自主创业的对年轻人有好处，能学很多东西；2.大学生自主创业的利与弊利：充分展示个人才能；在校学习知识用来实践；为创建更加多元的社会文化作出贡献；白纸一张易于书写；弊端：容易受骗，考虑不周，浪费金钱，偏理想化潜在风险；3.我的观点可以从小做起，低风险，片专业性的，有创新性的Oncollegestudents’establishingtheirownbusinessNowdaystherearehavenosomanyrightpositionsforeverycollegestudentsinChinaduetocurrenteconomiccrisis.Sothegovernmentencouragethecollegestudentstoestablishtheirownbusinessduetothesharesomestressingforourgovernment.Andtheotherreasonisweneedallkindsdevelopingfactorsforourcountry.Lastbutnottheleast;theyoungstudentsholdthefreshideaslikeablankpaperyoucandoanypaintingasyoulike.Advantageofthestudentsestablishingtheirownbusinessasfollow:firstly,theyarefreshbloodforthesocietybusinessworldinChina.Secondly,theymasterEnglishverygoodspecialforsomeexportsfirms.Thirdly,theycanputwhattheystudiedincollegetopracticedirectly.Everycoinhastwosides.Thedisadvantagesoftheissueareasfollow:theyareyoungpeoplewhojustcomefromschooltheycannotthinktwiceonsomeissuesandtheotherreasonistheyarealmostidealistsforeveryevent.Asforme,Ithinktheycantrytoestablishingtheirownbusinessbuttheyhavepreparethefulfillplans.Firstly,theyhavetoputthebestandworstendwhentheypreparetheplans.Secondly,theycanmakeateamwhentheywanttocarryoutsomeplan---foureyesseemoreclearlythantwo.Lastbutnottheleast;theycantrysomesmallbusinessforthebeginningduetosmallonesasklessmoney.胡世武(20分)|论坛|消息|皮肤|退出当前位置：我的作文-Oncollegestudents’establishingtheirownbusiness-第386649号作文Oncollegestudents’establishingtheirownbusinessNowdaystherearehavenosomanyrightpositionsforeverycollegestudentsinChinaduetocurrenteconomiccrisis.Sothegovernmentencouragethecollegestudentstoestablishtheirownbusinessduetothesharesomestressingforourgovernment.Andtheotherreasonisweneedallkindsdevelopingfactorsforourcountry.Lastbutnottheleast;theyoungstudentsholdthefreshideaslikeablankpaperyoucandoanypaintingasyoulike.Advantageofthestudentsestablishingtheirownbusinessasfollow:firstly,theyarefreshbloodforthesocietybusinessworldinChina.Secondly,theymasterEnglishverygoodspecialforsomeexportsfirms.Thirdly,theycanputwhattheystudiedincollegetopracticedirectly.Everycoinhastwosides.Thedisadvantagesoftheissueareasfollow:theyareyoungpeoplewhojustcomefromschooltheycannotthinktwiceonsomeissuesandtheotherreasonistheyarealmostidealistsforeveryevent.Asforme,Ithinktheycantrytoestablishingtheirownbusinessbuttheyhavepreparethefulfillplans.Firstly,theyhavetoputthebestandworstendwhentheypreparetheplans.Secondly,theycanmakeateamwhentheywanttocarryoutsomeplan---foureyesseemoreclearlythantwo.Lastbutnottheleast;theycantrysomesmallbusinessforthebeginningduetosmallonesasklessmoney.字数:243提交次数:1显示:作文评分题目要求80.5排名:第48(共95)，最高分:90，最低分:59词汇:句子:篇章结构:内容相关:评语：作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达，但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间；采用了恰当的衔接手法，层次清晰；作者应适量增加从句的使用量按句点评标签详解第1段1.1NowdaystherearehavenosomanyrightpositionsforeverycollegestudentsinChinaduetocurrenteconomiccrisis.[修改][词语错误]用词不当，nowdays是不是nowadays。[动词错误]arehave疑似动词连用。[动词错误]语法错误，behave不规范，建议修改。[搭配学习]动名搭配have...position在教材中出现过2215次第2段2.1Sothegovernmentencouragethecollegestudentstoestablishtheirownbusinessduetothesharesomestressingforourgovernment.[修改][动词错误]主谓不一致，建议将本句的谓语动词改为第三人称单数形式。[其他]duetothesharesome在本族语中很少使用。2.2Andtheotherreasonisweneedallkindsdevelopingfactorsforourcountry.[修改][动词错误]请检查isweneed，确认动词用法正确。[搭配学习]动名搭配develop...factor在教材中出现过5次[批改提示]country表示“国家”。注意与state的区别。详情点击[批改提示]查看and用于句首的用法。[批改提示]reason表示“原因，理由”。注意与cause的区别。详情点击2.3Lastbutnottheleast;theyoungstudentsholdthefreshideaslikeablankpaperyoucandoanypaintingasyoulike.[修改][词语错误]固定用法错误，建议将lastbutnottheleast改为lastbutnotleast。[搭配学习]动名搭配do...paint在教材中出现过4次[搭配学习]动名搭配hold...idea在教材中出现过62次第3段3.1Advantageofthestudentsestablishingtheirownbusinessasfollow:firstly,theyarefreshbloodforthesocietybusinessworldinChina.[修改][词语错误]固定用法错误，建议将asfollow改为asfollows。[其他]请检查thesocietybusinessworld，本族语中很少使用。[其他]请检查asfollow，确认符合语法规范。[其他]确认arefreshbloodfor符合语法规范。[其他]forthesocietybusiness疑似冠词多余。3.2Secondly,theymasterEnglishverygoodspecialforsomeexportsfirms.[