2012温州一模写作教案

-1-2012年温州市一模英语作文分析尤辉煌一、教材分析：2012温州市一模书面表达是时下比较时髦,也很能训练学生思维力的写作模式，它要求是话题叙述+问题的成因+议论。该话题是近阶段报纸、媒体热议，所以为学生熟悉、有话可讲的话题。通过这次书面表达，可以让学生的逻辑思维得到良好发展并形成此类写作模式该注意的要点。最后，该话题体现学生是非曲直道德观，也是提高他们对社会现象所折射的人生观、价值观、道德观的感悟。二、教学目标1.知识目标：⑴通过欣赏一篇及格（18分）的范文了解写一篇作文（或写这篇文章）的基本要求，然后畅谈对高分作文几点认识和要达到的标准。⑵结合审题卡片对书面表达题目进行审题，并列好写作提纲⑶通过修改病句，巩固一些词句的正确使用。（归类为非谓语动词、并列句和复合句、语言不得体三个方面）⑷通过句子改写来提升句子的档次，让学生习惯写简单句过度到复合句，并且学会用一些固定句式、表达来造句。2.能力目标：培养学生准确科学审题的能力培养学生在高考作文中准确使用词句的能力3.情感、态度和价值观目标：树立正确道德观，提倡帮助老人，促进社会和谐三、教学重点难点重点：1.正确科学得审题能提高作文的逻辑和准确性2.准确使用词句，避免中文式表达增强作文的可读性。难点：1.使用一定量高级词汇和高级句子使作文提升档次2012温州市一模书面表达近段时间大家都在议论“老人摔倒要不要扶”这一话题，很多人担心帮扶会带来很多不必要的麻烦…...假如你是高中生李明，有感于这一社会问题，请问英语给报社编辑写一封100-120个词的信。信中应包括以下内容：1.反映情况；2.讲述问题形成的原因；3.你的观点。-2-四、教学方法1.改错法：从学生作文中挑出病句，让学生以单句改错的形式纠正。2.探讨法：探讨如何在写长句的时候避免中文式表达3.仿写法：让学生仿写高级句和表达方式，让学生体会成功的喜悦五、课前准备1.教师的教学准备：重新审阅学生的每一篇作文，挑出病句，摘录好词好句，编写学案，设计课中、课后拓展作业。2.学生的学习准备：认真修改老师批改过的作文，预习学案。六、课时安排：1课时七、教学过程Step1:Lead-ina.Watchsomechosenpicturesoftheexamcompositionpaperfromthestudentsthemselves.(Thisstepcanbringtheirconcentrationontodaytopic,andmadethemeagertoknowthedetailreasonwhytheygetdifferentmarks.)b.Usethefollowingcharttounderstandingthedemandsofthiswritingmaterial审题卡片Step2.Understandingthewritingmaterialb.Identifyacompositionwhetheritisagoodenoughtomeetwritingstandardsofthenationalentranceexaminationc.AcloselookatthedemandsofthecompositionintheCollegeEntranceExamination.Andreadthethemtogether(要求考生根据题式进行书面表达。考生应能：（1）准确使用语法和词汇（2）使用一定的句型、词汇，清楚、连贯地表达自己的意思)d.Askstudentstoputforwardsomeadvicetogetahighmark(1)accurateunderstandingofthedemand(准确审题)（2）包括试题要求的全部内容（3）词句表达的准确性和流畅性体裁_____(如：演讲稿，书信，报告等)该体裁特点_______________________题材表面题材_________________________深度题材__________________________篇章构成_________,________,__________段落设置Para1_____________________________________________________________Para2_____________________________________________________________Para3_____________________________________________________________-3-（4）长短句相结合，高级表达的频繁出现Step3.Pre-writinga.Correctthemistakesinthesentencesfromyourcomposition.AnalysistocommonmistakesofNon-predicativeVerbs：1.Whetherweshouldhelpthefallingdownoldisunderdiscussion.2.Asweallknow,helpothersisagoodhabit.3.Weshouldbethankfultothepeoplehelpedusratherthanaccusethem.AnalysistocommonmistakesofCoordinatesentenceandcomplexsentences：1.Whethershouldwehelpanelderlywhentheyfalldownisunderdiscussion.2.Itisduetothecasesthatseveralpeoplehelpingtheelderwereaccusedbytheseelder.3.Itisnodoubtthattheoldneedourhelpwhentheymettrouble.AnalysistocommonmistakesofusingauthenticEnglish：1.Nowadays,theproblemthatwhetherweshouldhelptheoldwhenheorshefallsdown,arediscussedhighlyintheInternet.2.Therewerealotofaccidentshappeningsothatmakepeoplehaveawrongview.(which)3.Iwouldratherchoosetohelptheslippedoldmanastheymightbedangerouswithoutourhelp.b.TransformtheChinglishexpressionsintoBritishEnglish1.Helpingother’solderstoday,otherswillhelpyourolderswhentheyneedhelp.（并列句或复合句）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.Asweknown,thesepeoplewhodon’tdaretohelpisbecausetheyafraidthatoldpeoplewillsayitishimthatpushmedown.（非谓语动词）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.Asaresultofthosethingsthatsomeonehelpedanoldmantakemanytroubleinsteadofbeingthankful.（并列句或复合句或多个简单句）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________c.appreciatesomegoodsentencestructures1.Wereweold,whatwillhappentouswithononebeingwillingtogiveahand.2.Nevercanwerefusetohelpothersduetothefearofbeingintrouble.3.Afterall,loveistohumanwhatwateristofish.4.Inotherwords,itisthebadbehaviorsofsomepeoplewhohavebeenhelpedthataccountfrothesocialproblem.5.Onlywhenthefloweroftrustandwarmheartisplantedineveryone’sbelief,wouldtheworldbecomemorebeautiful.6.Ithinkthisconductmakesgreatsensesinceitisaprecioustraditiontorespectandhelptheold.d.rewritethefollowingsentencesbyeyecatchingmethods1.Wecanneverforgettheprecioustraditionthatpassesfromgenerationtogeneration.（改-4-倒装句）2.It’stimeforustothinkaboutthequestion.（改虚拟语气）3.However,thekindbehaviorsometimeswillbringsomeunnecessarytroubletous.（改强调句）Step4.WritingHowtobeenergeticinclass?随着春天的来临，许多同学觉得在课堂上犯困。但是，高考不断临近，同学们必须克服这个上课打瞌睡的坏习惯。因此，高三（7）的同学展开了激烈的讨论。同学们提出了许多建议。请以所给标题为中心思想，写一篇100-120词的短文。•1.请简述上述事情•2.请陈述你觉得最有效的方式（可以多种）•3.呼吁全班同学课堂上要精力充沛。a.审题体裁题材篇章构成段落设置Para1_____________________________________________________________Para2_____________________________________________________________Para3_____________________________________________________________b.改写第一段Howtobeenergeticintheclass?Springiscoming,andmanystudentsfeelsleepyinclass.Studentsthinktheyshouldovercomethebadhabitsincethecollegeentranceexaminationiscoming.SostudentsfromClass1Grade3haveahotdiscussion.Theygivealotofadvice.________________________________________________________________________________