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学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第1页共4页第一节议论文升格指导【病文升格】目前，越来越多的学生利用周末上各种各样的培训班或请家教。对于这一现象，存在两种不同观点：有些人认为必要另一些人认为没有必要1.老师辅导比自己自学好；2.更多机会和老师互动；3.可以弥补上课错过或没听懂的东西。1.容易养成依赖习惯；2.学生需要时间休息和娱乐；3.导致的学生在常规课堂上不认真听讲。请根据以上提示，写一篇150词左右的短文，反映表中内容，并简要阐述自己的观点。参考词汇：家庭教师tutor【写前思考】1.这篇作文要求我们就什么话题发表观点？2.正方观点哪些？3.反方观点哪些？4.你的观点是什么？5.准备使用哪些句式？哪些连接词？学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第2页共4页Therearemoreandmorestudentsgototrainingclasses①.Differentstudentshavedifferentopinionsonit.Someonethinkitnecessarytodoso②.Firstly,it’sbettertohaveateachertohelpthem.Secondly,youcancommunicatemorewiththeteacher.Thirdly,youcanlearnthatyoudon’tunderstandinclassesinweekdays③.Theothersdon’tthinkso④.First,studentscaneasilydependonothers.Then,studentsneedrestandrelaxatweekend.Also,gototrainingclassescausesomestudentsnottolistencarefullyintheirownclasses⑤.Inmyopinion,Ithinkwhetheratrainingclassortutorisneededdependononeself⑥.Ifyouarereallyveryweakatasubject,maybeit’sOKforyou.Butyou’dbetterchooseagoodclassorteacher,oryouwillwasteyourtimeandmoney.这篇习作从整体上对写作要求把握得较好，要点齐全，条理清晰。能注意语言前后的变化。从体裁看，本文遵从写作步骤：一是正方观点，二是反方观点，三是自己的看法。从这三方面展开来写就能写出一篇结构完整的短文来，当然语言基本功扎实程度有进一步提高的空间。此文得分在14分左右。①句中出现两个谓语，可改为Moreandmorestudentsgototrainingclasses。②句主语与谓语不一致，可改为Somethinkitnecessarytodoso.③句表达错误，可以改为youcanmakeupforwhatyoumissorfailtounderstandinclassesinweekdays。学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第3页共4页④句中theothers表达错误，应改为others。⑤句中主语应该用doing形式，谓语应该与主语保持一致。所以改为：Goingtotrainingclassesmaycausesomestudentsnottolistencarefullyintheirownclasses。⑥句中inmyopinion和Ithink重复，主语从句whetheratrainingclassortutorisneeded显得头重脚轻，可以改为itjustdependswhetheratrainingclassortutorisneeded。Moreandmorestudentsgototrainingclassesorhireateacher.People’sopinionsaredividedonit.Somepeopleapproveoftheopinion.Firstly,it’smoreeffectivetostudywithateacher’shelpthanbythemselves.Secondly,youcanhavemorechancestocommunicatewithteachers.Besides,youcanmakeupforwhatyoumissorfailtounderstandinclassesinweekdays.Onthecontrary,somepeopledifferintheiropinionsonthismatter.Foronething,studentscaneasilyformthehabitofdependence.Foranother,studentsneedtimeforrestandrecreationatweekends.What’sworse,attendingtrainingclassesorhiringtutorsevencausessomestudentsnottolistenattentivelyintheirregularclasses.AsfarasIamconcerned,itjustdependswhetheratrainingclassortutorisneeded.Ifyouarereallyveryweakatacertainsubject,maybeit’sOK.Butbesuretochooseasuitableclassorteacher,otherwiseitwouldbeawasteoftimeandmoney.使用正反对比型议论文的格式，文章结构严谨，句式工整。一定的高级词汇和变化的句式，关联词使用丰富，这些都为文章增色颇多。【应考对策】要写好英语议论文，首先要明确议论的论点，然后照给予的要点提示，考虑用适当的、高级的词语、句式表达出来，并使用一定的连接词，使得行文流畅。【答后总结】“悟到”才是真正的得到。通过上面的升格训练，你能总结出高分议论文作文的写作技巧吗？请你认真总结。【及时巩固】假设你是李华，些名校成为旅游景点，为此你班展开有关“ShouldtheUniversityCampusBeOpentoTourists?”的讨论，请你根据下表所提供的信息，给21stcentury报社写一封信，介绍讨论的情况并发表自己的看法。赞成者1.拉近学生和社会的距离，利于人们之间的文化交流；2.很多名校风景优美，古老的建筑群。反对者1.影响在校学生的学习，分散其注意力；2.大量游客涌入校园，会带来安全隐患。你的建议/看法……（至少两点）注意：1.词数150左右；2.信的开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。Deareditor,I'mwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwevehadaboutwhethertheuniversitycampusshouldbeopentotourists.学大教育专修学校江宁校区英语组书面表达第4页共4页Yours,LiHua【范文】Deareditor,I’mwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwevehadaboutwhethertheuniversitycampusshouldbeopentotourists.Asasayinggoes,“everycoinhastwosides”.Opinionsvaryfromstudenttostudent.Quiteafewstudents,whoareingreatagreementwithit,holdtheopinionthatthemoveisbeneficialtogetgraduatesinvolvedinsociety,whichisgoodforculturalexchange.Moreover,therearesomeancientbuildingsandeyecatchingviewsinmanytopclassuniversities,whichmayfeasttouristseyesonandbroadentheirhorizons.However,somestudentsbelievethattouristsvisitingthecampuseswillmakeitharderforstudentstofocusontheirstudies.Whatsworse,theyeventhinkwithplentyoftouristsenteringuniversitycampus,thesafetyproblemsaresupposedtobetakenintoaccountcarefully.Tome,itsacceptableforuniversitytobeopentotourists.Isuggestthatseveralfactorsshouldbeconsideredbeforeopeningthecampustotourists.First,thecampusshouldonlybeopentotouristsonweekendsorduringholidays.Second,thenumberoftouristsshouldbelimited.Yours,LiHua