Polish your English Writing

PolishYourEnglishWritingNingboNo.3HighSchoolLiuBenDirtyHandwritingWell-organizedStructureManyGrammaticalMistakesHigh-levelVocabularyOnlyOneSentencePatternsCleanFewAdvancedVariousBrainstorming:AGoodWriting…1.Hethoughtofagoodidea.•→Hecameupwithagoodidea.2.I’mexpectingtoseeyousoon.•→I’mlookingforwardtoseeingyousoon.3.Tomwantstoknowifwearegoingcamping.•→Tomwondersifwearegoingcamping.4.TherewasaterribleearthquakeinTangshan.•→Aterribleearthquakehit/struckTangShan.1.WhileIwaswalkingthedog,Iheardsomeonecryingforhelp.•→Walkingmydog,Iheardsomeonecryingforhelp.2.Thegirlismybestfriend.Youaretalkingtothegirl.•→Thegirltowhomyouaretalkingismybestfriend.3.Abilitydeterminesone’sfuture.(用强调句改写)•→Itisabilitythatdeterminesone’sfuture.4.wecansolvethisproblemonlyinthisway.•→Onlyinthiswaycanwesolvethisproblem.FinishExerciseOneandmakethesentencesbetter.1.→Hemeansto/intendstotalkabouttheimportanceofwildlifeprotection.2.It’sobviousthatshewantstogetawaywithtellinglies.3.Wedecidedtostayathomeasaresultofthebadweather.4.Thatpictureremindedmeofmychildhood.5.Walkingmydog,Isawagirlcryingloudlyoverthere.6.Onlyinthelibrarycanyoufindhimonweekends.7.Jackisawarm-heartedman,towhomIoftenturnforhelp.8.IwillneverforgetthedaywhenIpickedupsomeGermanwords.9.Itisabalanceddietthatcankeepushealthy.Hejusteatsbeef,withoutvegetables.1.表并列:both...and,notonly...butalso…,aswellas2.表转折:however,(al)though,onthecontrary3.表顺序:firstofall,aboveall,foronething...,foranother...4.表递进:besides,inaddition,what’smore5.表因果:because,onaccountof,asaresult(of)6.表列举:suchas,forinstance,take...foranexample7.表总结:inconclusion,inbrief,inaword_______NewYork________Londonhavetrafficproblems.1.表并列:both...and,notonly...butalso…,aswellasBothand(1)_________sheenjoysbeingfamous,shehastobereadyforlosingsomefreedom.Although2.表转折:however,(al)though,onthecontraryIwanttogetthisjob.___________,Ihaveenoughknowledge;___________,Iliketoworkingroup.3.表顺序:firstofall,aboveall,foronething...,foranother...ForonethingforanotherTomapologizedtothemforbeingrude.______________,hewasnotpermittedtohavelessonsfor2days.What’smore4.表递进:besides,inaddition,what’smoreWedecidedtostayathome______________theheavyrain.5.表因果:because,onaccountof,asaresult(of)asaresultofIhavemyownhobbies_________readingbooksandcollectingstamps.suchas6.表列举:suchas,forinstance,take...foranexampleWhatyousaidinspiresmesomuch._________,Ilikeyourspeechverymuch.7.表总结:inconclusion,inbrief,inawordInawordHearingthatalargernumberofwildanimals,_________pandas,antelopesandmiludeer,areindangerofdyingout,Ifeelveryfrustrated.Inmyopinion,weshoulddevoteallourenergytohelpthem,protectthemfromover-huntingandsetupmorenaturereservesforthem.However,_________peopleareinformedoftheimportanceofwildlifeprotection,somepeoplestillcan’thelpdestroyingthenaturereserves,________theycanearnmoremoneybymakingbuildingsonthem.suchasalthoughbecause•____________theirdecreasingnumber,Ithinkweshouldtakewildlifeprotectionseriously.Thereasonsareasfollows:__________,wecan’tlivealonewithoutanimals.Allthelivingcreaturesareourfriends,withwhomwesharethesamehometogether;_____________,it’salsoofnobenefittoourlivingenvironment.Nothingcanbebetterthantrees,ratherthanbuildings,togiveusfreshair.Therefore,somemeasuresshouldbetakenby_____thegovernment_____everyonetoraisepeople’sawarenessofprotectingwildlife.Onlyinthiswaycanwesaveourselvesandourdearfriends.__________,let’shelpthemandliveinpeace!AsaresultofforonethingforanotherbothandInaword1.DiscussandrevisetheletterfromJimingroups.2.Shareyourrevisedversion.DearMary,Iwanttowritethisarticletoarousepeople’sattentiontotheseriousenvironmentalprobleminmyhometown.Iliveinasmalltown.Itisnotfarawayfromthecity.Inrecentyears,manyfactorieshavebeenbuilt.Heavysmokeandwastewaterfromthefactoriesareletintotheskyandtheriversrandomly.Morefactoriesofthatkindarestillbeingsetup.Theairisgettingworseandworse.WhenIseetheheavysmoke,Iamworriedaboutourhometown.Thisismyopinion.Tosolvethisproblem,thegovernmentshoulddosomethingtostopthetownfrombeingfurtherpolluted.Everycitizenshouldalsodosomethingtostopthetownfrombeingfurtherpolluted.Makeclearrulesforthefactories.Plantmoretrees.Punishpeoplewhomakepollution.Wecangetourblueskyandfreshairbackonlyinthisway.Canyouthinkofsomegoodideastohelpus?Iamexpectingtoreceiveyourreply.Bestregards,JimDearMary,Iintendtowritethisarticletoarousepeople’sattentiontotheseriousenvironmentalprobleminmyhometown.Iliveinasmalltownwhichisnotfarawayfromthecity.Inrecentyears,manyfactorieshavebeenbuilt,fromwhichheavysmokeandwastewaterareletintotheskyandtheriversrandomly.However,morefactoriesofthatkindarestillbeingsetup,althoughtheairisgettingworseandworse.Seeingtheheavysmoke,Iamreallyworriedaboutourhometown.Inmyopinion,tosolvethisproblem,boththegovernmentandeverycitizenshouldtakesomemeasurestostopthetownfrombeingfurtherpolluted,suchasmakingclearrulesforthefactories,plantingmoretreesandpunishingpeoplewhomakepollution.Onlyinthiswaycanwegetourblueskyandfreshairback.Canyoucomeupwithsomegoodideastohelpus?Iamlookingforwardtoreceivingyourreply.Bestregards,Jim英语写作的改写提升•1.