芦山地震作文教学

书面表达中考复习之——子如童琳abig_______losttheir_________andtheir___________feel______sadearthquakerelativeshomesraisemoneygivebloodtohelpthemsavetheirrelativesfoodandschoolthingshopegetoutofthetrouble4月20日，四川省芦山地区发生了罕见的大地震，那里的人们痛失亲人和家园。全国人民众志成城，抗震救灾。作为一名中学生，请你谈谈你的做法和感受。要求：文章语言流畅，逻辑清晰，用词准确，80—100字左右；词汇参考：地震earthquake受到感动bedeeplymoved安慰comfort重建rebuild自愿做某事volunteertodosth•认真审题，找出文章要表达的中心。写作第一步审体裁、时态、人称以及词数等要素4月20日，四川省芦山地区发生了罕见的大地震，那里的人们痛失亲人和家园。全国人民众志成城，抗震救灾。作为一名中学生，请你谈谈你的做法和感受。要求：文章语言流畅，逻辑清晰，用词准确，80—100字左右；词汇参考：地震earthquake受到感动bedeeplymoved安慰comfort重建rebuild自愿做某事volunteertodosth时态中心写作第一步审体裁芦山大地震人称词数半叙半议一般过去时态一般现在时态第一人称80—100字左右；•用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。列写作第二步4月20日，四川省芦山地区发生了罕见的大地震，那里的人们痛失亲人和家园。全国人民众志成城，抗震救灾。作为一名中学生，请你谈谈你的做法和感受。要求：文章语言流畅，逻辑清晰，用词准确，80—100字左右；词汇参考：受到感动bedeeplymoved安慰comfort重建rebuild自愿做某事volunteertodosth.芦山大地震abigearthquakeinLushan,SichuanProvincepeoplelosttheirrelativesandtheirhomeshappened痛失亲人和家园全国人民抗震救灾feelsadalltheChinesepeopleraisemoneycomfortthesadchildrengivebloodtohelpthemrebuildtheirhomesvolunteertohelpthemsavetheirrelatives...受到感动bedeeplymoved安慰comfort重建rebuild自愿做某事volunteertodosth.我的做法感受I’mdeeplymoved.buysomefoodandschoolthingsIthinkweshouldhelpthemtogetoutofthetrouble.…raisemoneyIhopetheytheywillbehappy.受到感动bedeeplymoved安慰comfort重建rebuild自愿做某事volunteertodosth.加•加些单词使短语成句•加首尾，使结构完整。•可以采取总分总结构或者总分结构，开头或结尾的句子注意简洁，漂亮。•句子的顺序根据一定的原则，如主次、时间、喜欢程度等写作第三步：Words(词)Sentences(句)Paragraph(段)abigearthquakehappenedinLushan,SichuanProvince.Peoplelosttheirrelativesandtheirhomes.AlltheChinesepeoplefeltsad.volunteeredtohelpthem.raisemoney，comfortthesadchildren.savetheirrelativesandrebuildtheirhomes.I’mdeeplymoved.buysomefoodandschoolthings.Ithinkweshouldhelpthemtogetoutofthetrouble.OnApril20th,2013,PeopleSomepeopledforthemsomepeopleedSoldiershelpedthemtoIwill连•恰当运用关联词句，使得文章层次清晰，各个部分衔接自然。写作第四步：UsefulConjunctions(常用连词)表先后顺序的firstofall,tobeginwith,first…,second…,third…,atlast,finally…,intheend.表并列的and,besides,aswellas,notonly…butalso…,表递进的what’smore,what’sworse,表转折的but,while,ontheotherhand,however,表总结的ingeneral,inaword,asaresult……1._____Iamtired,Ikeeponworkingtillmidnight.2._____,hestoodup.Thenhegotout._____,hewentback._____,hesmiled.3.Welikedoingkindsofsports_____swimming,runningandhiking.AlthoughFirstNextFinallysuchasOnApril20th,2013,abigearthquakehappenedinLushan,SichuanProvince.Manypeoplelosttheirrelatives_____theirhomes.AlltheChinesepeoplefeltsad.____________________Somepeopleraisedmoneyforthem，somepeoplecomfortedthesadchildren.Soldiershelpedthemtosavetheirrelatives______rebuildtheirhomes.I’mdeeplymoved._____Iwillbuysomefoodandschoolthings.Ithinkweshouldhelpthemtogetoutofthetrouble.andPeoplevolunteeredtohelpthem.andSo美•选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。写作第五步：从朴实到华丽n.+adj.v.+adv.+phrase/clause（短语/从句）OnApril20th,2013,abigearthquakehappenedinLushan,SichuanProvince.Manypeoplelosttheirrelativesandtheirhomes.AlltheChinesepeoplefelt__________sad.___________peoplevolunteeredtohelpthem.Somepeopleraisedmoneyforthem，somepeople____________comfortthesadchildren._______________soldiershelpedthemtosavetheirrelativesandrebuildtheirhomes.I’mdeeplymovedbythesepeople,SoI’llusemypocketmoneytobuysomefoodandschoolthingsforthechildrenthere.Ithinkallofusshouldtryourbesttohelpthemtogetoutofthetroubletogether.Alotofquite/verywenttheretoThousandsof1.是否要点齐全，重点突出？2.单词是否有拼写错误，大小写正确，标点符号是否清晰？3.语法是否有错？（名词单复数，时态，语态，主谓一致，词性及词组搭配等）改写作第六步：4.句与句之间是否连贯？5.字数是否符合要求？InApril20th,2013,abigearthquakehappeninLushanSichuanprovince.Manypeoplelosttheirrelativesandtheirhome.AlltheChinesepeoplefeltquitesad.Alotofpeoplevolunteeredtohelpthem.Somepeopleraisedmoneyforthem，somepeoplewenttheretocomfortthesadchildren.Thousandsofsoldiershelpedtheytosavetheirrelativesandrebuildtheirhomes.Ideeplymovedbythesepeople,soIwillusemypocketmoneybuysomefoodandschoolthingsforthechildrenthere.Ithinkallofusshouldtryourbesttohelpthemtogetoutofthetroubletagether.themOnProvincehomes,ed’mtotogether.中考书面表达评分标准评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言表述初步确定其所属档次，最后在本档次内部酌情给分。给分范围和要求：第四档（优）：（12-15分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。——覆盖所有内容要点。——准确使用了丰富的词汇和语言结构。——全文结构紧凑，有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，符合英语交际习惯：具备较强的语言运用能力。第三档（良）：（8-11分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。——覆盖所有内容要点。——恰当地使用了较丰富的词汇和语言结构。——适当运用了语句间连接成分，较好地达到了交际的目的。Homework今天环境变得越来越糟糕,环境问题影响着人们的工作,学习,生活等,而我们的工作,生活,生产等又使环境污染越来越严重..........,如何保护我们的环境?请以“Howtoprotect/saveourenvironment/world?”为题写一篇短文。提示:存在问题:1.水污染越来越严重2.砍伐森林严重3.大气污染严重4.白色垃圾等。要求：如何改善/保护环境?至少:3---4个方面，80字左右的。中考作文评分标准第二档(4—7分）没能覆盖所有内容要点。词汇和语言结构不能完全满足写作任务的要求。文章不够连贯，影响对写作内容的理解。第一档(0—3分）漏掉较多内容要点或写的内容与规定任务无关。词汇和语言结构错误较多。内容不连贯，无法传达有效信息。OnMay12th,abigearthquakehappenedinWenchun,Sichuan.Manypeoplelosttheirrelativesandtheirhomes.AlltheChinesepeoplefeelquitesorrow.Alotofpeoplevolunteertohelpthem.Somepeopleraisemoneyforthem,somepeoplebuysomethingforthem,somepeoplegotheretocomfortthesadchildren.ThousandsofsoldiershelpthemtosavetheirrelativesandrebuildtheirhomesEvenforeignfriendsalsogivethemahand.I’mdeeplymovedbythesepeople.SoI’llusemypocketmoneytobuysomefoodandschoolthingsforthechildrenthere.Ithinkallofusshouldtryourbesttohelpthemtogetoutofthetroubletogether.