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Writing--HowtopolishanessayJiangyinHighSchoolZhangxin最近，很多人质疑大学教育是否值得，上大学有没有意义，意义何在。有人认为值，有人认为不值，你认为呢？请以whethercollegeeducationisworthit为题写一篇作文，写出你的感受。注意：词数（120词左右）和卷面。Stepone:Revision&Lead-in四档（16-20分）五档（21-25分）1.完成了试题规定的任务。2.虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。3.应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。4.语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。5.应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.达到了预期的写作目的。1.完全完成了试题规定的任务。2.覆盖所有内容要点。3.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。4.语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。5.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。6.完全达到了预期的写作目的。Steptwo:Howtopolishanessay？1.vocabularies3.linkingwords词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉。使用恰当的过渡词，能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。2.sentencepatterns4.sayings&examplestips谚语和实例能使论点更有说服力，使内容更为丰满。1.周末他们有很多作业要做.Theyhaveendlesshomeworktodoattheweekend.2.在我所有的老师里，他给我留下了最深的印象.Ofallmyteachers,hemadethedeepestimpressiononme.1.使用较高级的词汇3.高级培训班结束后回到家，他的妻子感到精疲力尽。Hiswifecamebackhomeaftertheadvancedtrainingclass,feelingwornout/exhausted.4.他没听我课上讲的东西。HeturnedadeafeartowhatIsaidintheclass.2.使用较多样的句式1.Ifsheiscomparedwithotherteachers,wefindshepaysmoreattentiontoherwayofteaching.(过去分词形式)Comparedwithotherteachers,shepaysmoreattentiontoherwayofteaching.2.Wecanachieveasatisfyinggradebychangingthewaywestudy.(only倒装)3.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.(倒装句/强调句)Notuntilhereturnedhomedidherealizehisfoolishness.Itwasnotuntilhereturnedhomethatherealizedhisfoolishness.Onlybychangingthewaywestudycanweachieveasatisfyinggrade.4.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.（使用名词性从句）5.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhereadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调句型)6.Shewalkedoutofthelabandmanystudentsfollowedher.(使用过去分词)Whatsurpriseshimisthatthelittlegirlknowssomanythings.Itwasnotuntilhereadthenewsinthenewspaperthatheknewwhathadhappened.Followedbymanystudents,shewalkedoutofthelab.NosoonerhadhecomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.Nomatterwhathesays/Whateverhesays,Iwon’tbelieveit.7.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.(使用状语从句）8.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用倒装句)9.Collegesareplaceswherestudentscandevelopastrongersenseofindependence.Collegesprovideastagewherestudentscandevelopastrongersenseofindependence.•并列•选择•原因•结果•时间•对比•转折•递进•举例•总结firstly;secondly;finally;lastbutnotleastor;either…or…;otherwisebecause(of);owingto;dueto;thankstoso;therefore;thus;asaresultwhen;before;soonafter;later;assoonas;next;afterwardsonthecontrary;ontheotherhand;but;however;although;inspiteofbesides;what’smore;moreover;inadditionforexample/instance;suchasinconclusion;generallyspeaking;inaword3.使用恰当的过渡词Healthisfarmoreimportantthanwealth.Goodhealthenablesustoenjoyourlifeandachievewhatwehopeforinourcareer.___________,poorhealthleadstonothing,buttroubleandmisfortune.Howcanwekeephealthy?Hereissomeadvice._____,itisveryimportantforustotakemorefruitsandvegetables_______theyprovidevitamins,andwehavetokeepabalanceddiet._____weshouldavoidfoodwithlotsofsugarandfat.______,we’dbetterexerciseeverydaytomakeourbodiesstrong.Besides,wehavetoavoidtoomuchworkpressure._____,wehavetogetridofthosebadhabitsthatdamageourhealth,suchasdrinkingandsmoking.__________,ifwesticktotheadvicegivenabove,wewillleadahealthylife.3.使用恰当的过渡词OnthecontraryFirstlybecauseSoSecondlyFinallyInconclusion1：锻炼对学生有好处。Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise.Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”2：要成为一名好的歌手，除了天赋，练习也很重要。Besidestalent,practiceisalsoimportanttobeagoodsinger.Asthesayinggoes,“Practicemakesperfect.”4.使用谚语、实例丰富内容3.青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球。Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.Forexample/Forinstance,wecan…4.使用谚语、实例丰富内容4.在大学里，我们可以通过参与各种活动丰富生活。Incollege,wecanenrichourlivesbytakingpartinvariousactivitiessuchas…Stepthree:polishtheessay1.vocabularies3.properlinkingwords2.sentencepatterns4.sayings&examplestipsRecently,manypeopledoubtwhethercollegeeducationisworthit.Differentpeoplehavedifferentopinions.①ButIthinkcollegeeducationisimportant.Thereasonsareasfollows.Firstly,collegeeducationisveryimportantforyoungpeopletogrowup.②Theycannotonlylearnalotofknowledge,butalsolearnmoreabouttheworld.③Secondly,thequalityofsomecollegesisnotveryhighbutourcountrystillneedsmanywell-educatedpeople.④Thirdly,youngpeoplecanchangetheirviewsofjobs.Allinall,Ithinkcollegeeducationisworthit.Youngpeopleshouldstaypositiveandlearnmoreknowledge.Onlyinthiswaycantheyachievesuccessinbothcareersandlives.Let’spolishtheessay!OriginalsentencePolishedsentence①ButIthinkcollegeeducationisimportant.②Theycannotonlylearnalotofknowledge,butalsolearnmoreabouttheworld.Personally,Ithinkcollegeeducationissurelyofgreatimportance/significance.Notonlycanitequipthemwithallkindsofknowledge,butitcanalsohelpshapepersonalities,betterunderstandtheworldandfindmorepleasureinlife.Let’spolishtheessay!OriginalsentencePolishedsentence③Secondly,thequalityofsomecollegesisnotveryhighbutourcountrystillneedsmanywell-educatedandtrainedpeople.Secondly,thoughtherearesomeuniversitiesoflowquality,wecan’tputalltheblameoncollegeeducation,becauseourcountrystillneedsmanywell-educatedandtrainedpeople.Let’spolishtheessay!OriginalsentencePolishedsentence④Thirdly,youngpeople