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problemsinourwriting(1).结构：看不出清楚的三部分或三段(2).切题：没有按照三句提纲写作(3).表达：语言表达不清,支离破碎。Socialmanypeopledevelopnowatfullspeedthrowuponejobandtakeonanother.(?)中式英语Thestorymakemehavesomeideas.(?)Wehavenobodytodependoninthefuture.(?)Therehavemanypeople.(?)…tolivewithouttheirparents.(?)Schoolisastudyplace.(?)moneysociety(?)socialman(?)realitystory(?)语法错误-词汇Nowdays/nowaday/Innowadays,…像likes(?)unlikedislikethetrue/beturephonomenonsphonomenathefting/thiefed/thievetheir’sboss/thierthechildrentheparentseffectourstudyunusefulunindependentoverdegree•writter•Wastook/tooked/taked•ononehand…onanotherhand…•firstly…theotherhand…•Foronething…fortheotherthing…•tocometruetheirdifferentaim•Makethemdo/letthemdo(4).连贯性1.缺少连贯性。没有连接词2.连接词使用不当。如Therefore，However,Asaresult,etc.(5).其他1.题目：缺失，字母大小写。2.文中出现省略号“……”和缩略语,如“Oct.”，“aren’t”，应用“etc.”,“andsoon”表达“等”。3.文中出现中文甚至空格，如“心理课程”，“”。4．主观表述，论据不充分，举例不具代表性，身边的事例。…should…5．字数过多，书写潦草，卷面不洁。范文分析AccidentsConcerningCampusSecurity1.目前校园安全事故常有发生2.这种现象造成的恶劣影响3.应该如何杜绝这种现象AccidentsConcerningCampusSecurity1.目前校园安全事故常有发生Itisanissuethataccidentsconcerningcampussecurity,whichhasshockedthepublicandsparkedaheateddiscussion,frequentlyoccurinsomeschools.2.这种现象造成的恶劣影响Thisphenomenoncanimposeaquitenegativeimpactontheindividualaswellasthewholesociety.Firstofall,thecruelscenehasmademanypassers-bypanic,nottomentiontheintensegriefsufferedbytherelativesoftheyoungvictims.Besides,thephenomenonwilldefinitelyposeathreattothestabilityandsecurityofthewholesociety.Moreover,Somepeopleevenlosetheirconfidenceinlivingasecureandhappylife.AccidentsConcerningCampusSecurity3.应该如何杜绝这种现象Frommypersonalperspective,severalcounter-measurescanbetaken.Foronething,relevantauthoritiesaretomakesurethatsomeequipmentsareavailableincaseofemergencies.Foranother,activitiesaretobelaunchedtoenhancethesafetyawarenessofthepupilsaswellastheirparents.Onlyinthiswaycanwefinallygetridofthiskindofphenomenon.WhatDoWeExpectfromaFriend?1.每个人都需要朋友2.不同的人对朋友有不同的期待和要求3.我的观点WhatDoWeExpectfromaFriend?1.每个人都需要朋友Everybodyneedsfriends.JustasAbrahamLincolnputit,thebetterpartofone’slifeconsistsofhisfriendships.2.不同的人对朋友有不同的期待和要求Itisundoubtedthatfriendsareplayingvariousrolesindifferentpeople’smind.Somepeopleexpecttheirfriendstoguideandleadthemlikeamentor.Othersexpecttheirfriendstosharethegloryandburdenlikefamilies.Stillothershopethatthefriendscanrelaxthemandbringthemmoreenjoyment.Friendsseemtobecapableofanyparts.3.我的观点Asforme,Ithinkthereisnoidealfriendouttherereadytowaitforus.Weneedtolookforthem,communicatewiththem,adapttothemandgetreadytoacceptanimperfectfriend.Alsoweshouldbeconsciousenoughtoknowthatwecannotexpecttoomuchandtoomanyrolesofanyfriend.Onlyafterwehaverecognizedtheabovepointscanwegetrealandlastingfriends.OnJob-hopping1.目前有许多人跳槽2.他们跳槽的目的各部相同3.你的看法OnJob-hopping1.目前有许多人跳槽RecentlyJob-hoppinghasbecomeveryfrequent.Somepeople,especiallyyoungpeoplearepronetoabandontheiroccupationwhileinfavorofanother.2.他们跳槽的目的各部相同Forthepurposesofjob-hopping,differentpeoplehavedifferentideas.Someofthemthinktheycangetbetterjobsandhigherincomebyjob-hopping.Othersthinktheycanfindbetterworkingconditionsafterengaginginnewjobs.Andtherearestillsomepeoplewhoquittheirjobsjustforthesakeoftheirowninterests.OnJob-hopping3.你的看法Inmyopinion,peopleshouldactwithprudencewhenchangingjobs.Aprerequisitetojob-hoppingistheavoidanceoftheconflictbetweentheemployerandtheemployee.4.BrainstormingTeenageSmokingSoars1.近些年来越来越多青少年吸烟，尤其是许多女孩子也开始吸烟了。2.分析这种现象形成的原因。3.我的建议OnWesternFestivals1.如今许多人喜欢过西方节日。2.分析这种现象产生的原因3.我的看法GivingMoneytoChildren1.给孩子零用钱是一个传统2.同意或不同意给孩子零用钱的原因3.我的看法OnInternet1.因特网在许多方面给人们带来了便利。2.因特网也给人类带来了麻烦。3.我的观点5.全国大学英语四、六级考试（CET4~CET6）作文题评分原则及标准Thankyou!