1.读后续写---动作细节描写

动作细节描写byKevinSoy读后续写专项训练1OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.Help!Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.(2016.10浙江)小结1.动作细节的描写应该围绕着一个中心展开，否则会导致叙述散乱，内容混杂；2.动作细节的描写应该组织一系列的动词，以动作的次第发生来叙述整个过程；3.动作细节的描写应该有相应信息的支撑，以丰富细节内容，增强可读性。1.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。LastSunday,LiHuawenttoXinhuaBookstoretobuyabook.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.上周日李华坐公交车去新华书店买书，过程却不太顺利。请设计一个情节，描述具体经过，词数80左右。•去书店的路上不顺利•在书店买书不顺利•出门》公交车没来》发现公交车停开》换车》车子故障》很晚到达书店•喜欢的书只剩一本》其他顾客拿到那本》询问售货员》售货员又找到一本》书本破损》买到后发现对面商店有同款LastSunday,LiHuawenttoXinhuaBookstoretobuyabook.Afterbreakfast,hecametothebusstopnearhishome.Aswasscheduled,thebusshouldarrivein5minutes.However,hewaitedforabout10minutesbutnobuscame.Afewminuteslater,heandotherpassengersweretoldtogetonanotherbuswhichwentonadifferentroute.Halfway,thebusbrokedown.Asaresult,hehadtochangethebusagain.Finally,hegottothebookstoreatthelunchtime,almosttwohourslaterthanexpected.2.Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff采取的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。YesterdayJeffwasintheclassroomtalkingtoastudentafterlunch.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.Jeff是一位非常关心学生的老师，昨天午饭后班里同学Kate突然鼻子流血不止。请设计一个情节详细描述Jeff才去的行动重点体现他对学生的关爱。约80词。•Jeff在教室里解决了问题•Jeff未能解决问题，因而求助医生体现出Jeff的急切和关爱。YesterdayJeffwasintheclassroomtalkingtoastudentafterlunch.SuddenlyKate’snosestartedtobleed.JeffrushedtoKateinnotime.HetoldKatetoleanherheadbackwards.Afterthat,hegotsometissuefromastudentandtriedtocleanKate’smouthandcheeks.Findingherbleedingimpossibletostop,Jeffphonedthedoctortoaskwhattodo.ThedoctoradvisedKatetobesenttohimassoonaspossible.Immediately,JeffwenttothedoctorwithKate.Hestayedtherewithheruntilshewasfinetwohourslater.实战演练3.王涛即将大学毕业，正在寻找工作，上周他参加了一次面试。请设计一个情节详细描述他进入面试房间后的动作，突出当时相对压抑的氛围。80词左右Hearinghisnamecalled,WangTaoopenedthedoorandsteppedin._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Hearinghisnamecalled,WangTaoopenedthedoorandsteppedin.Heimmediatelyfeltstaredat.Threejudges,seatedbehindthedesk,examinedhimfromheadtofeet.WangTaocheckedhissuit,findingnothingimproperandthenrelaxedabit.Afterhewasallowedtotakeaseat,WangTaoglancedatthejudgesandquicklymovedhissightbacktohisfingersasifhehaddonesomethingwrong.Thejudgesworenosmile,stilllookingathim.Hesatstraightup,tryingtokeepuphiscourage,andwaitedtobeaskedquestions.