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如何让你作文瞬间变得“高大上”?Howtopolishoursentences?1.要点可适当整合，用一个句子表达。1)姓名：钱学森出生年月：1911年出生地：上海被誉为“中国航天之父”2)纽约中央公园位于曼哈顿的中央。面积为340万平方米。QianXuesen,____________“fatherofChina’sspaceprogram”,wasbornin1911inShanghai.Centralpark,________thecentreofManhattan,coversanareaof3.4millionsquaremetres.regardedaslocatedin3)Manystudentsspendalotoftimeplayingcomputergames.It’sawasteoftimeandenergy.Manystudentsspendalotoftimeplayingcomputergames,_______________________________.whichisawasteoftimeandenergy_____________,theyparticipateinprogramsthathelpsociety.settingouttoYunnanTostandout2)Theywanttostandout,sotheyparticipateinprogramsthathelpsociety.Before___________________,wewereveryexcited.2.运用非谓语动词，使句子更简洁，更有文采。1）BeforewesetouttoYunnan,wewereveryexcited.3)ThefilmissetintheancientChina.Itisworthseeing.4)Whenyoufacedifficulty,youshouldnevergiveup.Thefilm____________________isworthseeing.setintheancientChinaWhenfacingdifficulty__________________,youshouldnevergiveup.____________________,theywerefrightened.WhentrappedintheliftTheydon’tknowwhat___________.todonext.5)Theywerefrightened,whentheyweretrappedinthelift.6)Theydon’tknowwhattheyshalldonext.7)Aftertheysettledinthecity,theybegantohuntforjobs._____________________,theybegantohuntforjobs.Havingsettledinthecity3.运用with结构，使句子更加简洁生动。1)Sinceelva’sphotoalbumiscomingoutthismonth,teenstalkedwithherabouthercareerandlife.2)Oursocietyisdeveloping,differentmodernnewsmediahavecomeintobeing.With______________________________________,teenstalkedwithherabouthercareerandlife.With____________________________,differentmodernnewsmediahavecomeintobeing.Elva’sphotoalbumcomingoutthismonththedevelopmentofoursociety4.借助介词或介词短语巧妙衔接句子。1)BecausetheInternetisdevelopingquickly,Icantalktomyfriendsfaraway.2)You’dbettertakeyourowncupsandchopsticks.Youmustn’tusepapercups.___________________,Icantalktomyfriendsfaraway.You’dbettertakeyourowncupsandchopsticks_________________________.Thankstotheinternetinsteadofusingpapercups5.运用恰当的连接词（并列连词、从属连词、和连接副词），增强句子间的逻辑性和紧凑性。1)Newyorkcityisafantasyworld.Youcandoalmostanythingthere.2)Paul’snicknameiscp3.Heestablishedthecp3foundationin2005.Newyorkcityisafantasyworld______youcandoalmostanythingPaul______nicknameiscp3establishedthecp3foundationin2005.whosewhere4)Thejourneyistough,butIwillnevergiveup.apartfrom/besides/aswellas/although/eventhough/evenif/meanwhile/so/however/also______________________,Iwillnevergiveup.Nomatterhowtoughitis6.巧用倒装句、感叹句、强调句等，增强语意。1)Heknewlittlethatfiveyearslaterhewouldbeplayingalongsidehischildhodhero.2)Peoplewillbegintounderstandsomethingaboutcopyrightprotectiononlywhenpeoplehavetopay.Little____________thatfiveyearslaterhewouldbeplayingalongsidehischildhodhero.Onlywhenpeoplehavetopay_______________tounderstandsomethingaboutcopyrightprotectionwillpeoplebegindidheknow3)ThewaytheyplaytogethermakesManchesterUnitedpopular.(强调主语)4)OnMay12,2008aterribleearthquakehappenedinWenchuan.（强调时间）Itis__________________aterribleearthquakehappenedinWenchuan.5)Thiscreaturetaughtmeabeautifullesson.(感叹句型)Itis____________________________makesManchesterUnitedpopular.thewaytheyplaytogetherthatonMay12,2008that____________________thiscreaturetaughtme!Whatabeautifullesson7.运用对称、排比句式，使句子节奏感强，富有音韵美。MyfathergrewupinaverysmallvillageinChina.Inthosedays,notmanyvillagerscouldread.Somyfatheropenedanightschooltoteachthemhowtoread.Withhishelp,manypeoplelearnedtowritetheirownnames;withhishelp,manypeoplelearnedtoreadnewspapersforthefirsttime;withhishelp,manywomenwereabletoteachtheirchildrenhowtoread.PengLiyuanwasbornin1962.ShewasborninShangdongProvinceinChina.SheisoneofthemostfamoussingersinChina.In1978,PengleftYunchengforJinan.InJinan,shewasdevotedtoherstudyofmusicandarts.In1982,PengappearedonthestageofthefirstSpringFestivalGalaEvening.Afterthat,sheandhersongsbecamepopularwithChinesepeople.…In2014,shebecamethefirstladyinChinaandmademanyvisitstoothercountrieswithherhusband.ShepromotesChinesetraditionalculturewhensheisinforeigncountries.SheisanelegantandindependentChineselady.…Educationisaboutwomenandthegirls.Itisimportantforgirlstogotoschoolbecausetheywillbecometheirchildren'sfirstteachersomeday.Butwomenstillaccountforoverhalfoftheworld'spoorinpopulationand60%ofadultswhocan'tread.Educationisabouttheyoungpeople.Youngpeoplearethefuture.Educationisimportantbecauseitnotonlygaveyoungpeopleknowledgeandskillsbutalsohelpthembecomeresponsiblecitizens.