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作文讲评开放作文请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。InyourspokenEnglishclass,yourteachershowsyouthefollowingpicture.Youareaskedtodescribethepictureandexplainhowyouunderstandit.结构：1/3描述+2/3议论时态：现在进行时、一般现在时类型：现象/寓意型特点：有人有物要素：大书、少年、眼镜、试卷细节3：试卷、眼镜-辛苦审图细节1：少年睡着了，面带微笑-努力后释然满意细节2：厚厚的大书刚打开-人生才刚刚开始审图：话题：书籍是我们的朋友要素：大书、少年、眼镜、试卷寓意：大书---知识的海洋/忙不完的学业---knowledge;schoolwork;workload;pressure少年---我们学生---senior3students眼镜---视力差---身体差…试卷---功课辛苦---efforts；burdenofexams；hardshipoflearning;审图问题：多角度挖掘积极意义1）忽略细节“眼镜、卷子”2）忽略少年睡觉的表情微笑、平静、满意3）大书厚厚的，刚打开一页抓细节揭寓意1）少年睡着了，面带微笑---努力后释然满意smile---satisfied;happy;sleep---getbored;beignorant;belazy;ignorance/laziness(消极或积极）2）厚厚的大书刚打开---人生才刚刚开始---lifelongfriendslikethebed/stopratherthangoahead3）试卷、眼镜就在少年的旁边，少年的手放在试卷上---虽很辛苦却放不下功课/对功课置之不理Onepossibleversion:Whataninterestingpicture!Aboyissleepingonalargeopenedbookwithsheetsofpaperandapairofglassesbesidehim.Hemusthavedonesomereadingbeforefallingasleep.Besides,thesweetsmileonhisfaceshowsthatheissatisfiedwithwhathehasgainedfromthebooks.Tomyunderstanding,thepictureintendstotellustheimportanceofdoingsomereading.Wecanincreaseourknowledge,broadenthemind,enrichourlifeandmakeourselvesrelaxedbyreadingbooks.Asastudent,Ithinkweshouldreadasmanygoodbooksaspossible.Onlyinthiswaycanweimproveourselvesgreatly.1）从大书的角度★开卷有益：Knowledgeiswhatmakesunfulfilled.正确的立意★书是心灵的港湾：Ithinkwhatthepictureconveystousisthatbooksareofgreatimportancetopeoplejustasbedsare.Itisfromthepicturethatwecanobservethatbooksareourlife-longfriends,friendswhocanhelpuswhenwearedebilitated,relieveuswhenweareforcedtobendtotheheavyburdenoflife,directuswhenwegetpuzzledandencourageuswhenwearehalfwaytowardsourdreams.Itisbooksthatprovideusapeacefulworldtorestourselvesbothinbodyandinsidethebody.正确的立意2）从少年的角度★读书的态度：爱读书；学无止境要刻苦学习终生学习Frommyperspective,thepicturetriestoconveythatoneshouldnotbeeasilysatisfiedwithwhathehaslearntorachieved.Whatthepictureconveystousisthatapersonoughttoimmersehimselfinbooksorknowledgewhenheiseagertostudysomethingdeeply.★做书的朋友：朝夕相处；终生相伴Onlyifwelongforknowledgeandkeepreadingcanwebecomeafull,readyandexactman.正确的立意3）从二者结合的角度：★高三生活现状：Inmyopinion,theimageaccuratelyreflectstheworryingconditionwestudentsarenowin.★正确对待高三学习生活：虽苦犹乐：AsfarasIamconcerned,thepicturewantstoconveythemessagethatwhenonebendshismindtodosomethingworthyofhispersistence,hardshipssurroundinghimseeminconsequential(微不足道的，无关紧要的）tohim.正确的立意苦尽甘来：Totrytogetaheadintheseverecompetition,heindulgeshimselfintheworldofknowledgeandreviewsnewlessonseverynight.Hissufferingwillpayoffwhenthefinaldaycomes.AsfarasIconcern,itisclearthattheboyissotiredbutsatisfied,forhemusthavebeenstudyingforalongtime.Theimageconveystousthatoneshouldstudyhardandconstantlytomakeoneselffullofgratificationandendlesshappiness.★正确处理休息与学习的关系：学会调节节奏：Trytobalancetherelationshipbetweenlearningandrelaxation.★教育的本质：Learningnotonlystandsforgettingknowledgefrombooks,butalsostandsforlearningfromreallife,fromwhichwe’llgetrealknowledge,healthaswellaspositiveattitudetowardseverything.Peoplewhoareburiedwithoverloadworkliveanunhealthylife.正确的立意不正确的立意：忽视知识，不求进取满足现状，不劳无获只睡不干活效率低下床是用来睡觉的，不应在床上学习珍惜时间，不浪费光阴可以考虑的立意：不能死读书读死书，从书海中走出来学习不能黑白颠倒，要处理好学习与效率的关系懒惰不可能成功可以接受的立意：Whatweshoulddoistoreaditinsteadofstoppingonthefirstpageanddreamingofthesuccess.Tomyunderstanding,thepictureaimstohumorouslycriticizethosepeoplewhoknownothingbutreadingbooks.Thesleepingyoungmanisjustanexampleofthosewhoburythemselvesintheirpilesofbooks,losingsightofallthebeautyintheirreallife.可以接受的立意：Amanwhoislazywillnotbeabletosucceedinlearning.Thethought-provokingpictureconveysthemessagethatweshouldstudybyheartwithanearnestattitudeaswellasactions…Asisuniversallyacknowledged,realactionsisalwayssuperiortouselessimaginations.如何使用引语论证？Inmyopinion,thispicturedoesmeansomethingprofoundanddirectivetous.Thebook’sprodigioussize,tosomedegree,symbolizesthevastandboundlessoceanofknowledge,towhichtheyoungboyissoaddictedthatthatheevensleepsinsidethebook!Oryoucansay,heiscompletelyimmersedintheseaofknowledge.AsBaconsays,“Readingmakesafullman.”Onlyifwelongforknowledgeandkeepreadingcanwebecomeafull,readyandexactman.“Historiesmakemenwise;poetswitty;themathematicssubtle;moralgrave.”Nomatterwhatweread,itisalwaysuseful.写作技巧经典释义法好文Frommypersonalperspective,Ibelievethispictureconveystheideathatbooksarethebestplaceforustorestourminds.Onthepagesofourmostcherishedbooksliethewordsthatcarrythefeelingsofanothersoul.Throughreading,wetraveltothemostremotemountains,witnessthemostbreathtakingsceneryandexplorethesecretsofthestarsabove.Ourmindsgobeyondthepersonallevelandmergeintooceanofhumanwisdom.There,weforgetourowngainsandlossesandreachanunparalleled（无比的，空前未有的）stateofpeace,sowemayrestoursoulsonthebookassweetlyastheboyinthepicture.写作技巧如何建立描议联系：Inthepicture,aboyissleepingonabigbookwhichisfullofknowledgeandheseemstohaveasweetdream.Ithinkwhatthepictureconveystousisthatbooksareofgreatimportancetopeoplejustasbedsare.Noonecansleepnicewithouthisbed,atthesametime;noonecanleadahappylifewithoutbooks.Booksnotonlyprovideuswithknowledgethatweneedinlife,butalsohelpusliftourburdensothatwecoul