公开课Polish your writing

茂名市第十中学英语科高考备考小组审题构思组织材料拟定提纲写出初稿修改润色写作步骤润色策略1.使用较高级的词汇3.使用恰当的连接词润色写作的策略2.使用较丰富的句式2.使用较丰富的句式JeremyLin—NewYorkKnicks(尼克斯队)starNewYorkKnicksstarJeremyLinhasnotonlysparkedNBAbasketballinterestinChina,hemayalsoinspirefanstolearnEnglish.NotonlyhasNewYorkKnicksstarJeremyLinsparkedNBAbasketballinterestinChina,hemayalsoinspirefanstolearnEnglish.AlthoughLinisverypopular,hestillhastoimprovehisstrengthtocompeteintheNBA.PopularasLinis,hestillhastoimprovehisstrengthtocompeteintheNBA.1.Moreandmoreteacherscamein,andtheclassroombecamecrowded.（with结构）Withmoreandmoreteacherscomingin,theclassroombecamecrowded.2.Hiswordsimpressedussodeeply.(主语从句）Whathesaidimpressedussodeeply.3.ZhouWenjuanisafastspeaker.Nobodycanunderstandher.(状语从句）ZhouWenjuanissuchafastspeakerthatnobodycanunderstandher.Rewritethefollowingsentences我去了香港才知道英语的重要性(一般句式）IrealizedtheimportanceofEnglishwhenIpaidavisittoHongKong.(强调句)ItwaswhenIpaidavisittoHongKongthatIrealizedtheimportanceofEnglish.(倒装句)OnlywhenIpaidavisittoHongKongdidIrealizetheimportanceofEnglish.Translatethesentenceinvariedways.Conclusion:Wecanpolishourwritingbyusingthefollowingsentencepatterns:定语从句状语从句强调句倒装句非谓语动词被动结构with结构名词性从句Activity1:ComparetwocompositionsanddecidewhichoneisbetterTheChinesegovernmenthadbeenconsidertolimitthepeoplewhowillsmokinginpublicinthebeginningofnextyear.ItwillacquirepublicplacesaroundChinashouldputonthesignsof“Don’tsmoke”.Andtheaimisachievingnosmokinginpublics.Itisnecessarytodoitbaseonthatabout3.5millionpeoplewhoweresmokerandmenaccqure75%,another25%werewomen.What’smore,around5.4millionpeopledieofsecond-handsmoke,over1millionpeopledieeveryyearbecauseofthis,andthatiswhyreasonthegovernmentdothisconclusion,andhopeallChinesecanunderstandspecialthesmoker.TheChinesegovernmenthasrecentlylaunchedanation-widebanonsmokinginpublic,whichwillcomeintoeffectonJanuary1st,2011.Aimingatbanningsmokinginallindoorpubliclocations,thegovernmentisgoingtoputupnosmokingsignsinsuchplaces.Amongtheroughly350millionsmokers,malesaccountfor75%,whilefemalestakeup25%Moreover,about540millionpeoplearebeingnegativelyinfluencedbysecond-handsmoke.Andmorethan10thousandpeoplelosetheirlivesowingtosecond-handsmokeeveryyear,whichindicatesthegreatneedtobringthebanintoforce.TheChinesegovernmenthadbeenconsidertolimitthepeoplewhowillsmokinginpublicinthebeginningofnextyear.ItwillacquirepublicplacesaroundChinashouldputonthesignsof“Don’tsmoke”.Andtheaimisachievingnosmokinginpublics.Itisnecessarytodoitbaseonthatabout3.5millionpeoplewhoweresmokerandmenaccqure75%,another25%werewomen.What’smore,around5.4millionpeopledieofsecond-handsmoke,over1millionpeopledieeveryyearbecauseofthis,andthatiswhyreasonthegovernmentdothisconclusion,andhopeallChinesecanunderstandspecialthesmoker.8pointsTheChinesegovernmenthasrecentlylaunchedanation-widebanonsmokinginpublic,whichwillcomeintoeffectonJanuary1st,2011.Aimingatbanningsmokinginallindoorpubliclocations,thegovernmentisgoingtoputupnosmokingsignsinsuchplaces.Amongtheroughly350millionsmokers,malesaccountfor75%,whilefemalestakeup25%Moreover,about540millionpeoplearebeingnegativelyinfluencedbysecond-handsmoke.Andmorethan10thousandpeoplelosetheirlivesowingtosecond-handsmokeeveryyear,whichindicatesthegreatneedtobringthebanintoforce.15pointswhichwillcomeintoeffectAimingatarebeingnegativelyinfluencedwhileMoreoverAndowingtolaunchedaccountfortakeupindicatesbringthebanintoforceDiscoveryActivity2:Polishthecompositionbyusingvariedsentencepatterns.Personally,Ithinkit’swrongfortheschooltohavetreatedthestudentsthisway.Theschool’sbehaviorisharmfultochildren’sself-respect.Thoughthesechildrenaresmall,theyalsoneedsomekindofrespectfromtheirschoolmatesandtheirteachers.Therefore,weshouldstopthisstupidbehaviorandsomeothereffectiveandappropriatewaysshouldbeputforwardtohelpchildrenimprovetheirexamscores.●西安一所小学给该校学习和行为不够好的学生戴绿领巾，你认为学校这样对待学生是否正确？WhattheschoolhasdoneSmallasthesechildrenare,behaviorshouldbestoppedthisstupidActivity3:Nowchallengeyourselfagain,polishingthecompositionproperly.最近一则关于“狼爸”通过严厉的家教,甚至鞭打子女促使他们考上北大的报道掀起了讨论的热潮。你们学校上周末也因此开展了一场“IsWolfDadapproachwrong?”的讨论,你对辩论赛作了一份总结。20%的学生认为“狼爸”方法正确80%的学生不赞成这种方法1.教会孩子自律2.解决中国父母过分溺爱孩子的问题1.方法粗暴,甚至是违法的2.使孩子更叛逆(rebellious)3.孩子童年快乐更重要［写作内容］1.以上表格的内容；2.你的看法。3.只能用5句话。4.开头已给出，不算句数。Lastweekend,adebatewasheldinmyschoolaboutwhetherWolfDadapproachiswrongandstudentsholddifferentopinions.20%ofthestudentsthinkWolfDadapproachisgood.Theythinkthatitcanteachachildself-discipline.Itisveryimportantfortheirgrowth.ToomanyChinesechildrenareruinedwithexcessiveloveandcaresoWolfDadapproachisagoodsolutiontothisbigproblem.80%ofthestudentsdisagreewiththisapproach.Theybelievethatitisrudeandevenillegal.Andchildrenmaybecomemorerebelliousanditismoreimportantforthemtohaveahappychildhood.IthinkWolfDadapproachistooextremeandisnotsuitableforeveryfamily.Thinkaboutthefollowingquestions:1.Doesitcontainalltheinformation?2.Canweseeadvancedvocabulariesandvariedsentencepatternsinit?3.Arethereanyproperlinkingwordsinittoconnectthewholearticleclosely?Lastweekend,adebatewasheldinmyschoolaboutwhetherWolfDadapproach