情景作文---细节添加

情景作文训练Reviewthewritingtask假如你是红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学雷锋日，你班组织了一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅图所提供的活动内容和过程写一篇英文短文，为你校校刊英语专栏投稿。seniorcitizenshome养老院Whatdoyouthinkofit?Passage1OurclassplannedtoorganizeanactivityonMarch5th,thedayinmemoryofLeiFeng.OnMarch4th,ourclassheldaclassmeetingtodiscusswheretogoonMarch5th.Wedecidedtopayavisittotheseniorcitizenshome.OnMarch5th,wedidsomecleaningintheseniorcitizenshome.SometaughtthemlearnEnglish.Someofusputonperformancefortheoldpeople.Wesaidgood-byetothem.PartIProblemsandsolutionsIdentifytheproblemIfyouareaskedtodescribethefeelingthewritinggivestoyouasthepicturebelow,whichonewouldyouliketochoose?B.A.PartIProblemsandsolutionsStrategy1PartIProblemsandsolutions通过增加细节使文章内容充实丰富。PartIProblemsandsolutions第一档18分－20分完全完成了试题规定的任务。·覆盖了所有内容要点；·运用了多样的句式和丰富的词汇；·语法或用词方面有个别错误，但为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现了较强的语言运用能力；·有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所写内容连贯、结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第二档15分－17分完全完成了试题规定的任务。·覆盖了所有内容要点；·运用的句式和词汇能满足任务要求；·语法和用词基本准确，少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；·使用了简单的语句间连接成分，所写内容连贯。达到了预期的写作目的。第三档12分-14分基本完成了试题规定的任务。·覆盖了内容要点；·运用的句式和词汇基本满足任务要求；·语法和用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。基本达到了预期的写作目的。丰富的内容高考情景作文评分标准覆盖了所有内容要点；覆盖了所有内容要点；覆盖了所有内容要点；丰富的内容LearningaimsAttheendoftheclass,wewillbeableto1.figureoutwhatdetailsarenecessaryforapassage;2.improveourwritingbyaddingnecessarydetailsproperly.PartIProblemsandsolutionsWhatdoyouthinkofit?PartIProblemsandsolutionsPassage2:March5wouldcomesoon.Wehadn’tsettleddownthequestionofhowwecouldhelptheelderly.Sowesattogethertoexchangeourmind.Thereweresomeideasflashedthroughourmind.OnMarch5th,wewenttotheseniorcitizenshome.Wedidsomecleaningthere.Somestudentsmoppedthefloor,sweptthefloorandcleanedthemirror.Innotime,everythingwascleanandbright.SometaughtthemlearnEnglish.Someofusputonperformancefortheoldpeople.Finally,wesaidgood-byetothem.Wewereverytiredbuthappy.3月5日是学雷锋日，你班组织了一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅图所提供的活动内容和过程写一篇英文短文。假如你是红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学雷锋日，你班组织了一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅图所提供的活动内容和过程写一篇英文短文，为你校校刊英语专栏投稿。PartIProblemsandsolutionsIdentifytheproblemIdentifyproblemPartIProblemsandsolutionsFinally,wesaidgood-byetothem.Wewereverytiredbuthappy.Somestudentsmoppedthefloor,sweptthefloorandcleanedthemirror.Innotime,everythingwascleanandbright.SometaughtthemlearnEnglish.Someofusputonperformancefortheoldpeople.March5wouldcomesoon.Wehadn’tsettleddownthequestionofhowwecouldhelptheelderly.Sowesattogethertoexchangeourmind.Thereweresomeideasflashedthroughourmind.OnMarch5th,wewenttotheseniorcitizenshome.Passage2:Wedidsomecleaningthere.PartIProblemsandsolutions细节描述应围绕主题展开，突出重点内容。Strategy2Strategy3PartIProblemsandsolutionsPassage2:March5wouldcomesoon.Wehadn’tsettleddownthequestionofhowwecouldhelptheelderly.Sowesattogethertoexchangeourmind.Thereweresomeideasflashedthroughourmind.OnMarch5th,wewenttotheseniorcitizenshome.Finally,wesaidgood-byetothem.Wewereverytiredbuthappy.Somestudentsmoppedthefloor,sweptthefloorandcleanedthemirror.SometaughtthemlearnEnglish.Someofusputonperformancefortheoldpeople.Wedidsomecleaningthere.Innotime,everythingwascleanandbright.要点动作细节活动效果PartIProblemsandsolutions可通过下面这些细节描写使文章内容丰富且生动：a.具体动作细节的描写。b.活动效果的描写。Strategy3c.人物感受的描写。SummaryPartIProblemsandsolutions增添细节围绕主题突出重点动作描写效果描写感受描写PartIIRewritingImproveyourwritingbyaddingnecessarydetails.PartIIIConsolidation【2012东城一模】假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的班长李华，去年冬天你们班开展了“为西藏希望小学献爱心”的活动。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文短文向某中学生英语报投稿，介绍你们本次献爱心活动的全过程。Lastwinter,wecarriedoutanactivitythemed“HelpingtheChildrenintheHopePrimarySchoolinTibet”.__________________________________________________________________3.Necessarydetails?1.Topic?2.Keypoints?Lastwinter,wecarriedoutanactivitythemed“HelpingtheChildrenintheHopePrimarySchoolinTibet”.Intheclassmeeting,wewatchedCCTVnewsandlearnedaboutwhatthelifeofthechildrentherewaslikeandallofuswereshocked.Sowedecidedtodoourbit.Weputupsomepostersontheschoolnoticeboardandgaveoutthehandoutstotheschoolmates.Thenextday,manystudentstookpartinthedonationontheplayground.Somedonatedtheirpocketmoneyandsomebroughttheirnewclothesandquilts.Afterthat,wewenttothepostofficetomailthedonationstoTibet.Wearemorethangladtohavesuchkindofactivities,forwenotonlysetupthebridgeoffriendshipwiththechildreninTibetbutalsoshowourlovetothechildrenthere.