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读后续写（2017.6浙江卷）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追赶）.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hewasasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。一、阅读理解能力(一).浅层的信息定位能力：who,when,where,what,why,how等审前文大意以及要点:①核心内容解读：Mac与朋友一起去游玩。一个朋友的自行车坏了，就让他先走，说之后他们会赶上他的。他在前行的时候，却意外被狼追赶了。于是他拼命逃，却得不到援助。这时，一辆车停在了他前面......②要点：Who:Mac,hisfriends,PaulandBeekyWhen:onabright,warmJulyafternoonWhere:fromhishometoAlaskaWhat:tookatripandmadeanadventureWhy:enjoyedthelife(二).深层的文本分析能力：①理清故事的发展线索②关注故事的语言风格【情节分析】Mac与朋友骑行——朋友车坏，让Mac先行——Mac独行，欣赏风景——被狼追赶，最初误以为是狗——心跳加速，朝狼喷洒喷雾——狼后退，一分钟后又赶上，咬破帐篷包——再次喷洒喷雾，狼更快地追赶——Mac向经过的汽车求助，同时不敢减速——Paul和Becky开车路过，发现险情——Mac听到汽车声，拦下汽车，而狼就离他十几码远。二、由读到写的思维能力细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节。1.抓住首句设问。Para.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Question1:Whosecarwasit?Question2:Whydiditstop?Question3:HowdidMacfeel?Question4:WhatwouldMacdo?Question5:DidPaulandBeckyofferedhelp?Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Question1:Aftertheyarrived,whatwouldtheydo?Question2:Howdidtheyexpressgratitude?Question3:WeretheytocontinuethebiketriptoAlaska?2.Theunderlinedwords:Mac,friends,bicycle,pedaled,home,wolf,jumped,cars,climb,PaulClassify10keywordsintodifferentgroups:Characters：Mac,friends,wolf,PaulBehaviors:pedaled,jumped,climbTools：bicycle,carsPlaces:home三、书面表达能力(一).语言的丰富性1.词汇、句式、语法的多样性句式结构：简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。语法结构：主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。词汇选择：常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。修辞手法：比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。【词汇精炼】①赤手空拳barehands②与……斗争fightwith/against③靠近approach④危险状况dangeroussituation⑤僵持状态deadlock⑥撤退，逃跑withdraw/runaway⑦威胁threat⑧在远处inthedistance【佳句锤炼】①他们两手空空，不敢与狼搏斗。Withnothingonthehand,theydarednottofightagainstthewolf.②与此同时，狼可能会感觉到周围人的威胁，所以它开始慢慢后退。Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople’sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.【句式升级】Hesawthewolf’sfacenearhim.Heusedhisfisttohitthefaceofthewolfstrongly.Seeingthewolf’sfacesoclosetohim,hehititwithallhisstrength/heavilyusinghisfist.2.情感表达的多样性Mac’sfeeling：Surroundings:Macheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal.Thoughts:Hethoughtfondlyofhiswife“Man,that’sabigdog!”Actions:Mac’sheartjumped.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagainMacwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcars.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,微技能之细节描写（表示感到害怕）【中译英】1、当看到那只凶恶的狼时，Mac感到很害怕。______________________________________2、请你在该句子基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系以及语意的合理。1）Mac吓得直发抖，不敢动弹。_______________________________________2）Mac被深深地恐惧感所控制，手心出汗。_______________________________________3）恐怖的表情掠过Mac的脸庞。_______________________________________【答案】1.Atthesightoftheferociouswolf,Macfeltveryscared/frightened.2.1）Macshookwithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.2）Macwasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorrorandhispalmsweresweating