c 7 高中英语作文写作――如何写建议信 (1)

书面表达专题---Howtowritealetterforadvice如何算是一篇好文章？－覆盖了所有的要点－应用了较多的语法结构和词汇－有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。要点全词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）语言地道连接词写作要点：1.建议信：作者就有关问题进行分析并针对这些问题提出自己的看法和建议。2.对象：1）写给个人，就其遇到的某个问题提出自己的看法和观点；2）写给某个组织和机构，就改进其服务提出建议或忠告。3.基本框架：开头（beginning）----开门见山，向对方陈述自己的观点.(stateyouridea)主体(body)----对所提出的问题进行分析并说明理由，接着提出自己的建议(reasonsandevidence)结尾(ending)----呼应开头，重申观点(restateyouropinion.)4.注意事项：1）建议信要写出写信的原因，建议的内容，提出建议的理由2）建议的角度要多样化，避免重复。3）符合英文信件的基本格式；4）基本时态多用一般现在时和一般将来时。常用套语A．建议信开头常用句式(照应材料,表明写作意图)1.AfterIreadyourletterinthenewspaper,Iamsorrytoknowthat…2.Iamverygladtohearthatyouwantto…3.Iknowyouhavetroublein…afterreadingyourletter4.Iamwritingtoyouforthepurposeof…5.Iamwritingtosharesomeadvice/opinionswithyou.B.表达建议（body）1.Ithinkitwouldbemorebeneficialifyoucould…2.Iwouldliketosuggest/recommendthat…3.…isagood/greatidea.4.Inmyopinion,itwouldbewisetotakethefollowingaction.5.Whenitcomestosuchasituation,Iwouldliketosuggestthatyoushould…C.建议信结尾常用句式1.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseproposals/suggestions/recommendationspractical/useful/helpful.2.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucouldconsidermysuggestions.3.Intheend,Iwillbegladifyoufindmysuggestionsuseful.假如你叫孙军，是实验高中的学生，要给市长写一封信，反映学校门前交通拥挤现象，包括以下要点：参考词汇:穿行threadone’sway天桥overpass问题建议学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。第一步：审题养成重视审题的习惯。虽然基础写作题是半封闭性的，但审题仍然十分重要。现以样题为例，谈谈如何审题：思考的问题样题分析第几人称？（person）文章的体裁是什么？要写的文章主题是什么(topic)怎样安排信息点的顺序？(order)动作是什么时候发生的？(时态)(when)第一人称一封信建议政府采取措施舒缓交通拥挤的状况说理逻辑性一般现在时三个步骤Step1ListthekeypointsStep2MakesentencesStep3.Formapassageandpolish第二步：搜索相关词组或句型问题建议学校和一所小学毗邻，对着大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家长接送。交通更拥挤；学生过街在车辆中穿行危险。政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。学校与一所小学毗邻,对着大街standnextto…primary…face/befacedwith…themainstreet…There’saprimaryschoolnearourschool,andbothschoolsfacethemainstreet.Ourschoolstandsnexttoaprimaryschool,anditisfacedwith/facingthemainstreet.推荐句型：Therebe+并列句Standingnexttoaprimaryschool,ourschoolisfacedwith/facesthemainstreet.stands/lies/isourschool,facedwith/facingamainstreet.Nexttoaprimaryschool润色小建议可将standnextto替换为高级词汇/短语belocatednextto(near/beside/by)在…对面beoppositetoThetrafficisbusyduringtherushhours.•高峰期交通繁忙…..traffic….duringtherushhoursDuringtherushhours,therearesomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroadthat…Duringtherushhours,thereisalotoftraffic.so….that…with结构Withsomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroad,…润色小建议“高峰期”可意译:atpeaktime，“交通繁忙”可译为:trafficjamcongestion交通堵塞加之孩子小,家长接送,交通更拥挤send…to…,fetch….,which…非谓语结构….Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,makingthetrafficheavier.加之孩子小，家长接送，交通更拥挤What’smore,…pickup….make….Tomakethingsworse/What’sworse,manyparentscomingtopickuptheirchildrenmakethestreetmorecrowded.Inaddition/Additionally,manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.What’smore,parentsoftenattendtheirkidstoschool,resultinginmoreserioustrafficjams.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.学生过街在车辆中穿行危险threadone’sway，whendoingItisdangerousforthestudentstothreadtheirwayamongbusesandcarswhencrossingtheroad.固定句型Itis+adj.for…todo….suggest/suggestion,takesteps/measures/actiontodo…suchas政府应采取措施,如修天桥等。Mysuggestionisthatthegovernmentshould…表语从句固定句型Itishightimethat…(虚拟语气)Itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuilding…Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakestepssuchasbuildinganoverpass.简单句反面范例反面范例反面范例反面范例不推荐字体优点：考生能灵活地处理各个信息点，大量运用非谓语，介词短语，从句，连词等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显个性和语言功底。优秀作文范例1优秀作文范例2优点：考生的书面整洁，字体美观，运用therebe句型，介词短语，从句，非谓语，套用句式等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。优秀作文范例3优点：考生运用倒装句，so…that句式，精彩的表达以及虚拟语气等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显内涵和语言功底。优秀作文范例4优点：该考生最大的特色是运用了大量的高级词汇等来提亮句子，使得文章更彰显深厚的语言底蕴。优秀作文范例5优秀作文范例6Congestionn.阻塞,拥挤,充血Nexttoaprimaryschoolstandsourschool,facingamainstreet.Whenitcomestotrafficjams，it’scrammedwithcarsduringtherushhour.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.Asaconsequence,it’sofgreatdangerforthestudentstogothroughthetraffic.Accordingtothephenomenonstatedabove,itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuildinganoverpass.如何给阅卷人以好的第一直观印象整体三部分1.Heading点题；一两个句子；概括性；暗示性2.Body中心记述部分；层次分明3.Ending小结；呼应主题适当运用模板Dear_____(对象)，Iamwritingtoexpressmyviewsconcerning______(问题).Firstandforthemost,_______(建议一).Inaddition,_____(建议二).What’smore_____(建议三).Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsuseful.Yourssincerely,LiMingDear____,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_____,andI’lltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(以我拙见),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_____.Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadytodiscussthismatterwithyoutofurtherdetails.Goodluckwithyou/your______(祝愿).YourssincerelyLiMingDearBob,I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowto(引出主题).Hereareafewsuggestions.First,itisimportantto.Then,italsohelpsto.Besides,itshouldbeagoodideato.Youcanalso.(此三句不同的句式提出建议)Asto,Isuggest(有时根据需要具体到某一反面).Inaddition,(其他建议).I'msure(预测可能的结果，给对方以行动的信心和决心).I'mlookingforwardto(表达愿望).Sincerelyyours,LiHua假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。注意：可