八年级英语写作公开课

ALessonofWriting假如你叫肖鹏，是英语学习小组组长。英语课上老师要求展开小组调查，内容包括爱好、理想职业及原因，然后由各组组长在班内汇报。请你根据表格内容提示，介绍本组成员及自己的情况，写一篇80词左右的调查汇报。SurveyNamesHobbiesDreamJobsReasonsYiKewritingwriterBringherpleasureandsuccessLiRuitrave11ingguideExperience1ifeand1earnaboutdifferentcu1turesWuFan1ookingafteranima1sWWFworkerhe1panima1s1iveinpeaceI(XiaoPeng)•认真审题，明确写作主题、体裁、人称、字数、结构、时态、提示要点和补充信息。写作第一步审假如你叫肖鹏，是英语学习小组组长。英语课上老师要求展开小组调查，内容包括爱好、理想职业及原因，然后由各组组长在班内汇报。请你根据表格内容提示，介绍本组成员及自己的情况，写一篇80词左右的调查汇报。SurveyNamesHobbiesDreamJobsReasonsYiKewritingwriterBringherpleasureandsuccessLiRuitrave11ingguideExperience1ifeand1earnaboutdifferentcu1turesWuFan1ookingafteranima1sWWFworkerhe1panima1s1iveinpeaceI(XiaoPeng)主题字数人称体裁提示要点补充信息一般现在时时态•用简单的句子或短语列出文章要点。列写作第二步YiKe'shobbyiswriting.Shewantstobeawriter.Shethinkswritingmakesherrelaxedanditbringsherpleasureandsuccess.LiRuilikestravellingbest.Hewantstobeaguide.Hecanexperiencedifferentlifeandlearnaboutdifferentcultures.WuFan'shobbyislookingafteranimals.HewantstobeaWWFworkertohelpanimalsliveinpeace.Mydreamistoworkatschool.IwanttobeanEnglishteacher.BecauseIlikespeakingEnglish.Icanbegoodwithchildrenanditmakesmehappyandpleased.加•加首尾，使结构完整。•可以采取总分总结构或者总分结构，开头或结尾的句子应注意简洁，漂亮。写作第三步：YiKe'shobbyiswriting.Shewantstobeawriter.Writingbringsherpleasureandsuccess.LiRuilikestravellingbest.Hewantstobeaguide.Hecanexperiencedifferentlifeandlearnaboutdifferentcultures.WuFan'shobbyislookingafteranimals.HewantstobeaWWFworkertohelpanimalsliveinpeace.IwanttobeanEnglishteacher.IlikespeakingEnglish.Icanbegoodwithchildrenanditmakesmehappyandpleased.Boysandgirls，Everyonehashobbiesanddreams.Nowletmeshareourswithyou.Ihopeweenjoyourhobbiesandourdreamscancometrue.aniceheadanicetailanicebody连•恰当运用关联词句，使得文章层次清晰，各个部分衔接自然。写作第四步：英语写作时常用的过渡语:•表并列或递进：and,besides,both…and，notonly…butalso，what’smore,…•表转折：but,yet,however,though，although…•表因果关系：because,so,therefore,asaresult…•表先后顺序：First,Second,Third,Next,Then,Finally…•表时间关系：when,while,after,before,then,…•表列举说明：forexample,forinstance,suchas…•发表观点：inmyopinion,tomyunderstanding,frommypointofview,…•表总结陈词：ingeneral,allinall,inaword,generallyspeaking…•Boysandgirls，•Everyonehashobbiesanddreams.Nowletmeshareourswithyou.•YiKe'shobbyiswriting.Shewantstobeawriter.Shethinkswritingmakesherrelaxedanditbringsherpleasureandsuccess.LiRuilikestravellingbest.Hewantstobeaguide.hecanexperiencedifferentlifeandlearnaboutdifferentcultures.WuFan'shobbyislookingafteranimals.HewantstobeaWWFworkertohelpanimalsliveinpeace.IwanttobeanEnglishteacher.IlikespeakingEnglish.Icanbegoodwithchildrenanditmakesmehappyandpleased.•Ihopeweenjoyourhobbiesandourdreamscancometrue.alsoInthiswayBecause美•选好词句，美化文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。写作第五步：•Boysandgirls，•Everyonehashobbiesanddreams.Nowletmeshareourswithyou.•YiKe'shobbyiswriting.Soshethinkswritingmakesherrelaxedanditalsobringsherpleasureandsuccess.LiRuilikestravellingbest.Inthiswayhecanexperiencedifferentlifeandlearnaboutdifferentcultures.WuFan'shobbyislookingafteranimals.IwanttobeanEnglishteacher.BecauseIlikespeakingEnglish.Icanbegoodwithchildrenanditmakesmehappyandpleased.•Ihopeweenjoyourhobbiesandourdreamscancometrue.Shewantstobeawriter.Shewantstobeasuccessfulwriterinthefuture,justlikeMoYan.Hewantstobeaguide.Heislookingforwardtotravellingabroadsohewantstobeaguideinforeigncountries.HewantstobeaWWFworkertohelpanimalsliveinpeace.Whenshegrowsup,shewantstobeaWWFworkertosavetheanimalsindangerandhelpanimalsliveinpeace.适当运用名言或俗语Timeismoney.一寸光阴一寸金Timewaitsfornoman.岁月不待人Knowledgeispower.知识就是力量Wherethereisawill,thereisaway.有志者，事竟成Practicemakesperfect.熟能生巧Itsnevertoooldtolearn.活到老，学到老……SkillOneMakeyoursentencescorrect•Goodgoodstudy,daydayup.•Weshoulddosportsaweekonce.•WatchTVtoomuchisbadforyoureyes.•Thereisgoingtohaveameetingtoday.•IhopeIcancometruemydream.onceaweekWatchingbeachieveSkillTwoExpressindifferentwaysWhenhespoke,hegotmoreexcited.Themorehespoke,themoreexcitedhegot.WeshouldlearnEnglishgrammar.It’simportanttolearnEnglishgrammar.他们在海滩上听音乐。ATheylistenedtothemusiconthebeach.BTheyenjoyedthemusiconthebeach.她还小，搬不动这么重的箱子。ASheisveryyoung.Shecan’tcarrytheheavybox.BSheistooyoungtocarrytheheavybox.CSheissoyoungthatshecan’tcarrythe…DSheisnotoldenoughtocarrythe…书面表达写作技巧审列加连美中考作文评分标准第五档（很好）（25-21分）完全完成了试题规定的任务，涵盖了所有内容要点，或在发挥时内容有新意或亮点；语言基本无误，行文连贯，表达清楚。第四档（好）（20-16分）完成试题规定的任务，涵盖了基本内容要点；语言有少量错误，行文基本连贯，表达基本清楚。第三档（一般）（15-11分）基本完成试题规定的任务，写出了一些内容；语言有一些错误，行文不够连贯。第二档（较差）（10-6分）未能恰当完成试题规定的任务，只能写出个别要点；语言错误较多，未能清楚传达信息。第一档（差）（5-0分）未能完成试题规定的任务，只能写出与内容有关的一些单词；语言错误较多，未能清楚传达信息。Romeisnotbuiltinaday.Tips:•1.卷面工整。•2.规范写作过程。•3.多背诵美文，积累素材。HaveaTry!书面表达•以“Ihaveadream”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文。•Sentencepatternsforreference(以下句型供参考）•Mydreamistobe…/todo…/togo…•Ienjoy/like/prefer…•Tomakemydreamcometrue,I…•Ifmydreamcomestrue…Thanks!