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高考英语写作训练思路乌市一中司剑帆评分时词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分；如书写教差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次；评分时应注意内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。第一档（差）（1-6分）未完成试题规定的任务*明显漏掉一些主要内容,写了一些无关内容*语法结构单调，词汇项目有限*较多语法或词汇错误，影响了对内容的理解*缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯高考书面表达评分原则第二档（较差）（7-12分）未恰当完成试题规定的任务*漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容*语法结构单调，词汇项目有限*有语法或词汇错误，影响了对内容的理解*较少使用语句间的连接词，内容缺少连贯性高考书面表达评分原则第三档（适当）（13–18分）基本完成了试题规定的任务。*虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容*应用的语法和词汇能满足任务的要求*有一些语法和词汇错误，但不影响理解*应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。高考书面表达评分原则高考书面表达评分原则第四档（好）（19–24分）完成了试题规定的任务*虽漏掉一两个次重点,但覆盖所有主要内容*语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求*语法或词汇应用基本准确，些许错误主要是尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致，*应用简单的语句间的连接词，使全文紧凑第五档（很好）（25-30分）完全完成了试题规定的任务*覆盖所有主要内容*应用了较多语法结构和词汇*语法或词汇方面有些许错误.但为尽力使用较复杂语法结构或较高级词汇所致;具有较强的语言应用能力*有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文紧凑高考书面表达评分原则厌倦点:语言繁琐、层次不清，令人感到单调、乏味词汇有错误，句子结构单一、重复表达不地道、汉语味太浓书写潦草、令人无法辨认、无法评价兴奋点，也就是你作文中的亮点:语言简洁、层次清晰选词精确，句式多变内容连贯，表达地道，无明显错误书写规范，卷面整洁阅卷教师的厌倦点和兴奋点英语作文训练的三大步首先,文从字顺的初级阶段其次,多悟思变的过渡阶段最后,文质兼美的高级阶段文从字顺的初级阶段语言错误多，汉语式的句子多多数考生写的作文要点很全面，但是由于英语语言基础知识不扎实，语言不规范，也往往失分严重。最突出的语言错误有以下几种：（1）主谓不一致。①FatherandIamgoingtovisither.②Myuncleoftengotothecinemahimself.（2）时态、语态混用。①Themealissonicethatweallenjoyeditverymuch.②Theoldmanknockeddownbythecarandinjuredbadly.（3）句子成分残缺。①Butthecarwhichpaintedreddidn’tstop.②Theyoungmanrunninginthestreetfast.③Hewouldn’tabletoworkouttheproblem.④Weallagainstallformsofterroristactivities.文从字顺的初级阶段（4）习惯搭配乱用。①Iverylikethenovel.②Thenwesetoffdigging,plantingandwatering.（5）汉式英语。a)Thecarisyellowcolour.b)Hecostfiveyuantobuyanewdictionary.c)Recentlyourvillagehastakenplacegreatchanges.d)ThefactorybrokeoutabigfirelastSunday.e)Chinesepopulationismany.（6）名词单、复数不分。①HewillgiveusatalkonAmericanfilm.②Heisoneofthebestplayerinourschool.文从字顺的初级阶段（7）赘词现象严重。①Atlast,thelostboyreturnedback.②Ononeday,hewenttothecinema.（8）用词不当。①Hedoesn’twanttosaysomethingaboutthismatter.②Ihopeyoutohelpthegirlwithherhomework.（9）拼写和词形变化错误。①Thecarhittedtheoldmananddrivedaway.②Onhiswaytoschool,hesewalittlegirl.（10）前后人称不一致。①Swimmingandfootballarehisfavouritesports,helikesitallhislife.②Thelittlegirlusuallygoestoschoolat7inthemorning,buttodayhewaslateforschool.文从字顺的初级阶段（11）结构错误:a)Havingheardthenews,herheartbeatfasterandfaster.b)Hewroteabout300stories,someofthemhadbeentranslatedintoChinese.c)Weshouldteachchildrendon’tplayandridebikesontheroad.d)Therewerehundredsofstudentscouldn’tgotoschoolbecausetheywerepoor.(12)词义不清楚:a)Hemanagedtoswimacrosstheriver,butfailed.b)I’vedelayedtoreturnyouthebookEnglishUsage,whichyouborrowedmetwodaysbefore.c)Iwasverydifficulttorefuseandhadtoreceiveherinvitation.句子表达多样性的途径高考英语书面表达新的评分标准要求考生使用高级词汇、复杂句式、过渡性词语和不同的表达方式，从而增加文章的可读性和表现力。a)改变句子的语序，通过倒装某成分、倒装句、强调句、感叹句等手段实现句子形式的多样化，使句子跌宕起伏，文章生动活泼。a.Hegotupveryearlytocatchthebus.b.Thegirl,hungryandthirsty,wentbackhome.c.Wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogetherearlyinthemorning.d.Tomknewhismistakesonlythen.e.Thenewsthatourfootballteamhadwoncamesoon.f.Itbegantorainjustatteno’clock.g.OurbraveAhFuhadsavedmylittlesister.h.Weweregladtoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell.多悟思变的过渡阶段多悟思变的过渡阶段b)用复合句（定从、状从、名词性从句、并列句等）来代替简单句，使语言由松散变凝练，增强句子的连贯性和句意的表现力，使行文更富文采。a）IwaswalkingalongParkRoadtowardstheeast.Atthattime,anelderlymancameoutoftheparkontheothersideofthestreet.b)Ilikereading.MybrotherlikeswatchingTV.c)IstudiedChinese,maths,English,physics,chemistryandcomputeratschool.d)IheardthatBeijingwonthebidforthe2008OlympicGames.Iwasexcited.e)TheflatisinabuildingonFangcaostreet.ItisnotfarfromJianxinChineseSchool.f)Thisistheplace.Iworkedwiththefarmersinthepast.g)ThebabyisdueinNovember.Bythattime,thenewhouseshouldbefinished.h)Marystoodinfrontofthewindow.Fromthatplaceshecouldseeherclassmatesplayingfootball.i)Wehadtostandtheretocatchtheoffender.c)同位语从句与写作1.IbelieveyouhavehardlyanyideahowanxiousI’vebeenforyoursafety.2.Ihadlittleideaatthattimewhethertheywerewillingtogivemeahand.3.IhavehardlyanydoubtthatshecandoaswellasIcan.4.Ihavenoimpressionwhathehaddonebefore.5.Inmyopinion,thereseemstobeafearinhimthathewouldbetakeninbyus.6.Thereseemstobenopossibilitythathighoilpriceswillhaveaprofoundimpactontheworldeconomy.7.TheproblemmustbepaidattentiontothatmoreandmoreschoolchildrenareaddictedtoInternetgames.8.Yoursuggestionmadelastweekthatweworkersshouldgetapayrisehasnowbeenadopted.9.Wordcamethatourteamhadwonthegame.10.Mystudentsholdthepointthatwhatabooksaysisright.11.DadmadeapromiselastnightthatifIpassedtheexam,hewouldbuymeapresent.12.Itisaninterestingfactthatwhenmentrytodothesamethingsasnaturedoes,theyusuallyhavetodotheminadifferentway.多悟思变的过渡阶段d)多使用短语结构来简化从句或合并短句：常见的短语结构有分词短语、介词短语、名词短语、同位语结构和独立主格结构。20)Itwasfine.Wewentout.21)Classwasover.Studentsrushedoutoftheclassroom.22)Whenyouarecrossingthestreet,youmustbeverycareful.23)Ifthetreesweregivenmorewater,theywouldhavegrownbetter.24)Theyoungmancouldn’thelpcryingwhenheheardthebadnews.25)MybrotherwasridingthebikeandIsatontheseatbehindhim.26)Thegirldidn’tdaretoanswerthequestion,asallthestudentswerelookingather.27)Thegirlwashardworkingandcareful,andshepassedthetest.28)SunShuweiisaboyof14.Heisaworldchampionindiving.29)It’sasmallflat.It’s25squaremeters.Ithasabedroom,abathroomandakitchen.30)Anewrailwayisbeingbuiltinmyhometown.31)There