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2013年浙江高考英语作文精讲精练【原题回放】【2013浙江卷】请以“OneThingI’mProudof”为题，用英语写一篇100~120个词的短文，记述一件你自己认为得意的事情。要求如下：1.记述事情的经过；2.简要说明你感到得意的原因或从中得到的启示。注意：文章的标题已给出，不计入词数。【参考范文】OneThingI’mProudofIstillrememberhowIbecameagoodtabletennisplayer.ThefirstdayIwenttohighschool,Isawsomeofmyclassmatesplayingtabletennis.Amazedathowskillfultheywere,Iwasdeterminedtobejustasgood.Lateron,Ioftenwatchedthemcarefullytolearntheirtechniques.ThenIkeptpracticinguntilIbecameconfidentenoughtochallengethegoodplayers.AttheendofthetermIbecameoneofthebestplayersinmyclass.Iamreallyproudofthisexperience,becauseithelpsmerealizethatweallcanfulfillourpotentialandachieveourgoalsthroughhardwork.ItalsohelpsmebetterunderstandtheproverbPracticemakesperfect.”【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，语言简练流畅，时态、人称和标点符号使用正确，很好的完成了写作任务。在作文中作者开门见山提出自己想要写的事情，然后详细记叙当时的情况。最后表明了自己对这件事的认识和想法。在文中作者使用的Lateron,Then，Attheendof等词汇清楚地表明了事情的发展过程，给人一种脉络清晰的感觉。此外文中高级词汇和短语fulfillourpotential，achieveourgoals和谚语“Practicemakesperfect”的使用都成为了文章的亮点所在。【品鉴与提升】示例一OnethingIamproudofEveryonehasthingswhichheisproudof,sodoI.Threeyearsago,itwasasunnyday.Everythingseemedtobeinharmony.Suddenly,aterriblethinghappened.Adogwasrunningafteralittleboy.Itsuddenlyhitmethattheboywasindanger.Ithrewstonesatthedog,butthedogwantedtobiteme.Thankstothepassers-by,Iwassaved.Afterawhile,theboy’smotherarrivedandpraisedme.Shesaidgratefullythathersonwasokayjustbecauseofme.IamproudofwhatIdid.WhenIwasdeterminedtosavetheboy,Ievenignoredmysafety.Iwon’tregretdoingit.修改一OnethingIamproudofAsisoftenthecase,everyonehasatleastonethingthatheisproudof.Tobesure,Iamnoexception.Itwasasunnydaythreeyearsago.Everythingseemedtobeinharmony.Somewhatunexpectedly,aterriblethinghappened.AboywasbeingchasedbyanaggressiveTibetandog(被动),screaminginfear.Itsuddenlyhitmethattheboywasindanger.Ithrewstonesatthedog,butthedogfoughtbackagainstme!Itwasthankstothepassers-bythatIwassavedintimeofemergency.After(whatseemed10minutes),theboy’smotherarrivedandthoughthighlyofme.Shesaidgratefullythathersoncouldn’thavebeensavedwithoutmytimelyhelp(双否定).IamproudofwhatIdid.Determinedtogotohisrescue(分词),Ievenputmysafetyaside.BynomeanswillIregretdoingitdespitemysufferings(倒装).示例二OnethingIamproudofWherethereisawill,thereisaway.WhenIbegantolearntocook,Ifailedmanytimes.Butintheend,whatiscookedbymeisverydelicious,becauseIcarriedonwithit.Thefirstdishisfriedegg.Itisdifficultformetocontrolthetemperatureofoil.Inordertolearnitwell,agreatnumberofeggswerewasted.InevergaveupsothatIfriedeggsbetter.Successcallsforfirmness.ThereasonwhyIlearnedtocookisthatmymothercanrestaftershefinishedherwork.Iamproudofcookingonmyown.(Comestraighttothepoint)修改二OnethingIamproudofWherethereisawill,thereisaway.Itmakesmeproudtobeabletocookdeliciousfriedeggafteralotofhardstrugglesasfollows.BeforeIcouldcooktastyfriedegg,Ihadfailedmanytimes.Itisahardnutformetocontroltheoiltemperature.Inordertogetthetrickofthetrade,agreatnumberofeggswerewasted.Tomakemattersworse,oncethehotoilsplashedontomyfaceandIgotaslightburn.Adiscouragingideapoppedintomymindlikeaflash----Iwantedtogiveup.However,Ididn’tbecauseIwasfullyawarethatquitterscan’tbewinnersandwinnerscan’tbequitters.Ittakesperseverancetobeasuccess!ThereasonwhyIlearntocookisthatIwantmymothertohavemorerestafterwork.Iamproudofmyselfforbeingabletodoitafterpainstakingattempts.【反思演练】请挑选出以上文章中吸引你的词组与句子，并用在你的作文上，写一篇语言生动的作文。要严格按照题目要求作文，不要脱离题意。参考词汇：skillful；fulfillourpotential；achieveourgoals；proverb；beinharmony；somewhat；aggressive；foughtbackagainst；timelyhelp；putmysafetyaside；firmness；getthetrickof；splashed；aware；painstakingattempts参考句子：Amazedathowskillfultheywere…Asisoftenthecase…Tobesure,Iamnoexception.Somewhatunexpectedly…Shesaidgratefullythathersoncouldn’thavebeensavedwithoutmytimelyhelp.BynomeanswillIregretdoingitdespitemysufferings.Successcallsforfirmness.…afteralotofhardstrugglesasfollows.Iwasfullyawarethatquitterscan’tbewinnersandwinnerscan’tbequitters.Ittakesperseverancetobeasuccess.OnethingIamproudof