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DISCUSSION:Whatisagoodwriting？Content:everythingneededincludedwhichisrelatedtoyourview.(内容要完整)Structure:*Goodbeginningandending(好的开头结尾)*Wellorganizedandsmoothlydeveloped(结构合理,行文流畅)Language:*NoChinglish(避免中文式英文)*NoGrammaticalmistakes(没有语法错误)*Withexactlyusedwordsandrelativelychangedsentencepatterns(词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化)I'mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesofmylifesincethereductionoflearningloadwasbroughtin.Beforethat,Iwasoftenexhaustedatweekends.Iattendedschoolandhadclassesthewholeday.Intheevening，IwasoftenforcedtodomyboringhomeworkandIcouldnotgotobeduntil11:30.Sincetheprogramofreducinglearningloadwasintroduced,mylife,however,hasbecomemuchmoreinteresting.Ifrequentlypayavisittomuseums,dropinatcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmyleisuretime.Afterlunch,IwatchTV,readstoriesandlookthroughnewspaperstoenrichmyself.NolongerdoIstayup;onthecontrary,Igotobedatabout10p.m.Inshort,Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow.Enjoythefollowingparagraphs:Nowinthecountryareas,therearemanychildrenoutofschool.Thereasonscanbelistedasfollow.____________,mostfamiliesaretoopoortosendtheirchildrentoschool.__________,theyhavenochoicebuttostayathomeandmakemoney.asaresult;Inaddition;Tobeginwith;HoweverTobeginwithAsaresult使用恰当的连接词Useproperlinkingwords__________,someparentsthinkthereisnoneedfortheirdaughterstogotoschool.Therefore,theydon’tletthemgotoschool._______,somechildrenarenotinterestedintheirstudies.______________________,somewouldn’tliketogotoschool.Inmyopinion;Finally;Tomakemattersworse;InadditionInadditionFinallyTomakemattersworseAsfarasI’mconcerned,allthechildrenincludinggirlsshouldbeeducated._______,thewholesocietyshouldputgreatemphasisonchildren’seducation________they’llplayanimportantpartinthefutureofourcountryoneday.besides;However;because;ThereforeBesidesbecauseAvoidChinglish!1)TrafficinShanghaiistoocrowded.2)TherehasahighwayconnectedwithBeijing.3)Thoughthetransportisgood，butitfadesnexttoournaturalresources.4)Iforgotmydictionaryathome.5)Itwillcostusmuchmoneytobuyone.heavy.leftistake改错Itbuiltinthe1980s.Inourcity,thepublicorderisbetterthanotherplaces.Buyacellphoneistooexpensive.Thepublicorderisverywell.Atthelast，Ihopeyoucaninvesthere.Thegovernmentislikeinvestorstocomehere.Letmeintroducethiscityforyou.Thankyouforyoucome.Ithinkyoucanhappy.Tomysurprised,myfatheragreedtobuyone.thatofgood\likestoyourcomingbeˇ∧∧wasBuyingsurprise改错1.Alotoffamiliesaremuchmorepoor.2.I’mveryhappyIcanwritelettertoyou.3.Somearenotinterestinlessons.4.Ithinkeverychildisequality.5.Becauseoftheirparentsdon’thaveenoughmoney.6.Icankeeptouchwithmyfamily.7.Someparentsthinkgotoschoolisnotgood.8.Everychildincludinggirlsshouldhavethechancetoaccepteducation.9.Therearemanyfamiliesarepoor.10.Someparentsinvillagethinkthatgirlsarenotimportantaswellasboys.very∧interestedequalgoingreceive∧theina∧Adoptavarietyofsentencepatterns使用较丰富的句式1.Whenhearrived,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.(使用V-ing形式)2.Onceitisseen,itcanneverbeforgotten.(过去分词)_____________,hegavemeane-mailimmediately.Whenarriving/Onhisarrival,__________,itcanneverbeforgotten.Onceseen3.Tohissurprise,thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.(使用名词性从句)4.Peoplesuggestthattheconferencebeputoff.(改被动语态)_____________________thelittlegirlknowssomanythings.Whatsurpriseshimisthat________________theconferencebeputoff.Itissuggestedthat5.Hedidnotknowwhathadhappeneduntilhehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper.(使用强调句型)6.Ipassedthephysicsexambecauseofyourhelp.(用虚拟语气）_____________hehadreadthenewsinthenewspaper_____heknewwhathadhappened.___________________thephysicsexam________yourhelp.ItwasnotuntilthatIcouldn’thavepassedbutforwithout7.Iwon’tbelievewhathesays.(使用状语从句)8.Thegirlisspokenhighlyof.Hercompositionwaswellwritten.(用定语从句)______________hesays,Iwon’tbelieve.Thegirl_____________________________isspokenhighlyof.NomatterwhatwhosecompositionwaswellwrittenWhatever9.Ifyoustudyhard,youwillmakerapidprogress.（用并列句）10.HehadnosoonercomebackfromBeijingthanhewassentabroad.(使用倒装句)______________hecomebackfromBeijing______hewassentabroad.___________________makerapidprogress.Studyhard,andyou’llNosoonerhadthanHardly….when..PleaselearntoYourcompositionwhenyoufinishitfromnow.•书面表达评价表•项目自评他评•1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?•2.句子开头注意大小写了吗?•3.有没有注意标点符号?•4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?•5有单词拼写错误吗?几个?•6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?•7.注意主谓一致了吗?•8.有没有语态的错误?•9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?•10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?•11.简单句表达正确吗?•12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?•13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?•14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?