读后续写改卷心得-Continuation-writing

《新课程标准》提出了英语学科核心素养：语言能力、思维品质、文化品格和学习能力。读后续写：要求学生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。语言能力：阅读和写作思维品质：想象能力和创新精神读后续写高档次的给分范围和要求对第四档(16-20)作文的描述：1.与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。2.内容比较丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达；4.比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。写作的几个考虑•语言的功能与目的•逻辑•语言•作者是否能顺利地表达自己的意思•这个意义是否能顺利地被接受•情节逻辑•融洽度（1）原文与后续的逻辑（2）后续两段间的逻辑（3）段落开头与后续语句间的逻辑（1）逻辑是否严密（2）情节是否有旁支（1）衔接（2）语法结构与词汇的丰富性、准确性（3）修辞(交际)读后续写三大步骤readingplottingwriting内容语言主题细节衔接内容逻辑语言readingcontentwhoJane,Tom(acouple)whenoneweekendinJulywhereintheforestwhatOneweekendinJuly,JaneandTomdecidedtocampbyalake.AfteraquarrelwithTom,Janewalkedawayangrily.Havingwalkedtoofar,Janegotlostintheforestandcouldn’tcontactTomwithouthercellphonewhichwasleftintheircar.Withnightfalling,Janehadtostopforthenight.Feelingtired,thirstyandhungry,shemissedTomandherfamilyverymuch.Tohergreatjoy,thenextmorningshedrankandalsofoundsomeberriestoeatnearbyastream.Asshewalkedalongthestream,twohelicoptersflewoverheadoneafteranother.Butthetreesblockedoutthesight.Janethoughtitwisetomakeherselfnoticedbyflaggingheryellowblouseonanopenarea.contentwhatOneweekendinJuly,JaneandTomdecidedtocampbyalake.AfteraquarrelwithTom,Janewalkedawayangrily.Havingwalkedtoofar,Janegotlostintheforestandcouldn’tcontactTomwithouthercellphonewhichwasleftintheircar.Withnightfalling,Janehadtostopforthenight.Feelingtired,thirstyandhungry,shemissedTomandherfamilyverymuch.Tohergreatjoy,thenextmorningshedrankandalsofoundsomeberriestoeatnearbyastream.Asshewalkedalongthestream,twohelicoptersflewoverheadoneafteranother.Butthetreesblockedoutthesight.Janethoughtitwisetomakeherselfnoticedbyflaggingheryellowblouseonanopenarea.Para1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…JanelakehelicopterwalkedawayatadistanceTomstreamheryellowblouseclimbedtohergreatjoyTopic:survivelanguage1.JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom2.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.3.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.4.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforest5.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.6.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.7.Thefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.8.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.separatePara1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…theparagraphtopicJanesufferedphysicallyandmentally.darkdaybreaktheparagraphtopicJanesurvived.reunitedJaneregrettedwhatshehaddone.Janerealizedhowmuchtheyloved.plottingseparatePara1:Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.…Para2:ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.…whowhenwherewhat/howJanenightintheforesthowJanefeltwhatJanediddarkdaybreakwhowhenwherewhat/howJaneTomdayintheforestorotherplaceshowJanesurvivedhowtheyfeltreuniteddisappointedtiredwalk,find,climb,stop,sleepTom,helicopter,find,tell,love,hug…happyJanewasverydisappointed,butshedidn’tgiveup.Shestillkeptwalking,andtriedherbesttofindthelake.Sheclimbedtoahighplaceandfellasleepquickly.Intheend,becauseshewassotiredthatshestoppedscreaming.Shescreamedforhelpwhenshewalkedontheroad.12345ButTom’sfacefloatedinhermindbeforesheclosedhereyes.6writingJanewasverydisappointed,butshedidn’tgiveup.1Shestillkeptwalking,andtriedherbesttofindthelake.2Shewasscreamedwhenherwalkedontheroad.3Intheend,becauseshewastootiredthatshestoppedtoscream.4Sheclimbedahighplaceandfallsleepquickly.5ButTom’sfacecrowdedinhermindbeforesheclosedhereyes.6Tip1:Plotsshouldbelogicallyconnected.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Tohersurprised,shefoundTomwasalongsideher!SheaskedTomwhyshewasinthere.Tomsaidhecalledthepolicetohelphimandtheydrivedthehelicopterthefoundherlaidinahighplace.Janewassomoved,thenshetoldTomhowmuchshelovedhim,andpromisedshewillneverdoitagain.Tomwasveryhappyandtheyneverhavesomequarrels.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janewasverydisappointed,butshedidn’tgiveup.Shestillkeptwalking,andtriedherbesttofindthelake.Shewasscreamedwhenherwalkedontheroad.Intheend,becauseshewastootiredthatshestoppedtoscream.Sheclimbedahighplaceandfallasleepquickly.ButTom’sfacecrowdedinhermindbeforesheclosedhereyes.13①能基本完成任务。②与原文关系密切，故事情节基本可信，衔接较好。③语言有错误，且影响意义传达。书面表达高档次的给分范围和要求对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。logicalreasonablecreativepowerfulcreativewritingwindrainfogwildanimalstreeslakestreamwildfruitsstones/rocksgrassleaveswoodenhousecavesuffersurvivetirednessthirsthungerlonelinessfearcoldmatchesaknifeheryellowblousecigarettelighterasmalltorchforestJaneTip2:Yourcreativitycomesfromyourdirectorindirectexperience.suffering:windAstrongwindblowingthroughtheforest,theshadowsoftreeswerejustliketheshapesofaggressiveanimals.Janewassoscaredthatsheburiedherheadinherarms,notdaringtoseeanything.suffering:rainWorsestill,itbegantorain.Janewasgettingsoaked,outthereinthepouringrain.Helpless,dejected,andhungry,shet