3.读后续写---环境细节描写

环境细节描写byKevinSoy读后续写专项训练3Itwasdreadfullycold;itwassnowingfast,andwasalmostdark,aseveningcameon-thelasteveningoftheyear.Inthecoldanddarkness,therewentalongthestreetapoorlittlegirl,bareheadedandwithnakedfeet.Whenshelefthomeshehadslipperson,itistrue;buttheyweremuchtoolargeforherfeet–slippersthathermotherhaduseduntilthen…Thesnowflakesfellonherlongflaxenhair,whichhunginprettycurlsaboutherthroat;butshethoughtnotofherbeautynorofthecold.Lightsgleamedineverywindow,andtherecametoherthesavorysmellofroastgoose,foritwasNewYear’sEve.Anditwasofthiswhichshethought.Yetshedarednotgohome,forshehadsoldnomatches,andcouldnotbringapennyofmoney.Herfatherwouldcertainlybeather;and,besides,itwascoldenoughathome,fortheyhadonlythehouseroofabovethem;andthoughthelargestholeshadbeenstoppedwithstrawandrags,therewereleftmanythroughwhichthecoldwindwhistled.小结1.紧扣主题。在有限的篇幅内选择景物要慎重，一定要与主题有密切关联。2.细致深入。所选景物一定要运用所学过的词汇和语法进行细致深入的描写。3.相辅相成。环境描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好完成写作任务。1.请描述自己迷路的经历，运用对环境的描写来营造氛围，为后文做铺垫、烘托自己的心理及体现个人的性格。80词左右。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.请描述自己迷路的经历，运用对环境的描写来营造氛围，为后文做铺垫、烘托自己的心理及体现个人的性格。80词左右。迷路会引起人的不安和焦躁的心理，与之对应的环境描写，可以是天气，比如雨雾等，还可以描写陌生的建筑和自然景色。Iwaslostinthemountainwhichwassettledbyalmostnopeople.Ihadamapinmyhandbuthadnoideawheremypositionwas.Theairseemedwet,asthoughthesymbolofmountains–thehighconcentration-of-oxygenairwasreplacedbytheuncomfortable,chokingwater.Itwasgoingtorain.Thefearsurroundedmelikeadevil’sfrozen,sharphands.Istruggledtoadjustmymoodbutinvain.2.午夜时分，咖啡馆里只剩下最后一位顾客，他是位双耳失聪、孤寂苦闷的老人。请根据所给的时间和地点及老人的特点，针对小餐馆及周围的环境，设计一段描写，词数80左右。Itwasverylateandeveryonehadleftthecaféexceptanoldman._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.午夜时分，咖啡馆里只剩下最后一位顾客，他是位双耳失聪、孤寂苦闷的老人。请根据所给的时间和地点及老人的特点，针对小餐馆及周围的环境，设计一段描写，词数80左右。时间：午夜地点：咖啡馆1.为了符合午夜和老人的内心特点，需要营造寂静的周围环境。2.可以添加一些附加信息，如天气和周边的景物等（斑驳的树影、昏暗的路灯和寒风）来营造阴郁氛围。3.除了老人，其他人也是故事环境的有效组成部分，如冷漠的服务员或是零星的路人。Itwasverylateandeveryonehadleftthecaféexceptanoldman.Hesatintheshadowoftheleavesofthetreethatswunglonelyinthecoldwind.Thestreetlightwasslightlygloomy.Inthedaytimethestreetwasnoisyanddusty,butatnightsilencesettledthedust.Theoldmanlikedtositlatebecausehewasdeafandonlyatnight,whenpeoplewerefewerandfewer,couldhefeelthedifference.Thetwowaitersthereknewthatifhebecametoodrunkhewouldleavewithoutpaying,sotheykeptwatchingonhim.实战演练3.王姥姥第一次进城看女儿，在车站周围看到“好运大抽奖”的活动遍毫不犹豫地参加了。为了赢得终极大奖：40寸大彩电，她连续参加五次，把身上仅有的200块钱都花光了也没有赢到奖，请设计一段环境描写突出表现离开的路上王姥姥受骗后的心情。GrandmaWangwasextremelybluehavingspentallthe200yuan.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________GrandmaWangwasextremelybluehavingspentallthe200yuan.Shestoodrootedtothespotwithhermindtotallyblank.Recallingthemomentwhentheynoticedshehadnomoremoneytocontinuethegame,theirfacesturnedfromflowertoice,GrandmaWangquicklyescapedfromthebustlingstation.Peopleonthestreet,notlikethevillagers,cameandwent,nobodygreetingeachother.Thehighbuildingsalongsidethestreetscoveredmostofthesunshine,whichwasexactlydifferentfromthecountryside.Shethoughttrustamongpeopleisaswarmasthesunshine,andshecouldn’tliveintheshadowofthesetallbuildings.