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创新作文大赛系列讲练之二写作李兴民Thebicycleisimportantforus.Thebicycleisofimportanceforus.Thebicycleplaysanimportantroleinourlife.Thebicycle,environmentalfriendlyvehicle,playsanimportantroleinourlife.Thebicycleisliketheair,water,andsunshineandcannotbepartedwithamomentinourlife.走出房间，空洞的表达方式：walkoutoftheroom小偷走出房间应该说：slip/sneakoutoftheroom美女走出房间应该说：sailoutoftheroom小孩走出房间应该说：danceoutoftheroom老人走出房间应该说：staggeroutoftheroom差的作文中简单句多，而好的作文简单句少；差的作文从句、连词、分词结构出现的频率大大低于好的作文；差的作文中关键词和同义表达出现的频率低于好的作文。a.语言准确化b.语言多样化c.结构清晰化d.内容简单化写作的三个角度：语言第一位；结构第二位；内容第三位结构简单，语言卓越，内容相关创新真题:Chinesepeoplealwayshavethetraditionofhelpingothers;regardlessofafriendorastranger.However,inrecentyears,peoplefindthatwhentheytrytohelpothers,somechangesaretakingplaces.Oneofthemostcommonexamplesisthat,apasser-bywhosentaninjuredseniorpeopletohospitalwouldbeverylikelytoberecognizedastheaccident-maker.Thiskindofeventsisbeingrerunagainandagain.Whentrappedinthedilemmaoftraditionandtrouble,whatwouldbeyourchoice?议论文1.陈述观点（有独到见解）2.论证观点或理由（思路清晰，观点明确，论证充分；语言流畅，词汇丰富，句式多样；有效地使用语句、段落间的连接成分,内容连贯，结构紧凑;词汇和语法使用恰当,错误较少。）3.总结(呼应主题)1.医生只是换了个头.2.修改后的病人，戴了项链，戴了眼镜，头发竖起，头上流汗。3.从修改过的病人中能够看出霸道、愤怒、自大等一些关键词Writing(本题共100分)Whichoneofthemdoyouthinkistheexpert?Firstcompletetheconversation.Thenwritedownyouropiniononthequalitiesofbeinganexpert.五个步骤:1、审题文字信息图画信息题材(议论文、记叙文、书信、说明文)、人称、时态、要点2、词及要点：用一两个单词或短语写出每句话的细节要点即要使用的句型短语。(关键：平时积累)3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。4连句成文：①使用较高级的词汇②使用较丰富的句式③使用恰当的连接词5、检查修改，规范抄写①使用较高级的词汇1.Wealthdoesnotalwaysbringhappiness.Wealthdoesnotalwaysgohandinhandwithhappiness.2.Weallknowthatknowledgeispower.Thereisnodoubtthatknowledgeispower.Itgoeswithoutsayingthatknowledgeispower.3.Theremanywaystokeepfit.Therearenumerouswaystokeepfit.4.Weshouldusedifferentwaystogettoknowthesociety.Weoughttomakeuseofvariousmethodstogettoknowthesociety.Wearesupposedtotakeadvantageofdiversemeanstogettoknowthesociety.5.Asaresulttheplanwasafailure.6.Whensheheardhehaddied,shewentpalewithsorrow.7.ShewenttoAustriainordertostudymusic.ShewenttoAustriaforthepurposeofstudyingmusic.Atthenewsofhisdeath,shewentpalewithsorrow./Themomentsheheardthenewsthat…Theplanturnedouttobeafailure.8.Whenhespoke,hefeltmoreandmoreexcited.9.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.10.Differentstudentshavedifferentattitudestowardstigerparenting.Themorehespoke,themoreexcitedhefelt.Attitudestowardstigerparentingvaryfrompersontopersonamongstudents..You’llhavenotroublefindingmyhouse.尽量用四、六级范围内的积极的,活跃的，常用的词或词组。尽量用表达最贴切,最生动,最有力的词或短语。尽量用最符合所写话题,所用文体的词或表达。“重要的”importantsignificant,vital,crucial,critical，etcbiggreat,large,huge,vast,titanic,enormousetc.causeleadto,resultin,bringabout,giverise/birthtogetusedtoAdaptto,adjustto,make…fit,beaccustomedto15个最经典的替换词1.individuals,characters,folks代替(people,persons)2.positive,favorable,rosy(美好的)，promising(有希望的)，perfect,pleasurable,excellent,outstanding代替good3.dreadful,unfavorable,poor,adverse(有害的)代替bad如果bad做表语，可以有belessimpressive代替.4.(anarmyof,anoceanof,aseaof,amultitudeof代替many.5:asliceof,quietafew,several代替some6:harbortheideathat,taketheattitudethat,holdtheviewthat,itiswidelysharedthat,itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat)替think7:affair,business,matter代替thing8:formypart,frommyownperspective代替inmyopinion9...benefitialrewarding代替helpful10.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer11.exceedingly,extremely代替very12.captureone‘sattention代替attractone'sattention.13.giveriseto,leadto,resultin,trigger代替cause.14.bearinmindthat代替remember15.frownonsth代替beagainst,disagreewithsth3、连词成句：用连词成句的方法将上述要点的词语扩展成句子。4连句成文：①使用较高级的词汇②使用较丰富的句式③使用恰当的连接词5、检查修改，规范抄写②使用较丰富的句式1.复合句：定语从句名词性从句状语从句2.非谓语动词短语不定式短语现在分词短语过去分词短语3.虚拟句式If…Without/Butfor(that)…Itishightimethat…Suggest/advocate/propose…that…4.强调句式“Itbe…that…”用于表达对某种因素的强调。e.g.Itisoutofremarkablebenefitsthatmanymanufacturersproducefakeorpoor-qualityproducts.Bynomeans/Onnoaccount/Never…引导的部分倒装结构，用以加强观点。e.g.Bynomeansshallweseelessofthenegativeeffectsthatchattingonlinemighthaveonourlives.5.倒装句式6.对比或比照句式Justas…,…e.g.Justaseverycoinhastwosides,…hasitsadvantagesanddisadvantages.Like/Unlike…,…Likemostcountriesintheworld,Chinaisalsofacedwiththesocialproblemsofagingpopulation.7.被动句式适当用代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we/I(weshouldpayattentionto而用Attentionshouldbepaidto.)1.Nothingis+more+形容词+thanto+V没有比接受教育更重要的事。Nothingismoreimportantthantoreceiveeducation.2.~~~cannotemphasizetheimportanceof~~~toomuch.我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。Wecannotemphasizetheimportanceofprotectingoureyestoomuch.3.Thereisnodenyingthat+S+V...不可否认的，我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。Thereisnodenyingthatthequalitiesofourlivinghavegonefrombadtoworse.4.Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthat+句子~~全世界都知道树木对我们是不可或缺的。Itisuniversallyacknowledgedthattreesareindispensabletous.5.Thereisnodoubtthat+句子~~毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。Thereisnodoubtthatoureducationalsystemleavessomethingtobedesired.6.Thereasonwhy+句子~~~isthat+句子我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycanprovideuswithfreshair.7.Adj+as+Subject（主词）+be,S+V~~~虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。Richasourcountryis,thequalitiesofourlivingarebynomeanssatisfactory.8.The+~er+S+V,~~~the+~er+S