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如何提高书面表达句子的档次浦江中学洪英Welcometoourschool你的英国朋友正在做一个课题；世界各地的生日庆祝方式。他请你介绍中国学生过生日的方式。请你根据以下要点写一篇短文：一、通常方式1．生日聚会2．生日礼物3．生日祝福二、我认为更有意义的庆祝方式和理由*词数100-120（2005浙江卷）NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular.ButIthinkthatit’sbettertohelpotherpeople.Weknowthatit’simportanttolearntohelpotherpeople.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.Peoplewillhelpyoubecauseyou’vehelpedthemandyou’llbehappy…学生作品（1）NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangettogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtobeinvited.It’spolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsforone’sbestwishes.What’smore,sendingshortmessagesonone’sbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmorepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.However,asfarasI’mconcerned,it’smoremeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asisknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.Birthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulandusefultotheworld.Therefore,it’sofimportancetolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersonone’sbirthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,peoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;foranother,you’llbehappy.Asaresult,Ithinkitbettertohelpotherstospendone’sbirthday.学生作品（2）NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldsothatpeoplecangettogether.Bestfriends,aswellasrelatives,aregoingtobeinvited.It’spolitetobuyasmallgiftwhichstandsforone’sbestwishes.What’smore,sendingshortmessagesonone’sbirthdayisbecomingmoreandmorepopular,asaresultofitsconvenience.However,asfarasI’mconcerned,it’smoremeaningfultocareaboutothersthanaboutoneself.Asisknowntoall,togiveisbetterthantoreceive.Birthdaysmeannotonlybeingolderbutmorehelpfulandusefultotheworld.Therefore,it’sofimportancetolearntohelpothers.Helpingothersonone’sbirthdaycandoyoualotofgood.Foronething,peoplewillhelpyouinreturninthefuture;foranother,you’llbehappy.Asaresult,Ithinkitbettertohelpotherstospendone’sbirthday.学生作品（2）1.要点齐全2.较多的语法结构和高级词汇3.全文结构紧凑高档书面表达的要求：1.时间：昨天下午放学后请根据下述情况写一篇80-120个单词的英语新闻广播稿，准备在你校广播台播出。2.地点：回家路上3.人物：高一（2）班两名男生田力和段凯4.事件：边骑车边谈笑，后追逐一辆公交车，觉得好玩。公交车遇红灯停下，两人来不及刹车，摔倒在地。一人左手臂摔断，一人腿部受伤。5.警示：严格遵守交通规则，切忌在马路上嬉笑玩耍。1.Therewasanaccidenthappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.(典型病句）Therewasanaccidentthathappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.(定语从句）Anaccidentoccurredtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.（高级词汇）Anaccidenthappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.2.TianLiandDuanKaiwereridingbikessidebysideonthewayhomeafterschool.Theyweretalkingandlaughingloudly.(陈蝉)TianLiandDuanKaiwereridingbikessidebysideonthewayhomeafterschool,talkingandlaughingloudly.（用分词合并）3.Thetrafficlightsturnedred.Theyfounditwastoolatetostopthebikes.Thelightsturnedred,buttheyfounditwastoolatetostoptheirbikes.(黄颖)（用连接词连接）Seeingtheredtrafficlights,theytriedtostopbutitwastoolate.（用分词合并）4.One’sleftarmwashurtandtheother’slegwashurttoo.(戴靓)One’sleftarmwasbrokenwhiletheother’sleggothurt.(边昶)(避免用相同结构和词汇）（高级连词）Onehadhisleftarmbrokenwhiletheothergothisleghurt./theotherwasbadlyhurtintheleg.)(高级结构）Theywereknockedofftheirbikes,onewiththeleftarmbroken,andtheotherwithoneleghurt.(高级介词短语/独立主格结构）(昭昭)5.Ifwedon’tobeytrafficrules,wemightdie.a.Ifwegoagainsttrafficrules,wemightloseourlives.b.Ifwegoagainsttrafficrules,wemightendupinhospital.c.Goingagainsttrafficrulesmightcostusourlives.d.Don’triskourlivesgoingagainsttrafficrules.(多种表达）6.Hegotupat7o’clock.（使用多种句式）Itwasnotuntil7o’clockthathegotup.Notuntil7o’clockdidhegetup.(强调句）（倒装句）Hedidn’tgetupuntil7o’clock.1.Ihadagoodidea.a.Agoodideaoccurredtome.b.Icameupwithagoodidea.2.Don’tworry.We’lltrytohelpyou.makeeveryeffortto,makegreateffortstosparenoeffortsto,tryeverymeanstodoallwecanto,dowhatwecanto多种表达&高级词汇Practice:1.Thereare80%ofthepopulationliveonfarming.2.At8thismorning,therewereabout50Americanstudentscametovisitourschool.80%ofthepopulationliveonfarming.At8thismorning,about50Americanstudentscametovisitourschool.Practice:（用分词合并）1.Hehadfinishedhishomework.Hewentouttoplayfootball.2.Iwasmovedbyhiswords.Idecidedtolendhimahand.Movedbyhiswords,Idecidedtolendhimahand.Havingfinishedhishomework,hewentouttoplayfootball.Practice:（用连接词连接）1.Thepolicesearchedeverywhere.Themissingboycouldnotbefound.Thepolicesearchedeverywhere,butthemissingboycouldnotbefound.Thoughthepolicesearchedeverywhere,themissingboycouldnotbefound.Practice:(避免用相同结构和词汇）1.Ilikesports.Ilikemusic,too.a.Ilikesportsandmusicaswell.b.Ilikesportsaswellasmusic.2.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemysister’sfavoritesubjectishistory.a.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemysister’sishistory.b.MyfavoritesubjectisEnglishwhilemysisterlikeshistorybest.Myoldgrandfatherfellasleepinthesofa.Hehadabookonhisknees.Practice:（用介词短语）Myoldgrandfatherfellasleepinthesofawithabookonhisknees.提高句子档次的小结：1.用分词短语合并句子用介词短语合并句子用独立主格结构合并句子用连接词连接句子2.用高级结构和词汇3.用定语从句、主语从句、强调句、倒装句4.用不同结构和词汇…Anaccidenthappenedtotwostudentsinourschoolyesterdayafternoon.Schoolwasover.TianliandDunkaifromGrade1weregoin