①SusanKrantz与《外籍教师点评英语作文》一书②《高中英语课程标准》解读一、背景介绍二、思考之一语言表达方式受传统习惯的影响/英语文化中的人士的表达方式1、中国英语教师教作文的方式与errorgravity中国人往往注意理性分析、逻辑思维,往往注重结果,总要得出结论。西方人写作则较多利用实证分析、实例分析方法。他们注重对过程和事实的描述,往往不得出结果,让读者自己分析、并得出结论。“Englishwritingismoredirect.Thingsareclearlyexplained.Detailsorfactsarerequiredtosupportthetopic.”(SusanKrantz2001)我们来看一看美国明尼苏达州雷德温市市长重访浙江衢州后,对衢州所发生的变化所发出的感言。(摘录)“OneFootintheFutureandOneFootinthePast”.ThisismyforemostimpressionasIvisitQuzhou.Onecannotmisstheoldandthenewexistingsidebyside.Asaforeigneritisdifficulttosaywhichisthe‘RealChina’.Isitthelargenumberofpeopleridingtheiroldbicyclesloadeddownwithgoodsorisittheblackshinyluxurycarbeingdrivendownthestreet?IsittheschoolinruralareaswiththeleakingrooforisitthemodernschoolsbeingbuiltinQuzhou?Isitthefourlaneexpresswayorisitthesinglelanewalkingpathtoaremotevillage?EverywhereIlookIseetheoldandthenewexistingsidebyside.“OneFootintheFutureandOneFootinthePast”.…Iamespeciallyfamiliarwithfarmsandfarmcooperatives.MystayinQuzhouhasprovidedmewiththeopportunitytoparticipateinmeetingsaboutagriculture.WhenIattendthemeetingsitseemsasifIhavebeentherebefore.Iamthinking-amIwatchingarerunof“AnOldMovie”?ThistypeofmeetingshastakenplaceinAmericancommunitiesandfarmsanumberofyearsago.Ihavewalkedalongtheriverbankwithafreshbreezeblowingthatpickedmyspiritsupandmademeforgetmyhomesickness.IhavegazedacrosstherivertothenewwesternsectionofQuzhouwhereallthenewgrowthofthetownisexpectedtogo.下面几段话是摘自美国明尼苏达州雷德温市希尔顿剧院经理、导演希恩-多尔兹先生在衢州二中任教时所写的感言。DuringmysecondweekatQuzhouNo.2MiddleSchool,Ihavethehighhonorofworkingwithagroupofdedicated,hardworking,andverysmartteachersandadministratorswhohavemademefeelverywelcomeandinstantlyapartoftheirteam.Eachdaycontinuestobeawonderfulnewadventureinfood,people,andplaces.Itisincrediblyancientyetyoung,brash,andfullofenergy.Theownerwaslounginginachairdozing.Myfriendgothisattention.Hesaid:Itprobablywon'tsoundtoogood,Iamalittledrunk.Themusicianbrokeawayfromherbusydaytotapepickstoherfingers,laboriouslytunethe21-stringedinstrument.Music,though,isuniversal,andbeingabstract,canbesharedequallyandwithouttranslation.ThisculturalbaseofChina,thisstrainofmusicthatvibratesthroughthesoulofapeople,andthiswayofmakingandsharingmusic,willserve,inthisoutsider'smostlyignorantopinion,aspartofthesolidgrounduponwhichChinacanbuildadynamicandpowerfulfuture.中国学生的句子1.原句:Ithinkifyouknowthetwosidesofthenetting,youwillhaveagoodwayofusingthecomputer.修改后句子:TheInternethastwosides,youwilljusthavetofindagoodwayofusingit.2.原句:WhenIhavefreetime,I’llenjoythemverymuch.修改后句子:IthinkwhenIhavefreetimeIwillplaywiththemalot.3.原句:Fishing,collectingstamps,Ijustlikethem.修改后句子:Fishing,collectingstamps,Ilikethemall.4.原句:Ontheothersidetheremaybeafamousemblematicbuildingofthecountry,andalsohavethevalueofthecoinandthedate.修改后句子:Ontheothersidetheremaybeafamousemblematicbuildingofthecountry,thedateandthevalueofthecoin.5.原句:Inthebasketballcourttwostrongteamswereplayingabittermatch.Oneoftheteamsisours,theotherisclass4’steam.修改后句子:Onthebasketballcourtthereweretwoverygoodteamsplayingabittermatch,oneoftheteamswasours,theotheronewasclass4’s.6.原句:Thelastminutearrivedandthescoreswereequal.Wepushedforvictoryandwewon23-21.修改后句子:Finallythelastminutearrivedandthescoreswereequal,wereallywantedtowinandsowetriedourhardestandthefinalscorewas23-21.Wewon.7.原句:IflewwithNorthwestAirlinesfromShanghaiPudongInternationalAirport,wepassedacrossthePacificOceanandourplanearrivedinDetroitat10:30inthemorning,localtime.修改后句子:IflewwithNorthwestAirlinesfromShanghaiPudongInternationalAirport,weflewacrossthePacificOcean.WearrivedinDetroitat10:30inthemorning,localtime8.原句:Thesecondfloorincludedabouttenrooms.Somewereusedtobeoffices,theotherswerebedroomsforsomeworkers.修改后句子:Somewereusedasoffices,theotherswereusedsasbedroomforworkers.9.原句:Iwasverygladwhenwewenttothecountry,becauseoftheinterestingthingsthere.修改后句子:Ialwaysenjoyseeingthebeautifulthingsinthecountryside.10.原句:OntheeveningofOct18,theChinesenationalfootballteamgotthetickettotheWorldCup.修改后句子:OntheeveningofOct.18,theChinesenationalfootballteamsecuredtheirplaceintheWorldCup.11.原句:Thefirstcompanysaidthatmysisterwasnotoldenoughandthenwelostourwayandcouldn’tfindthesecondcompany.修改后句子:Mysisterfailedingettingthatjobthatwasbecausetheysaidshewastooyoung.教材中的经典句子:1.Everynowandthen,wegettheitchtotravel.Thisphenomenon,mayexplainwhypeoplespendsomuchmoneyontripstointerestingplaces.2.DowntownRioisthecity’sculturalandhistoricalheart.3.AwalkthroughdowntownRioisahistorylessonandanadventure.4.AwalkaroundKitzbuhelisafeastfortheeyes—alivelymixofoldvillagecultureandtheexcitementofaninternationaltouristarea.5.LocatedinsouthernAustria,Kitzbuhelisaparadiseforskiers.以下两篇短文是衢州二中高三(1)班祝嘉玮同学在学习了高二课本ThewaterPlannet及Destinations后写的文章:PoorsanitationImaginethis,whenyougointoapublictoilet,anunpleasantsmellcomestoyou,thefloorisalmostcoveredbyrubbishandthetapisnolongerrunning,there'snotissueandofcoursenoliquidsoap.Whatwouldyoufeel?Itisclearthatnoonecouldtoleratesuchthings.Andwhat'smore,walkingalongthestreetandlookatthedustbins,they'resodirtyan