上海中考英语作文范文分析2009-2019

上海中考英语作文范文分析2009-2019上海中考英语作文总分为20分1.内容分8分。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚完整。2.语言分8分。用语规范，表达准确，无或少见语法错误，词汇拼写正确，句型使用恰当。首先是字数，少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。3.组织结构分4分。文采分，根据使用复杂句型/单词和谚语/俗语的情况来加分。A档18~15分B档14.5~12分C档11.5~8分D档3.5~0分每少5个词扣0.5分，拼写错误每处扣0.5分，标点，大小写错误每2处扣0.5分内容和语言表达总分达15分及以上，得2~3分内容和语言总分13~14分，如确有好句型或表达用语，可酌情给1~2分通篇句型，句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，也不给分开头句+给的几个参考点+结尾句+亮点。然后再仔细批阅看有否语法错误,最后给出总分。1.内容空洞，没有清晰的思路，表达能力不强，总是用一些不合适的句子内容来表达，所以可能让老师觉得理由或是内容太假，当然也就得不了高分。2.议论过多，描写不足。大多数情况下，我们把议论当成的作文的重点，所以常常会跑题。应当多描述提示的内容或加以想像，不能只翻译了事。3.总是使用同一个主语写句子，重复太多。尽量使用不同的主语来表达，比如：ImustlearnEnglishwell.就可以换成：ItisimportantformetolearnEnglishwell.4.结构散漫，想哪儿写哪儿，乱七八糟。应该使用总分或总分总的结构。5.都是简单句，缺少复合句。多用状语从句，宾语从句，定语从句及一些重要的句型，可以用被动语态。6.连词的使用较少，句子之间的连接很生硬。可以加入一些：比如:tomysurprise(让我惊讶的是),what’smore（而且，还有）等，让上文与下文衔接更紧密。意思也能更流畅地表达。常见问题2009命题作文Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Iwanttodosomethingformyschool”.(以“我想为学校做件事”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)(注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。)Usethefollowingpointsasareference.(以下内容仅供参考)l.Whatdoyouwanttodoforyourschool?2.Whydoyouwanttodoit?3.Howareyougoingtodoit?Iwanttomakeschoolclean.Youmaythinkitisverysimple.ButIdon'tthinkso.Ourteachersaid,Schoolisyourhome,youshouldkeepitclean.ButIhaveneverdoneanythingtomakeschoolclean.Forexample,Ihavenevertoldmyclassmatetopickuprubbishafterhethrewitontheground.Ialsothrewtherubbishontheground.SoIwanttomakeschoolcleansothateveryonecanforgiveme.Duringthissummerholiday,Iwillgotoschooltomakeschoolclean.Ofcourse,Iwilldoitwithmyclassmates.Wewillmakeschoolcleaneveryweekendsnexttermaswell.Now,doyouthinkitissimple?2010命题作文上海中考英语作文题:I'mproudofmyself1、Whatkindofpersonareyou?2、Whatmakesyouproudofyourself(Giveanexample/examples)3、Whyareyouproudofyourself?要求：至少60字Iamaboyoflessconfidence.Ialwayshaterunning.Butasweallknow,thestudentsofGradeninehavetotakepartinthesportsexam.Atthatmoment,Ijustwantedtogiveup.Butmyparentsencouragedme:“impossibleisnothing,youcouldchallengeyourself!Sowiththeencouragementofthem,Itriedmybesttorunandinsistedonrunning.WhenIgottothefinishingline,Ifeltproudofmyself.ThoughIdidn'tgetaverygoodmark,IknewIhadwon.IcreatedamiracleformyselfandIwassoproudofmyself!Thewheeloflifehasrolledfastthroughthepastfifteenyears.Bylookingbackwards,I’msoproudofmyselfbecauseI’vegrownintoastrong-mindedperson.Itwasthefirsttimeformetoclimbahighmountainalone.Atfirst,Ifeltmybodywasfilledwithenergy.Astimewentby,tirednessmademystepslowdown.Formanytimes,theideaofgivingupthejourneyappearedinmymind.Butthesaying“Accumulatedwaterbecomesariver.”enabledmetomoveon.Thoughthepowerofonestepseemedsoweak,Iinsistedonclimbingtothetop.WhenIsucceeded,IfeltIhadreachedanewheightinmylife.HowproudI’mofbeingastrong-mindedperson.2011话题补全式作文Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“I’mamemberof“(以“我是……的一员”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格子”提示：你可以作为任意兴趣小组或者社团的一员，或者作为家庭，班级，社区额的一员，写出你的经历，感受等。UsethefollowingpointsasareferenceAreyougladtobeamemberof……？Whatdoyoudoinit?Howdoyoufeelassuchamember?I’maMemberoftheSingingandDancingClubHello,everyone!I’mverygladtobeamemberoftheSingingandDancingClub.Ihavebeeninthisclubfor2years.I’manactorintheclub.Ilikesinginganddancingverymuch.Isinganddancewithmyclassmatesonweekends.ThoughIamverytired,Iliketosinganddanceeveryday.Itmakesmefeelveryhappy.Inthisworld,everyfamilyhasamother,afather,adaughterorason.Forplentyofpeople,familiesareveryimportant.Whenyouareverysaid,youcanfoundoneortwopersonstomakeyoufeelhappiness,thisisyourfamily.Iamverygoldtobecomemyfamilymember,becauseIhaveaprettygoodparentandafairlyyoungerbrother.WhenIcomeback,Ialwaysfeelfreedomandrelaxed.Mymotherisakindcook;shehaslotsofexperienceincooking,somybrotherandIarehealthy.Asadaughter，Ishouldn'tmakemyparentsworry.Asasister,lshouldlookaftermybrother.Iwanttobeagreatmemberofmyfamily;IwouldtrymybesttodowhatIshoulddointhefamily2012书信类作文Writealetterinatleast60wordsaccordingtothegivensituation(根据所给情景写一封不少于60词的信)SupposeyouareJoe.YourfriendBettyisupsetaboutacomingexamforshecarestoomuchabouttheresult.Whatdoyouthink?Trytoofferhersomeadvice.(假设你是Joe，你的好朋友Betty因为过于在意考试结果而感到焦虑。请给他写一封信，谈谈你的看法，并给她一些建议。Knowingthatyoucaretoomuchabouttheresult,Iamquiteworried.Itisnousebeingupsetdespitetheimportanceoftheresult.Therearesomeeffectivewaystocalmdown.Aboveall,keepingremindingyourselftostayinpeaceisthemosthelpful.Besides,itwillhelpyoutorelaxifyousparesometimeforrecreationalactivitieslikesports.Finally,talktoyourparentsandfriends,whoarealwaysreadytocomfortyou.AsissaidbySteveJobs,“thejourneyisthereward.”Iamsureyouwillgetthroughthissituation.DearBetty,Howtimeflies!Theexamisfinallynearathand.Importantasitistoyou,youreallyshouldn'tcaretoomuchabouttheresultandgetyourselfoverlyupset.Rememberallthehardworkyouhaveputin!Aslongasyougowithacalmmindandapositiveattitude,I’msuretherewillbenothingdifficultforyouandtheexamwillbesmoothsailing.Isuggestyoutalkmoretoparentsandteachersaboutyouranxietyandtakebettercareofyourhealthsuchasgettingenoughsleepanddoingmoreexercise.Aboveall,nomatterwhattheresult,allyouneedtodoistoactmoreandthinklessbecauseactionisworry'sworstenemy.Keepfaithandcalmdown,andyouaresuretocomeoutwithflyingcolors.Allthebestofl