读后续写微技能训练之如何描写环境

Sophia读后续写微技能指导之四Onthedaybacktoschool,darkcloudshunglowinthesky.Therainpoureddown,withcolddropsandangrywindsslapping(拍;掴)myface.Iwasdrownedinfloodsofwarmtearsandfreezingrain.FunctionsofNaturalSettingDescription1.渲染了忧伤的气氛.2.揭示了故事发生的背景.3.立体感和真实感Icanwellrememberthattherewasatimewhenadeepbluesky,thesongofthebirds,moonlightandflowerscouldneverhavekeptmespellbound.(M1U1)写作思路一：第一步，先尝试概括性描述（总体描述）。第二步，在概括描述的基础上增加细节描述，注意逻辑关系及语意的合理。外面刮起了大风，吹的树枝乱摆，地上的灰尘乱飞，让人睁不开眼睛。Outside,therewasa____________wind,andthebrancheswereblowingin___________.Thedustonthegroundwasflyingindisorder,___________madepeopleunabletoopentheireyes.strongdisorderwhich这个冬季，天气异常寒冷。此刻没有风，世界好像停止在这一刻，河流也停下了脚步。Thiswinter,theweatheris__________cold.Thereisnowind______thismoment,theworldseemstohavestopped,theriverhasstoppedits_____________.unusuallyatfootstepsThedarkrainyevening,thewind,thethunderingcloudsheldmeentirelyintheirpower..(M1U1)写作思路二：第一步，先尝试细节描述。第二步，总体描述。2017.11浙江高考真题应用Para2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.___________________Iclosedmyeyesinthespeedingcar.Windingrivers,loftymountains,deepvalleysandsunnybeachesheldmeentirelyintheirfascination.Thewindwas__________dreadfullyandtherainwas_________fromtheheaven,__________againstthebranchesoflinedtrees.Theworldwas______________withaseaofdarkness.howlingpouringwhippingburdened/loadedThewindwashowlingdreadfullyandtherainwaspouringfromtheheaven,whippingagainstthebranchesoflinedtress.Theworldwasburdenedwithaseaofdrakness.写作思路三：“景”“情”过渡A：Iwasseizedwiththeroaringpowerofnature.asenseofhorrorcreepinguponmeB：Afloodoffearwashingoverme,Iimmediatelyturnedaroundtoslideintothebedandcurledup.Thesunlookedatherwithaglowingsmileandtheflowersnoddedmerrilytowardsher.Thebreezepattedherontheface,warmandcomfortable.Everythingwasthesame,onlyhisfatherbeingawayforever.怎样将一丝忧伤融入大自然的景色？The___________(甜蜜的)fragranceofflowers,thefaint___________(嗡嗡声)ofinsectsaswellasthegentletouchofthe__________(微风)broughtbackmemoriesofthebygonedayssharedwithfather,hottearsalmost_________(涌出)upinher__________(变红)eyes.sweetbuzzingbreezewellingreddened情景交融