读后续写训练范例

续写导练（五）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Iwastouchedthroughexperiences,memories,books,stories,animals,angels,andmostofallotherpeople.Peoplehavemovedmeandmolded（对……影响重大）mewithmomentsofloveandexamplesofkindness.OnetimeonthedaybeforeChristmasmanyyearsagowhenIwasaminimumwagemill（工厂）worker,Ifoundmyselfwithverylittlemoneyandverylittletimetobuymysmallchildrenafewsimpletoys.IknewthattheywouldhavetobecheaponesandIhopedmychildrenwouldlikethem.Ihatednothavingenoughtogivethemmore.Ihatedbeingpoor.AndIhatedfeelingbadatChristmasratherthanhappy.Ipulledintoastoreparkinglotandcountedmymoneyagain.Itwasn’tmuchbutmaybeIcouldgetsomethingsmallwithit.AsIwasgettingoutofthecarInoticedtheSalvationArmy（救世军）bellringerattheentrance.IfeltbadagainbecauseIdidn’tfeelIcouldspareanythingtogivehim.Istartedwalkingtowardstheentrancewhentwocarspulledintoemptyparkingspotsinfrontofme.Thefirstwasashiny,newCadillacandIfeltatwingeofjealousywhenIsawit.“Hownice,”Ithought,“Woulditbetohaveenoughmoneytobuyacarlikethat.”Thesecondcar,though,wasanancientsedan（轿车）morebeat-upandrustythantheoneIwasdriving.Amanhopped（冲）outoftheCadillacandhurriedintothestorerightpastthebellringerwithoutasecondglance.Outoftheoldsedancameayoungmotherwiththreesmallchildrenintow（紧随着）.Herclotheslookedaswornoutashercar,yetshestoppedinfrontofthebellringer,smiled,openedherpurse,anddroppedabillinhisredkettle（钱罐）.读后续写的基本步骤一、短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息，明确故事的任务，环境和情节，并概括文章大意。二、划线词分类为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇，可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物，地点、动作情节和事物（具体和抽象）等分类。三、设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁。第二部分注意整篇文章的首位呼应。四、初稿五、修改一、短文信息定位通过阅读定位所给短文的核心信息，明确故事的任务，环境和情节，并概括文章大意。character:time:place:plots(details)thedaybeforeChristmas,manyyearsagoastoreparkinglottheauthor,bellringer,amanowningaCadilac,ayoungmotherowninganoldcar.1.Theauthorwaspoorandfeelingbad.2.themanandthemotherrespondedquitedifferentlytothebellringer.3......Sumupthemainideaofthepassage1.Manyyearsago,Theauthorwasaworkwithasmallwage.Hefeltbadbecause......2.Whenhepulledintoastoreparkinglot,hefeltbadagainbecause...3.Whenhewalkenintotheentrance,hefoundamanowninga......,whileayoungmother....However,they.....二、划线词分类kindsunderlinedwordscharactersbellringerchildrenthingschristmascarpursekettleactionshatedpulledintodropped为了方便设计情节时涵盖划线词汇，可以结合具体材料对划线词按照人物，地点、动作情节和事物（具体和抽象）等分类。三、设计第一段的内容设计在于搭建本段与前文、后文的桥梁;第二部分注意与整篇文章的首位呼应。part1:part2:Theauthor'sattitudetothemanandthemotherHisopinionsonrichnessnolongerfeelingbadandfollowingthemother'sexampleanddroppedabilltothebellringer.Buyingthingsforhischidrenandexpectingamerrychristmas.四、初稿part1:itisbettertoberichintheinside;Itiswrongtojudgeapersonbyhisappearanceorwords;Ihadrespectforthepoormotherandwantedlearnfromher....part2:Itookouta10-poundbilland......Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildren....五、修改Paragraph1:Istoodthereforaminuteinastonishment.“Maybe,”Ithoughttomyself,“it’sbettertoberichontheinsideinsteadoftheoutside.”Thatrichmanshouldhavedonesomethingtohelpthepoor,buthedidn’t.Sometimesitwasreallywrongtojudgeapersonbyhisorherappearance.Ireallyhadrespectforthepoormotherfromthebottomofmyheart.Shesetagoodexampleforherchildrentofollow.Paragraph2:Inthatsecondawarmthtouchedme,myjealousyandhatred（憎恨）leftme,andalltheloveandjoythatareChristmasfilledme.Ifishedabilloutofmyownpurse,droppeditintheSalvationArmykettle,andwishedthebellringeramerryChristmas.Ifoundafewfunthingstogivemykidsanddrovehomewithmyheartsinging.IknewitwasgoingtobeawonderfulChristmas.Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildrenenjoyingthepresentsboughtforthem,includingaspecialgift—loveforthoseinneed.