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书面表达：古人云：“笑福开来”。微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证。微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以……请你以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文，题目自拟。注意：1.对所提示内容不要简单翻译，可以适当发挥。2.词数150左右。3.文中不得提及考生所在学校及本人姓名。Beforewriting审题审主题：smile(微笑)1.审人称：要求以微笑为主题写一篇英语短文。Smilingisthebeginningofharmony.(smilingcausesharmony.)smilingrelievesstress…故人称应为第三人称。2.审时态：smilingis…smilingdoes…一般现在时3.审要点：微笑是和谐的开始，微笑是沟通的通行证，微笑可以冰释前嫌，微笑可以舒缓窘境，微笑可以感化灵魂，微笑可以增强自信，微笑可以增添魅力，微笑可以…4.列提纲：三段法模式第一段：Introduction:主题句或背景导入或使用hook.第二段：Body:具体细节或具体论据既要点陈述。第三段：Conclusion:换种说法重申主题或提出倡议、号召。（目前大多数作文的要求是表达自己的观点）Whilewriting(注意书写)1.表达要点：用动宾短语来表达。makeusattractive.causeharmony.changeourmood.buildupthebridgeofcommunication.meanconfidence.relievestress.meansuccessmakeusseemsuccessfulhelpstaypositive.2.扩展成句：Smilingmakesusattractive.Smilingchangesourmood.Smilingrelievesstress.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.3.连缀成文：(1)关联词的使用。(2)复杂句的使用。(3)高级词汇的使用。Smilingmakesusattractive.Wearedrawntopeoplewhosmile.Smilingchangesourmood,asitcantrickthebodyintofeelingbetter.Smilingisinfectious.Whensomeoneissmilingtheylightenuptheroom,changethemoodsofothers,andmakethemhappier.Smilingrelievesstress.Ithelpstopreventusfromlookingtired.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident,andaremorelikelytobeapproached.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.Whenwesmileourbodyissendingtherestofusamessagethat“LifeisGood!”Afterwriting1.检查单词拼写、标点符号等。2.检查要点是否遗漏。3.检查句子结构是否正确。4.估计字数是否符合要求。学生作文中错误的句子：•Keepyoursmiles,youwillhealthierinthefuture.•Smilingalsocontributesyourself—confident.•Smilealsocanincreaseoursconfidentwhichhasagoodeffectonourswork.•Aidiomgoesthatwhenyousmiles,youwillownhappiness.•Notonlysmilingcanpromotethedevelopmentofnationshipswithothers,butalsoitcanmakeourselveslivebetterthanbefore.beandtoSelf--confidenceourconfidenceourAnsmilecansmilingfriendship学生作文中较好的句子：•Whileyouaresad,agentlesmilefromyourfriendsorevenstrangerswillcheeryouup.(王娟)•Asisknowntousall,smilingisthebeginningofharmony.（刘晓菲）•Sincesmilinghasmanyadvantages,whydon’tyousmileallthetime?Laughterisagoodmedicine.Ifyoureallysmile,youwilllivelongerandleadahappylife.(吴晓远)•Forexample,itisthebeginningofharmonyanditisalsoagoodwaytocommunicatewithothers.(刘静)抄阅读文章中的句子;不知所云.得分为0分语言素质欠缺;基本功差;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得5分.卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得12分语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得15分.有少许语言错误;得23分范文：WhyDoWeSmile?Everybodylikessmiling.Butwhydowesmile?Smilingmakesusattractive.Wearedrawntopeoplewhosmile.Smilingchangesourmood,asitcantrickthebodyintofeelingbetter.Smilingisinfectious.Whensomeoneissmilingtheylightenuptheroom,changethemoodsofothers,andmakethemhappier.Smilingrelievesstress.Ithelpstopreventusfromlookingtired.Smilingpeopleappearmoreconfident,andaremorelikelytobeapproached.Smilinghelpsusstaypositive.Whenwesmileourbodyissendingtherestofusamessagethat“LifeisGood!”Sojusttrysmilingourwaythroughtheday.Stayawayfromdepression,stressandworrysmiling.Smilewhenyoumeetothers.Smileintimeofdifficulty.Smilewhenyoufeelsad.Smilewhereveryouareandwheneveryoucan.