2011江苏高考书面表达解析

2011江苏高考书面表达解析•第五部分：书面表达（满分25分）•81.下面这幅照片展现了女儿为回家妈妈拿包的情景。请根据你对这幅照片的理解用英语写一篇短文。•你的短文应包含以下内容：•描述照片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等；•结合自身实际，谈谈你的感想；•举例说明你能为家长减负做些什么。•注意：•可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。•词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。•作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。•Theburdenofstudentshasbeenahottopicforyears,buttheloadofparentshasreceivedlittleattention,especiallyfromtheirownchildren._______•(一)谋篇—三步走•精读文字部分•写作主题:“感恩”•1.Describethepicture•2.relatethepicturetoaphenomenon•3.voiceyouropinion•1.“描述图片”应该包括何人何事和何感受。•何人：alittlegirlandherworkingmom•何事：Alittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily.Realizinghermommustbeverytiredafteraday’swork,thelittlegirlhelpstoremovethebagfromhershoulder.Meanwhile,hermomkneelsdown.•何感受:Themomisthankfulanddelighted.Seeingthis,wearealltouched.•所以第一段可以写成：•Thepictureshowsusatouchingmomentwhenalittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily.Realizinghermommustbeverytiredafteraday’swork,thelittlegirlhelpstoremovethebagfromhershoulder.Inresponse,themomkneelsdowntoshowhowthankfulanddelightedshefeels.•2.“联系生活”段落中，可以写两方面。•何种人;怎么做.以“感恩”为主题的作文，学生可以结合自身实际，说一下自己有没有做到给父母减负：•何人：•mymomandI•该人的做法（一般是贬义）:•Totallyengagedinmystudy,Iseldompayattentiontowhatmotherneedsandfeels,andalwaysthinkstudyingwellistheonlythingIcoulddoinreturn.•3.“个人见解”:给出相应的解决方式。说一下自己将来准备怎么给父母“减负”•参考：Iwillsparenoefforttohelpwiththeeverydaywashing,andbedroomcleaning.Inaddition,I’lltrymybesttopreparebreakfastmyself,soastosharemother’sdailyburden.•最后来一个升华句：•“Beingagooddaughteroutweighsbeingagoodstudent.”•（二）遣词———三原则•复杂原则、多变原则和温暖原则。•复杂原则:“牛词”来代替一些“土词“•“忙于做某事”bebusydoingsthbeengagedindoingsth.；beabsorbedinsth;beburiedinsth等•多变原则:相同意思，不同的词或者词组代换•最后一段，“努力”:“sparenoeffort”和“tryone’sbest”。•温暖原则:任何一个名词用形容词/定语从句/同位语从句来修饰.如workingmum•任何一个动词/形容词由一个副词来修饰，如：“alittlegirlcomestogreetherworkingmomhappily”•（3）造句——三套路•适当拉长，定语从句、并列结构、插入语等使得句子更丰满。“Inresponse,themomkneelsdowntoshowhowthankfulanddelightedshefeels.”•英式思维，不是一直以人作为主语，宁否定不肯定;宁被动不主动。如“Beingagooddaughteroutweighsbeingagoodstudent.”•闪光句式出彩句，如“Totallyengagedinmystudy,Iseldompayattentiontowhatmotherneedsandfeels”。•（四）逻辑----八联系•好的文章除了合理的篇章，出彩的字词，还离不开好的逻辑，善用逻辑连接词。让步:but,yet,however；•转折although,though,despite,inspiteof；并列:both…and,aswellas,neither…nor；递进：inaddition,besides,moreover；因果：becauseof,dueto,owingto,thanksto,onaccountof等。宁波卷2012适应性考试•单项选择：•DBBDCCAAACBABCCDBACD•完形：•BCBAADBDABBDCBACBACD•阅读A篇：BCDAB书面表达中常用连词分类举例▲举例:forexample,forinstance,take…forexample,suchas,like，andsoon，soonandsoforth,andsoonandonandon,etc.等。▲说明:that’stosay，inotherwords，namely,等。▲因果：so，for，therefore，asaresult，thus，because，becauseof,thanksto…，owingto…,dueto……等。▲递进:then，besides，inaddition,furthermore，moreover,what’smore等。▲顺序:firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally；inthefirstplace,inthesecondplace,inthethirdplace,lastlytobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally；tostartwith,next,inaddition,finally；firstandforemost,besides,lastbutnotleast；mostimportantofall,moreover,finally（以上为时间顺序）inthefrontof，infrontof…，before,behind,atthebackof,ontheright/left(of)，totheright/leftof…，ontheothersideof…，inthecenterof…，inthemiddleof…，atthebeginningof,attheendof…，bythesideof…，onthetopof…，atthefootof…，onthebottomof,inside，outside,upstairs,downstairs（以上为空间顺序）▲转折:nevertheless,however,although,though,but，onthecountry，afterall,oppositely等。▲总结:inshort,inaword,ingeneral,generallyspeaking,finally，atlast，asfarasIknow，inbrief，brieflyspeaking,intheend,asamatteroffact,inreality,infact,onthewhole,inconclusion,onaccountofthis,therefore等。▲强调:really,indeed，certainly，surely，forsure,aboveall等。▲对比:inthesameway，justas，incommonwith,comparedwith,ontheonehand…ontheotherhand,foronething…foranother，similarly等。▲平行：and，both…and…，aswellas，aswell，neither…nor…or，either…or…，notonly…butalso…等。•很多同学提到高考英语写作都会谈虎色变,因为有无数的高考猛士都惨败在它的手下,失分很严重。其实高考英语英语写作并没有想象中的那么难，只要我们细心品题，精准的使用词和短语，恰到好处的套用句型，合理的安排篇章，高分也不是特别的遥远。当然高考英语作想有质的飞跃，还是需要大家在平时不断积累的。