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看图作文讲评5•请仔细观察以下六幅图,用英语描述其内容,并就图中教师的做法提出你的看法•注意:1.第一幅图的内容已给出.•2.字数120左右•3.签名signature•MaXiaohuwasverycarelessandoftenmademistakesinhishomework,whichmadehisteacherveryangry.OnedayhisteacherhadXiaohuaskhisfather,MaDahua,tosignhisnameinhisexercisebook.第一步：看图提炼要点第二幅图：儿子在回家路上的想法：怕被父亲惩罚/打第三幅图：儿子蒙上眼睛写字第四幅图：父亲也蒙上眼睛写字第五幅图：儿子乘机让父亲签名第六幅图：在父亲取下蒙眼布前，儿子将本子放进书包第二步：简单翻译要点•第二幅图：儿子在回家路上的想法：怕被父亲惩罚/打•Onhiswayhome,Xiaohuthoughthewouldbebeaten/punishedagainbyhisfather.•第三幅图：儿子蒙上眼睛写字•Xiaohucoveredhiseyeswithapieceofclothandkeptwritingsomething.•第四幅图：父亲也蒙上眼睛写字•Hisfatheralsocoveredhiseyeswithapieceofclothandwrotesomething.•第五幅图：儿子乘机让父亲签名•Xiaohuseizedtheopportunitytoputhisexercisebookunderhisfather’spenandgothisfather’ssignature.•第六幅图：在父亲取下蒙眼布前，儿子将本子放进书包•Beforehisfathertookoffthecloth,Xiaohuhadalreadyputtheexercisebookbackintohisschoolbag.第三步：增加要点，使文章逻辑上连贯•要多问几个什么、为什么、怎么样或怎么办•怕被父亲惩罚/打，心情怎么样：•比如焦虑、担心、紧张等•怎么办：•想出好主意•儿子蒙上眼睛不停地写什么字：•结合图画内容可以推断是在写自己的名字（为下文得到父亲的签名做铺垫）•父亲为什么也蒙上眼睛写他的名字：•按常理应该是儿子请他这样做的第四步：柔进这些要点，并注意合并要点•Onhiswayhome,thinkinghewouldbebeatenagainbyhisfather,Xiaohufeltworried.Suddenlyagoodideaoccurredtohim.Assoonashegothome,hecoveredhiseyeswithapieceofclothandkeptwritingtheword”MaXiaohu”onapieceofpaper.Heaskedhisfatherwhetherhecoulddoitashewasdoing.Hisfatherdidso.Seeingthis,Xiaohuseizedtheopportunitytoputhisexercisebookunderhisfather’spenandgothisfather’ssignature.Beforehisfathertookoffthecloth,Xiaohuhadalreadyputtheexercisebookbackintohisschoolbag.第五步：简单阐述自己的看法•通过正反分析、因果分析、一分为二地分析并提出建议等形式来陈诉自己的观点或看法。•正面分析：PersonallyIfirmlybelieve/insistthattheteacher’smethodisafterallforXiaohu’sownsake.反面分析：•Itappearstome/occurstomethat/Thereisnodenyingthattheteacher’smethodisentirelywrong/theteacheristoblameforit/theteachershouldimprovehisteachingmethod.•Itis/unnecessaryfor/notunwise/advisableoftheteachertotakethismeasure/followthisway.因果分析：•Foronething,itisofnousetoforcestudentstostudy;foranother,somestudentsinthiscasewilltellliesto/takeinparents,whichhasabadinfluenceonchildren’sdevelopment/wouldleadtobadresults.一分为二分析并提出建议•Idon’tthinktheteacheristoblamebecausehehadwantedtoletXiaohu’sfatherknowsomethingabouthisson’sstudyatschoolinordertogetXiaohu’sparents’supportineducatingtheirchild,butXiaohu’splayingthetrickwasnotwhattheteacherhadexpected.SoIsuggestthattheteachergohometogetherwithXiaohunexttimetocommunicateface-to-facewithhisparents.形成以下书面表达•MaXiaohuwasverycarelessandoftenmademistakesinhishomework,whichmadehisteacherveryangry.OnedayhisteacherhadXiaohuaskhisfather,MaDahua,tosignhisnameinhisexercisebook.Onhiswayhome,thinkinghewouldbebeatenagainbyhisfather,Xiaohufeltworried.Suddenlyagoodideaoccurredtohim.Assoonashegothome,hecoveredhiseyeswithapieceofclothandkeptwritingtheword”MaXiaohu”onapieceofpaper.Heaskedhisfatherwhetherhecoulddoitashewasdoing.Hisfatherdidso.Seeingthis,Xiaohuseizedtheopportunitytoputhisexercisebookunderhisfather’spenandgothisfather’ssignature.Beforehisfathertookoffthecloth,Xiaohuhadalreadyputtheexercisebookbackintohisschoolbag.•Idon’tthinktheteacheristoblamebecausehehadwantedtoletXiaohu’sfatherknowsomethingabouthisson’sstudyatschoolinordertogetXiaohu’sparents’supportineducatingtheirchild,butXiaohu’splayingthetrickwasnotwhattheteacherhadexpected.SoIsuggestthattheteachergohometogetherwithXiaohunexttimetocommunicateface-to-facewithhisparents.参考答案•MaXiaohuwasverycarelessandoftenmademistakesinhishomework,whichmadehisteacherveryangry.OnedayhisteacherhadXiaohuaskhisfather,MaDahua,tosignhisnameinhisexercisebook.Onhiswayhome,thinkinghewouldbebeaten/punishedagainbyhisfather,Xiaohufeltveryworried.Suddenlyagoodideaoccurredtohim.Assoonashegothome,hecoveredhiseyeswithapieceofclothandkeptwritingtheword”MaXiaohu”onapieceofpaper.Heaskedhisfatherwhetherhecoulddoitashewasdoing.Hisfatherdidso.seeingthis,Xiaohuhurriedlyputhisexercisebookunderhisfather’spenandgothissignature.Whenhisfathertookoffthecloth,Xiaohuhadalreadyputtheexercisebookbackintohisschoolbag.•Ithink…附学生考场习作一篇（原文）•MaXiaohuwasverycarelessandoftenmademistakesinhishomework,whichmadehisteacherveryangry.OnedayhisteacherhadXiaohuaskhisfather,MaDahua,tosignhisnameinhisexercisebook.•Xiaohuwasafraidthathisfatherwouldpunishhim.Suddenly,anideaoccurredtohim.Whenhewenthome,hepretendedtopracticewritinghisnamewithhiseyescoveredbyapieceofcloth.Then,heaskedhisfathertodoso.Whenhisfatherhadhiseyescovered,Xiaohutookhisexercisebookoutquicklyandputitinfrontofhisfather.Bydoingso,hegothisfather’ssignatureeasilywithouttellinghisfatherwhathadhappened.Beforehisfathercouldseeagain,hehadalreadyputhisexercisebookbackinhisschoolbag.•AsfarasIamconcerned,theteacher’sbehaviourdidn’tworkatall.HeshouldhaveeducatedMaXiaohuinanotherwaywhichhelpsXiaohutoovercomehisshortcomings.修改后•MaXiaohuwasverycarelessandoftenmademistakesinhishomework,whichmadehisteacherveryangry.OnedayhisteacherhadXiaohuaskhisfather,MaDahua,tosignhisnameinhisexercisebook.•Onhiswayhome,thinkingthathisfatherwouldpunishhimagain,Xiaohufeltnervous.Suddenly,agoodideaoccurredtohim.Whenhegothome,hekeptwritinghisnamewithhiseyescoveredwithapieceofcloth.Then,h