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Formoregreatresourcessee::PovertyQuestion:Doyouthinkthatrichcountrieshaveadutytostopstarvationinthethirdworld.Generally,starvationisaseverereductioninvitamin,nutrientandenergyintakeandisthemostextremeformofmalnutrition.Asweallknow,almostallofthethirdworldcountriesfacethisseriousproblemduetoloweconomicgrowthandinefficientpoliticsintheircountries.Unlikecitizensinfirstworldcountriesthatcanenjoylifeoratleasthaveanormallife,peopleinthirdworldcountrieshavetosufferallthetimeandliveinmisery.Inmyopinion,Ithinkthattherichcountrieshaveadutytostopstarvationinthethirdworldcountriesbecauserichcountriesaretheonlyoneswhohavemoneytosavelives,theyshouldadvocatethespiritofhumanityupontheearthandspreadthewarmthofloveamongthepeople.Obviously,beingtheonlyonesthathavetheabilityintermsofmoney,richcountriesshouldtakeresponsibilitytostopthestarvation.Themainreasonthatthirdworldcountriesaresufferingfromthestarvationistheylackmoneytotakecareoftheircitizens’needs.RichcountriessuchastheUnitedStates,EnglandandCanadahavesufficientcapitaltogivefundstothosethirdworldcountriestosolvetheirproblemsandsavethousandsofliveseasily.Besidesthat,theserichcountriesshouldalsolendahandtothirdworldcountriesintermsofmedicineorfoodsupplies.Secondly,richcountriesshouldpromotethespiritofhumanityupontheearthbygivinghelptostopthestarvation.Whenrichcountriestakethefirststeptobetheliberatorofthirdworldcountries,thespiritofhelpfulwillbespread.Then,othercountrieswillfeelgoodandfollowthemtogivehelpinordertogetridofstarvationproblems.Eventually,thewholeworldcanworkhandinhandtoeliminatestarvationproblemsinthirdworldcountrieswhichdonotbringsanybenefittous.Also,richcountrieshaveadutytostopstarvationtospreadthewarmthofloveamongthepeople.Itiscertainlytruethatpovertycandrivepeopleintocrime.Sincetheyarehungry,theywilltryanywaytogetfood.Forinstance,thereisahighpossibilityforthemtostealorrob.Bygivinghelptothem,theywillfeelthatsomewhereintheworldtherearestillhavepeoplewhocareandareconcernedaboutthem.Thus,theywillbecomestrongerandhavehopestocontinuetheirlife.Inconclusion,Ithinkthatrichcountrieshaveadutytostopstarvationinthirdworldcountriesbecauserichcountriesaretheonlyoneswhohavemoneytosavethelives,theyshouldadvocatethespiritofhumanityupontheearthandtospreadthewarmthofloveamongthepeople.So,alltherichcountriesandalsotheotherstatesthathavetheabilitytohelpshouldworktogetherinsolvingthestarvationproblemsforthesakeofworldpeace.Comments:Alotofrepetitioninthisassignmentandquiteanumberofmistakessomeofwhichmakeitdifficulttounderstand.Timespentonmorewordswouldhavebeenbetterspentimprovinggrammaticalaccuracy.Otherargumentsthatcouldbeincluded:Difficulttogivemoneytodictatorships,governmentswhowouldnotgivethefooddirectlytothepeople,warzonesandnaturalfamines.Rating:IELTSBand6WordCount:486Deleted:facingDeleted:theDeleted:havingDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:toDeleted:theDeleted:areDeleted:ofDeleted:onDeleted:,Deleted:andthelistgoonDeleted:peoplelifeDeleted:supplyDeleted:continuously.Deleted:Duetothewealththatrichcountrieshave,theyforsurehavethedutytostopthestarvation.¶Comment[JA1]:WordchoiceDeleted:tendtoDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:problemasDeleted:insufficientoffoodandsufferwithstarveallthetimeDeleted:inDeleted:sinorderDeleted:sDeleted:theDeleted:theDeleted:dueto