英语写作指导----supporting-evidence

ThesisStatementsWhatarethecommonmistakes?WritingannouncementsToobroadofastatementToonarrowofastatementDevelopingtoomanyideasWhatDidWeDoLastWeek?Practice!WithapartnerfindthemistakewiththesentencesA,TN,TB,2,OK1.Thisessaywilldiscussthepeopleyoumeetinexerciseclass2.Imadeseveralmistakesintheprocessoftryingtowintherespectandaffectionofmyteenagestepson(继子)3.Therearenowmoresingle-parenthouseholdsinourcountrythaneverbefore4.Organizationiskeytobeingasuccessfulparent5.Ihadsquash,tomatoes,andcorninmygardenlastsummer6.Thispaperisaboutsharinghousework7.Inmanyways,sportsareanimportantpartofAmericanlife8.Widespreadgamblinghaschangedprofessionalfootballfortheworse9.Advertisinghasbadeffectsonallofsociety10.Myroommatehashisownuniquesystemsforstudying,writingtermpapers,andcleaningoutroom11.MyroommateandIarecompatibleinmostways,butwestillhaveconflictsattimes12.MylifehasmovedinnewdirectionssincetherewardingjobIhadworkingwitholderpeoplelastsummerATNOKTNAOKTBOKTBOK22Practice!1.Thisessaywilldiscussthepeopleyoumeetinexerciseclass2.Therearenowmoresingle-parenthouseholdsinourcountrythaneverbefore3.Ihadsquash,tomatoes,andcorninmygardenlastsummer4.Thispaperisaboutsharinghousework5.Inmanyways,sportsareanimportantpartofAmericanlife6.Advertisinghasbadeffectsonallofsociety7.MyroommateandIarecompatibleinmostways,butwestillhaveconflictsattimes8.MylifehasmovedinnewdirectionssincetherewardingjobIhadworkingwitholderpeoplelastsummerRewriteeachofthesentencesthatcontainederrorsasappropriatethesisstatementsTheSecondStepofEssayWritingThefirststepofessaywritingistobeginwithapoint(thethesis).ThesecondstepistoSupporttheThesiswithSpecificEvidencePracticeForthethreefollowingoutlinesaddthethirdlocalsupportingpointthatwillparallelthetwoalreadyprovided1.Thefirstdayonanewjobcanbenerve-racking.A.MeetingnewpeopleB.FindingyourwayaroundanewplaceC._______________________________2.CollegeisstressfulformanypeopleA.WorryaboutgradesB.WorryabouttheGaoKaoC.________________________________3.MymotherhasthreequalitiesIadmireA.PatienceB.ThoughtfulnessC.________________________________TheImportanceofSpecificDetailsThethesismustbedevelopedwiththreesupportingpoints.Eachsupportingpoint(topicsentence)mustalsobedevelopedbutwithspecificdetailsTwowaysspecificdetailsarevaluable:1.Detailsareinterestingandexcitethereader’sinterest.2.DetailsexplainandprovethepointsyoumakeTheImportanceofSpecificDetailsWhatalwaysseemstohappen!Bodyparagraphsonlycontainvaguegeneralitiesratherthanspecificsupportingdetails.Readthefollowingparagraphthathasbeenwrittenwithgeneralitiesinsteadofspecificdetails-TheImportanceofSpecificDetailsThisisanessayabouttheannoyanceofgoingtothemovies:Someoftheotherpatronsareevenmoreofaproblemthanthetheateritself.Manypeopleinthetheateroftenshowthemselvestobeinconsiderate.Theymakenoisesandcreatedisturbancesattheirseats.Includedarepeopleineveryagegroup,fromtheyoungtotheold.SomeactasiftheywereathomeintheirownlivingroomwatchingtheTVset.Peopleareoftenmessy,sothatyou’reconstantlyawareofallthefoodthey’reeating.Peoplearealsoalwaysmovingaroundnearyou,creatingadisturbanceandinterruptingyourenjoymentofthemovieWearegoingtoanalyzethisparagraphandshowhowmuchbetteritiswithmorespecificdetailsTheImportanceofSpecificDetailsVagueSupportManypeopleinthetheatershowthemselvestobeinconsiderate.Theymakenoisesandcreatedisturbancesattheirseats.Includedarepeopleineveryagegroup,fromtheyoungtotheold.SomeactasiftheywereintheirownlivingroomwatchingtheTVset.SpecificSupportLittlekidsraceupanddowntheaisles,usuallyingigglingpacks,Teenagerstrytoimpresstheirfriendsbytalkingbacktothescreen,whistling,andmakingwhattheyconsidertobehilariousnoises.Adultsactasiftheywereathomeintheirownlivingroomandcommentloudlyontheagesofstarsorwhymoviesaren’tgoodanymoreTheImportanceofSpecificDetailsVagueSupportSpecificSupportPeopleareoftenmessy,sothatyou’reconstantlyawareofallthefoodthey’reeatingPeopleofallagescrinklecandywrappers,stickgumontheirseats,anddroppopcorntuborcupsofcrushediceandsodaonthefloorTheImportanceofSpecificDetailsVagueSupportSpecificSupportPeoplearealsoalwaysmovingaroundnearyou,creatingadisturbanceandinterruptingyourenjoymentofthemovieTheyalsocoughandburp,squirmendlesslyintheirseats,fileoutforrepeatedtripstotherestroomsorconcessionstand,andelbowyououtofthearmrestoneithersideofyourseatTheImportanceofAdequateDetailsWhenaddingdetailsitsisessentialthatyouprovideENOUGHspecificdetailstofullysupportthepoint(topicstatement)oftheparagraph.Fartoooftenyouressaysrelyonredundancy(冗余)insteadofadequatedetailsTheImportanceofAdequateDetailsWearegoingtoreadtwodifferentparagraphsandyoumustdecidewhichisadequatelydevelopedandwhichusesmostlyvague,general,wordysentencestoconcealthelackofdetail.EternalYouth?–No,thanksIwouldn’twanttobeateenageragain,firstofall,becauseIwouldn’twanttoworryabouttalkingtogirls.Istillrememberhowscaryitwastocallupagirlandaskherout.Myheartwouldrace,mypulsewouldpound,andperspiration(汗)wouldtrickledown(涓滴)myface,addingtotheacnebythesecond.Ineverknewwhethermyvoicewouldcomeoutdeepandmasculine,likeatelevisionanchorman’s