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课例赏析AWiseDeer&ACowardlyTiger浙江省十校联盟2019年10月高三联考读后续写富阳中学王璐AnalysisofthetextLiterarygenre(文体):Fable寓言故事Features(特征):•Tellashortstoryusingsimplewordsandsentences,fromwhichyoucanlearnalesson.•Thecharactercanbeapersonorananimal.续写材料的文体和文体特征小说、童话、寓言、故事语言特征语言的协同性•1.关注语篇整体语言表达•2.关注文中主要时态和语态•3.分析文中句式特点•4.仔细研读各类描写•5.关注修辞语言表达：主要时态和语态：主要句式摘记：各类描写：修辞：语言表达：语言简洁，表达不复杂（简单句较多）；含一些对话；故事叙述主要时态和语态：一般过去时；主动语态主要句式摘记：Thedeerwasfrightenedbecause...(原状从)Fortunately,thetigerwasnot...(adv,+句子)Thedeerwastryingto...whensheheard...(时状从）④Thecunningjackalwasnowsurethetigherwas....(宾从）各类描写：动作：Theyoungoneswanderedhaplyhereandthere.心理：Thedeerwasfrieghtened...环境：Therewerebonesofdeadanimalsalloverthecave.......修辞：拟人(把动物当作人来描写，赋予有生命的动物以人的禀性，使之像人一样地说话，行动，有思想，有感情。)WhoWhereTaskI:ReadforplotsMotherdeerandherfawns;atiger;ajackalinthetiger’scaveHerreaction?stayedcalmandthoughtofaplanMotherdeerwastryingtoleadherfawnsoutofthecavewhenshesawthetigercomingback.Whathappenedtoscarethetigerawaybypretendingtobeafierceanimalwaitingtokillitforfood.Didtheplanwork?Thetigergotfrightenedandranaway…Motherdeerclever/smart/intelligent,brave,staycalmindangerWhileescaping,thetigercameacrossajackal,whosuggestedtheygobacktothecavetofindoutthetruth.WhathappenedAgree?didn’twanttotakeachance;afraidofbeingleftalonetodieJackal’sproposal?knottheirtailstogether;neverleaveAgree?agreedunwillinglyWhy?frightened;didn’ttrustthejackal.cowardly,timidthetigerthejackalcunning(狡猾的)，notreliableintheeyesofthetiger整体阅读，确定故事基本情节who,when,where,whathapped,howwouldthestorycontinuewhowhenwherewhathappenedsummarizethestorywhoMotherdeerandherfawns;atiger;ajackalwhenwhenthemotherdeerwastryingtoleadheryoungonesoutofthecavewhereinthetiger'scavewhathappenedMotherdeersawthetigercomingtowardsthecave.Shethoughtofaplantoscarethetigeraway.Thetigercameacrossajackalwhosuggestedtheygobacktothecavetofindoutthetruth.Inordertoconvincethetiger,thejackaltiedtheirtailsinanotandwalkedtowadsthecavetogether.summarizethestoryOnedaywhenmotherdeerwastryingtoleadheryoungonesoutofthecaveshesawthetigercomingtowardsit.Stayingcalm,shethoughtofaplantoscarethetigeraway.Whileescaping,thetigercameacrossajackalwhosuggestedtheygobacktofindoutthetruth.Inordertoconvincethetiger,thejackaltiedtheirtailsinanotandthenwenttowardsthecavetogethe.人物性格分析1.从人物的动作中2.从人物的言语中3.从他人的评价中whotraitswhotraitsMotherdeerclever/smart/intelligent,brave,staycalmindangerthetigercowardly,timidjackalcunning,notreliableintheeyesofthetigherPara.1Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.Para.2Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.TaskIII:Whattowrite?•Whatdidthedeersaythatshockedthetigerandconvincedhimhewascheatedbythejackal?•Thinkaboutwhatthejackaldidtothetigerjustnow?persuadethetigertoreturntothecave;knottheirtailstogether•Howwouldthejackalcheatthetigerbydoingso?thetigerclever/smart/intelligent,brave,staycalmindangercowardly,timidMotherdeerthejackalcunning(狡猾的)，notreliableintheeyesofthetigerHowfrightenedwouldthedeerfeelwhenseeingthetigerandthejackalcoming?Wouldthetigerhaveapeacefultalkwiththefierceanimalsincehewasafraidtobeeatenbyhim?Washeeasilyfooled?Ifheheardhewouldbeeaten,wouldhebelieveitandgetscared?Para.1Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.Para.2Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.TaskII:Whattowrite?•Howdidthetigerfeelandwhatwouldhedo?•Whatwouldhappentothetiger,thejackalandthedeerintheend?•Theme:intelligencecansaveonefromdangeroussituations续写情节发展1.情节合理、上下文衔接连贯；2.已知情节+第二段开头句推断第一段可能的情节发展；3.人物性格和情节创设要吻合；4.渲染、升华主题（寓言、心灵鸡汤类的文本）。soutoutthetenwordssoutoutthetenwordsmaincharactersdeer,tiger,jackalwherecavenounsvoice,tails,cowardverbscapture,escapeadjectivepowerfulQuestionsforthecontinuedplotspara1para2Questionsforthecontinuedplotspara1para2Thedeersawthejackalandthetigercomingtogether.Thetigerwasshockedtohearthisandhewassurenowthejackalcheatedhim.1.Whatdidthedeersaythatshockedthetigerandconvincedhimthathewascheatedbythejackal?1.Howdidthetigerfeelandwhatwouldhedo?2.Whatthejackaldidtothetigerjustnow?2.Whatwouldhappentothetiger,thejackalandthedeerintheend?3.Howwouldthejackalcheatthetigerbydoingso?关于语言那些事儿问题:•1.句式单一，只会简单句；•2.语法错误严重，句不成句；•3.词汇严重缺乏，词不达意；•4.中式英语，缺乏地道表达；•5.标点混乱，往往一逗到底。仝亚军•1.地道的语言输入，阅读原文、原著，培养语感和文学修养；•2.语言微技能训练；•3.好词好句摘抄，分类整理；读写续地道的语言输入，阅读原文、原著，培养语感和文学修养；语言微技能训练语言微技能训练语言微技能训练语言微技能训练语言微技能训练语言微技能训练从句子仿写说起基本学情语法基础很差，句子结构意识薄弱平时很忙，没时间看好书好文章肚子里没货，积累量少，流于表面基本操作：选取典型句子作为仿写对象分析句子，划出句子主要成分用该句子框架完成给定语言的翻译翻译句子，完成句子框架结构式用该句子框架学生自主完成新句子的创造•YesterdaywhenthebrightsunblazeddownonthewiltedcornmyfatherandIwalkedaroundtheedgeofthenewgroundtoplanafence.Thecowskeptcomingthroughthechestnutoaksonthecliffandrunningovertheyoungcorn.Theybitoffthetipsofthecornandtrampleddownthestubble.—Love示例：•YesterdaywhenthebrightsunblazeddownonthewiltedcornmyfatherandIwalkedaroundtheedgeofthenewgroundtoplanafence.Thecowskeptcomingthroughthechestnutoaksonthecliffandrunningovertheyoungcorn.Theybitoffthetipsofthecornandtrampleddownthestubble.—Love示例：•YesterdaywhenthebrightsunblazeddownonthewiltedcornmyfatherandIwalkedaroundtheedgeofthene