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2020高考英语浙江十校联考读后续写写作指导一．续写原文阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Aboutahalf-milebehindourMinnesotafarmlayapond.Insummer,mybrotherHarryandIwouldrunthroughastandofoaktreestoskipstonesthere.Thepondworeacollarofblackmud.Itwasnotaplaceforswimming.Inlatesummer,thepondwouldbecoveredbyagreenandbubblyscum（起泡的浮渣）.Sometimesastrong,unpleasantsmellrosefromit.Westayedaway.Whenwintercame,thepondwasonceagainaninvitingplace.Onedaywhenicecoveredit,Harrysaidtome,“Trywalkingacross.”Theicelookedsolid.Nowatershowedthroughit,butIhesitated.“Goahead.”Harryurged.“Tryit.You’relighterthanIam.Iftheiceholds,wecanrunandslidecarefullyonit.It’llbefun.”IwantedtopleaseHarry,andIthoughtaboutthefunofalongslideontheice.Ibegantoslideacrossthepond.Inthemiddleofthepond,theicegavewaywithasuddencrack（裂缝）!Istretchedout（伸展）myarms.ThenextthingIknewIwashangingontotheedgeofaholeintheicebyarmsoutstretchedontheice.FrommyshouldersdownIhunginicywater.Ithoughtofthebottomofthepond.Iknewitwouldbeblackandawfuldownthere,fullofmudandmayberottingcreatures.Itriedtoclimboutofthehole,butwhenIgotakneeontheice,itbrokelikewindowglass.AgainandagainItriedtogetout.Againandagaintheicebrokeintopieces.Theholewidened.Iwaswearingacoatofheavymaterial.Asitbecamecompletelywet,itdraggedmedown.Iwastiredofthestruggleandrestedwithmyarmsstretchedoutontheice.IlookedatHarryonshore.Heseemedrootedtothespot.“Ican’tgetout!”IscreamedwhenIcaughtsomebreath.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Harryturnedandranfromthepond.Paragraph2:ThemomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.二．写作构思1.确定文章主题：原文摘自《英语沙龙》这本杂志，本文以第一人称进行续写，主要讲述了姐弟两个人在冬天去池塘玩耍，在弟弟怂恿下，主人公走到结了冰的河水上却掉入水中的故事。所以主题为主人公“我”吸取经验，不再鲁莽行事。很多学生会把主题误定位“亲情”或者“谅解”等，容易写偏题。2.写作难点：①对于提示句的理解和衔接；②第二段如何进行结尾三．连句成篇Paragraph1:Harryturnedandranfromthepond.1.Seeingmybrotherrunningaway,sosurprisedwasIthatIcouldn’tstopwondering,“isheseekinghelporisheleavingmeinthelurch?”（动作+情感+语言的描写三连击，采用非谓语位于句首做状语，情感部分运用部分倒装）2.However,Harrycamebackwithanoaklimb,slowlyandcautiouslyapproachingthepond,andyelling,“please,holdonthere!”（3个串联动作，谓语，非谓语运用自如，再结合进语言描写）3.Scarcelyhadhearrivedattheedgeoftheicyholewhenhebentover,pushingthelimbtowardme.（动作描写，加入scarcely...when...部分倒装句型）4.Whenaslendertopbranchwaswithinreach,Iimmediatelygrabbedittightly.5.Handoverhand,Iclimbedoutofthehole,wetandcoldfromheadtotoe.6.Harrytookoffhisowncoatandgaveittome,murmuringwithhisheadlowered,“Iamsosorry...”（与句2相似，3个串联动作结合进语言描写）7.Unabletoutterasingleword,Ijustwantedtogobackhometohavesomethingwarm.Paragraph2:ThemomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.1.Worriedtoknowwhathappenedtome,mumraisedhervoiceandasked,“honey,whathappened?”（情感+动作+语言描写三连击）2.“IwenttothepondwithHarry,and...”Iexplainedthewholethingtomum,andhardlycouldIcontainmytears.（语言+动词，结尾运用部分倒装）3.AfterknowingthathowterriblethingIhadmet,shewasoverwhelmedwithsadness.4.Atthesametime,shewenttothebathroom,filledthetubwithhotwaterandhelpedmetohavearecoveringshower.（3个串联动作）5.OnlyafterIfinishedshowerdidIfeelthatIcamealiveagain.（再次运用部分倒装，整篇文章共运用4种不同类型的倒装句）6.Ofcourse,mumalsodidn’tforgettogivemybrotheragoodlectureandpunishmentaswell——itwastimeforhimtogetintotrouble!7.Sincethen,Ichanged.IlearnedtosaynoifIdidn’ttrulywanttodosomething.（点题）四．成品赏析Paragraph1:Harryturnedandranfromthepond.Seeingmybrotherrunningaway,sosurprisedwasIthatIcouldn’tstopwondering,“isheseekinghelporisheleavingmeinthelurch?”However,Harrycamebackwithanoaklimb,slowlyandcautiouslyapproachingthepond,andyelling,“please,holdonthere!”Scarcelyhadhearrivedattheedgeoftheicyholewhenhebentover,pushingthelimbtowardme.Whenaslendertopbranchwaswithinreach,Iimmediatelygrabbedittightly.Handoverhand,Iclimbedoutofthehole,wetandcoldfromheadtotoe.Harrytookoffhisowncoatandgaveittome,murmuringwithhisheadlowered,“Iamsosorry...”Unabletoutterasingleword,Ijustwantedtogobackhometohavesomethingwarm.Paragraph2:ThemomentIcrashedthroughthekitchendoor,sobbing,mumrushedover.Worriedtoknowwhathappenedtome,mumraisedhervoiceandasked,“honey,whathappened?”“IwenttothepondwithHarry,and...”Iexplainedthewholethingtomum,andhardlycouldIcontainmytears.Afterknowingthathowterriblethingihadmet,shewasoverwhelmedwithsadness.Atthesametime,shewenttothebathroom,filledthetubwithhotwaterandhelpedmetohavearecoveringshower.OnlyafterIfinishedshowerdidIfeelthatIcamealiveagain.Ofcourse,mumalsodidn’tforgettogivemybrotheragoodlectureandpunishmentaswell——itwastimeforhimtogetintotrouble!Sincethen,Ichanged.IlearnedtosaynoifIdidn’ttrulywanttodosomething.