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Howtocontinueastory?标准解读Whatmakesagoodcontinuationwriting?阅卷时考虑以下几个方面：(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度;(2)内容的丰富性;(3)应用语法结构结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;(4)上下文的连贯。第五档（21-25分）（1）与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的段落开头语衔接合理;（2）所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确;（3）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，所续写短文结构紧凑。段落开头语与后续语的衔接。后续两段间的衔接；原文与后续的衔接；内容多视角、多维度；语言结构，词汇选用多样。衔接丰富准确情感表达准确；语言描述准确。Standupifyouthinkyoucan…能做到续写内容段落间、与段落开头语以及原文高度衔接。能做到续写内容多视角、多维度以及语言结构、词汇丰富。能做到情感表达以及语言描述准确。能做到在规定时间（25-30分钟）内完成上述三项任务。真题演练keyinformationWhywasthebearherebefore?Whatdiditdo?thebearheadedbackWhatwouldthebeardonext?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...段落开头语与后续语的衔接；原文与后续的衔接。hunted,attacked,wasscaredoffattackagain？ThepolarbearElliand“I”Result?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...attackedreacted后续两段间的衔接；原文与后续的衔接。Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Result?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...段落开头语与后续语的衔接；后续两段间的衔接；原文与后续的衔接。Thebearwasangryandattackedthefencefiercely.ElliandIwerefrightenedandtrytodosomethingtoprotectourselves.ElliandIwereinadangeroussituation.Result?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...内容多视角、多维度；语言结构，词汇选用多样。Thebearwasangryandattackedthefencefiercely.hisappearanceeyesmouthpawshisactchargedatthefenceexposedhisteethglaredat..smashedhispawsstoodonhisbacklegs…redmassive,powerfulbig,fullofbloodResult?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...ElliandIwerefrightenedandtrytodosomethingtoprotectourselves.内容多视角、多维度；语言结构，词汇选用多样。“I”Elliexpression？feeling？action？tools？Result?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...情感表达、语言描述准确叙述者情感？原文语言风格？Whatarethelanguagefeaturesoftheoriginalstory?Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.personificationactionverbshejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbear…Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.…firedblankshotgunshellsintotheair…hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepawsSoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar,thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.Whatarethelanguagefeaturesofthestory?CarefuluseofadjectivesandadverbsWhatarethelanguagefeaturesofthestory?ParticipleMakingthebestofthiscloseencounter,Itooksomepicturesofthebear.Withanangryroar,thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.…throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.AdverbialphrasesResult?Paragraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktooutcamp...Thebearwasangryandattackedthefencefiercely.ElliandIwerefrightenedandtrytodosomethingtoprotectourselves.ElliandIfailedtoscareoffthebearandwereinadangeroussituation.OnepossibleversionParagraph1:Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp...Heexposedhissharpteeth,glaringatusasheranforward.Andagainthebearstoodonhisbacklegs,wantingtobreakthefencelikeamonster.Itseemedthathismouthwasfullofbloodandhiseyeswereredwithanger.Seeingsuchterriblesight,Icouldfeelacoldnessfloodingfrommyback.Elliwasfrozenthere,withthemouthwidelyopen.Ihadtotakeaction,soIpickedmycourageandtriedtofrightenhimawaywiththepepperspray,butfinallyfailed.Result?Paragraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Findthekeyinformation.Keepaskingquestions.Readthegivensentence.段落开头语与后续语的衔接；后续两段间的衔接；原文与后续的衔接。内容丰富，多视角、多维度；语言结构，词汇选用丰富多样。情感表达、语言描述准确Referbacktotheoriginalreadingmaterialwhennecessary.Whatmighthappenafterthehelicopterarrived?Thepolarbear…Mycamera…Thehelicopter…MywifeElliandI……Thefence…Whatmighthappentothepolarbear?ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Thepolarbearshouldbealiveandmighthavesomethingfordinner.OnepossibleversionParagraph2:Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Itlandednearourcampanditsloudnoisesscaredthebear.Helookedannoyedandchargedatusagain.Icriedout,“Watchout!”Weinstantlysteppedawayandranasfastaswecouldtothehelicopter.ThankMyGod!Wesucceededinclimbingontothehelicopter,breathingasighofrelief.Lookingdownatthebear,wefoundthathewaseatingthebreadwejustmade.Severalhourslater,wearrivedathomesafeandsound,butwerealizedthatweshoulddosomethingtohelpthebears.技巧提炼原文与后续的衔接；后续两段间的衔接；段落开头语与后续语的衔接。Note：时态，故事叙述者与原文一致；情节一定要回照原文，合情合理。内容多视角、多维度；语言结构，词汇选用多样。衔接丰富准确Note：高立意、正能量；传递积极的情感态度情感表达；语言描述。Note：抓牢原文情感主线，关注主人公情感变化。研究并遵从原文语言风格。Findthekeyinformation.Keepaskingquestions.Readthegivensentencefirst.Referbacktotheoriginalreadingmaterialifnecessary.Homework3.Exchangeyourwritingwithyourfriendsandgivepossiblesuggestionsfromtheplotanddescriptionofdetails.1.Pleasefinishthewholestory.2.Pleaseproofreadyourwritingfromthefollowingfouraspects:punctuation,spelling,grammarandchoicesofwords.