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1.原文一致原则内容要前后衔接，上下连贯语言表达风格一致。2.正能量原则故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。3.曲折性原则凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。写作指导1342读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件。细读首句，构思框架仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。修改润色，整洁誊写思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。增加细节，开始写作依据情节发和常识，在确定的框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。读后续写Aliandhisyoungersister,Zahra,livedwiththeirparentsinapoorneighborhood.Theirmotherwasverysickandtheirfatherwasstrugglingtofindajob,andtheyhadonlyalittlemoneywithwhichtobuyfood.Astheyhadnotpaidtherentforseveralmonths,thelandlordwasbreathingdowntheirnecks(盯着他们).Oneday,AlitookZahra’sshoestoashoerepairmantobefixed,buthelostthemonthewayhome.Itwasn’tuntilhegothomethatherealizedhehadlosttheshoes.Hewasafraidthathisparentswouldbeangryanddisappointed,sohebeggedhissistertokeepitsecret.ZahraagreedandthetwodecidedtoshareAli’srunningshoes.Zahra’sschoolhourswereinthemorning,soshewouldwearthemfirst.Afterschool,shewouldrushbackandgivethemtoAli.Hecouldthenruntohisschool,whichbeganintheafternoon.Althoughheranasfastashecould,Alioftenarrivedlateandwaswarnedbytheschool.Aliheardaboutalongdistanceracethatwasheldfortheboysinthecity.Whenhelearnedthatthethirdprizewasanewpairofshoes,hedecidedtotakepart.Heranhomeexcitedlyandpromisedhissisterthathewouldwinherthenewshoes.Thedayofracearrived.Alihadastrongstart,buthalfwaythroughtheracehebegantogettiredandhislegsbegantoache.Gettingmoreandmoreexhausted(筋疲力尽的),hethoughtonlyofZahraandhispromisetoher.Dreamingofthenewshoes,hewouldwinforhissistergavehimstrength,andhestayedrightbehindthetwofastestrunners,determinedtofinishthird.Suddenly,asthefinishlinedrewnear,anotherrunnercollided(碰撞)withAlifrombehindandhecrashedtotheground.Paragraph1：Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.Paragraph2：Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的人物，时态(通常是一般过去时)，事件(故事的起因和经过)，语言特色(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持不变)，等等。人物时态和事件语言特色不要变1charactersAli,Zahra,Ali'sparents,anotherrunnertensesimplepasttenseevents●Aliandhisyoungersister,Zahra,livedwiththeirparentsinapoorneighborhood.●Oneday,AlitookZahra’sshoestobefixed,buthelostthemonthewayhome.HesharedhisshoeswithZahratogotoschool.●AlidecidedtotakepartinalongdistanceracetowinZahranewshoes.●Intherace,Aligottiredsoon,buthedreamedofthenewshoesforhissisterthathedeterminedtofinishthird.●Suddenly,anotherrunnercollidedwithAliandAlicrashedtotheground.事件梳理●●阿里拿萨拉的鞋子去修补，但是在回家的路上弄丢了。●为了给妹妹赢得作为奖品的新鞋，阿里决定参加长跑。●决心要拿第三名。●另一个跑步者与阿里相撞，阿里摔倒在地。语言特色1.关联词语文中使用了so,but,suddenly等连接词语。2.分词短语Gettingmoreandmoreexhausted(筋疲力尽的),hethoughtonlyofZahraandhispromisetoher.Dreamingofthenewshoes，hewouldwinforhissister...Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.3.强调结构Itwasn’tuntilhegothomethat...4.各类从句让步状语从句：Althoughheranasfastashecould,...时间状语从句：Whenhelearnedthat...定语从句：...alongdistanceracethatwasheldfortheboys...宾语从句：...promisedhissisterthathewouldwin...细读首句，构思框架由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。2两段首句定一框二框二首正能量第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.（阿里抬起头，看见其他男孩跑在前面。）Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.（阿里满心欢喜地快步走回家。）Paragraph1：1.由续写的第一段首句“sawtheotherboysrushingahead”可知，在阿里摔倒的时候，其他男孩都已经超越他了。2.由第二段首句“Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.”可知，下段比赛已经结束，阿里开心地快步走回家，证明应是得到了想要的奖品。本段写阿里在比赛中的所想、所做和所遇。注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。构思框架两段首句定一框由第一段框架可知，第一段中坚持完成比赛的阿里得到了奖品。那本段应是阿里赶着回家把鞋子送给妹妹，兄妹俩的所说、所做、所感。Paragraph2：1.由续写的第二段首句“Filledwithpleasure”可知，阿里赢得了他想要的奖品，急着回家送给妹妹。2.由正能量结尾可知，阿里实现了当初对妹妹的承诺。要写出妹妹等待礼物时的紧张，兄妹俩对得到奖品的激动之情，突出哥哥对妹妹的承诺和爱。构思框架二框二首正能量增加细节，开始写作在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为“58细节添加法”。3Paragraph1Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.（阿里抬起头，看见其他男孩跑在前面。）构思从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，在他摔倒时大家已经冲到前面;从下段首句Filledwithpleasure说明阿里在比赛结束时是开心的，而且想快点回家说明好消息，所以本段应是写阿里在比赛中的所想、所做和所遇。因此，本段可以这样构思：Paragraph2Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.（阿里满心欢喜地快步走回家。）构思从本段首句可知，阿里开心地赶回家，上段末阿里得到了奖品，那么，本段是写把奖品送给妹妹的情景。写出妹妹等待礼物的紧张和兄妹俩得到奖品时的感动之情。因此，可以这样构思：修改润色，整洁誊写审读初稿，注意语义是否衔接，前后是否连贯，事件是否符合逻辑，语言特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后，整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。4Paragraph1Alilookedupandsawtheotherboysrushingahead.Refusingtogiveup,heranasfastashecould.Hedashedacrossthefinishinglineandwonthefourthprize.Thinkinghewouldlethissisterdown,Alicouldn’thelpcrying.JustthenhesuddenlyheardtheannouncementfromthebroadcastthathewonthethirdprizeastherunnerwhoknockedAlidownwasdisqualifiedforbreakingtherule.Holdingtheshoesclosetohischestduringtheawardceremony,Alifelthappyasheeventuallywontheshoesforhissister.Paragraph2Filledwithpleasure,Aliwalkedhomequickly.Hecouldnotwaittoseehissister.Onhisarrival,AlifoundZahrawaswaitingoutside.Nervousandanxious,Zahrawonderedwhetherherbrotherhadbroughtherwhatshewasexpecting.“Zahra,seewhatIhavegotforyou,”Alisaidexcitedly,takingtheprizeoutofhisbag.TheinstantZahrasawtheshoes,herfacelitup.SothrilledwasshethatshethrewherselfatAli.“Thankyou!Ali.”Tearsofjoywelledupintheireyesasthebrotherandthesisterhuggedtightlytogether.■阿里被人撞倒后没有放弃，最终因为判定那个选手取消资格重夺第三，最终得到奖品送给妹妹，体现故事的曲折性原则。1.语义衔接：Refusingto...could.与上文语义衔接；Hedashedacross...体现正能量，为所