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Continuationwriting读后续写什么是读后续写?•提供一篇350词左右的材料(一般是记叙文,且以事件发生的时间为序),短文中会将10个关键词画下划线。•根据该材料的内容情节等将其发展为一篇150词左右的逻辑合理情节完整的短文。•需要续写两个段落且要用到至少5个关键词,每个段落都给出了第一句。【2018浙江高考真题】Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad'sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn‘tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.【答题时需注意】1.所续写短文的词数应为l50左右;2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.__________________________Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.___________________________________读后续写考查什么?•核心素养:•语言能力:阅读和写作•思维品质:想象能力和创新精神•具体说来,应该是这四个方面•把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力•语言运用的准确性和丰富性•对语篇结构的把控能力•创造新思维能力评分标准•得分要素:•与所给短文及段落开头与的衔接程度•内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况•应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性•上下文的连贯性•扣分标准:•总分25分,按五个档次给分•根据内容及语言初步定档•词数少于130的,扣2分•单词拼写及标点符号使用情况,视其对交际的影响程度酌情处理•书写较差以至于影响交际,可酌情降低评分档次评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档(21-25分)与所给短文融合度高,与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富,应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)与所给短文融合度较高,与所提供的各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富,应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写的短文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分)与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。写出了若干有关内容,应用了四个以上短文中标出的关键词语。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义表达。应用简单的语句间连接成分,使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分)与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接写出了一些有关内容,应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达。较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分)与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。产出内容较少,很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达。缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容连贯。与原文剧情融洽,逻辑合理续写内容丰富有看点,用了关键词语法结构和词汇多样准确语句间衔接自然,结构紧凑解题思路搞清原文剧情回扣原文,结合段首句确定剧情走向融入关键词,想象细节拟写草稿丰富细节,润色Step1精读文章,搞清思路Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad'sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn‘tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don’tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.暑假带我去西部的农场度假我们在听着蛙鸣和声入睡早上我帮忙鸡,父亲和叔叔骑马放我很羡慕,于是和父亲去骑马他们叮嘱晚餐别,沿着走能不我们骑马就了,风景很美feedthechickensRiversheeptrackUnclePaul,farmhouseDon’tbelateforsupper!MydadStep2回扣原文,设计剧情Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.________________Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark._______________Step3拟写草稿,用上关键词•怎样让记叙文生动起来呢?•动作描写2-5个•环境描写1-2个•对话1-2个•表情或心理1-2个•已给提示词汇:dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,feed,sheep,late,track,getlost,sight话题激活词汇:•情感:panic,relief,nervous,worried•动作:run,cry,thinktooneself•环境:scenery,mountain,range,valley,river,lake,forest,sun,set,wind,blowSuddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.(已给出)DadandIfounditwassocutethatwedecidedtorunafterit.Afterawhile,wewerecompletelylostintheforest.Therewasnothingleftinoursightbutthetrees.“Wemaynotbeabletomakeitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughttomyself.Afteraseriesofuselessattemptstofindawayout,wefelthungryandtired.动作一动作三+心情对话(内心独白)动作二环境描写Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Wegotstuckintheforest.Andanunexpectedshoweraddedtothedifficultyofusinfindingawayhome,for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