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ContinuationWritingOnabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasnotadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase.Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidnotthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.对第五档(21-25)作文的描述：1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落、开头语衔接合理。2.内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。3.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；4.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑；评分标准criterionagoodContinuationwritingStorypositiveendingvividdescriptionunderlinedwordsfeelingplotThemepWhopWhenpWherepWhatMacMac’sfriendsPaulandBeckyOnabright,warmJulyafternoonOnthewaytoAlaskaabeautifulplaceAwolfquicklycaughtupwithMacReadforthemeWhatisthestoryabout?MacandhisfriendswerecyclingtoAlaskawhenoneofhisfriendshadstoppedtorepairthebike,soMaccarriedonalone.Allofasudden,hewasfollowedbyawolfandwasverydangerous.ReadforPlotsandFeelingsBeginningcyclingchasingandescapingthewolfPaulandBeckyClimaxEnding(happy/relaxed)(terrified/afraid/frightened)(bothterrifiedandrelieved)GroupdiscussionfortheplotdevelopmentswithquestionsPara.1：Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Para.2：Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.1.WhatdidMacdowhenhesawthecar?2.WhatdidMacfeelnow?3.Wasthewolfstillthere?Oritwentaway?1.Ifthewolfwasstillthere,whatmighthappentothetwofriendsandthemeninthecar?2.Ifthewolfhadgone,whatmighthappen?3.Whatmightbetheending?Keytopolishingyourcontinuationwriting1.Usespecific（具体的）actionverbs2.Usevividdescription*Naturewascalmandpeaceful.*Itwasasunny(视觉)daywithabeamlight(视觉)inthetrees,andtherewasadelicious(味觉)flavorofgrass.Notaleafmoved(视觉)andnotasounddisturbedthepeace.3.Useadvancedsentencepatterns[Student]:Macsaid,“Helpme!”[Polish]:Usespecificactionverbsyell,shout,chat,talk,scream,cry,state,announce,mention,add,whisper,sigh,reply,respond,argue,swear(发誓),stammer(结巴)，mumble(支支吾吾)[Polish]:[Student]:BeckyaskedMactogetintothecar.[Student]:Macsawhisfriendsapproachinghim.[Polish]:Usespecificactionverbsspotnoticeobservestareatcatchsightofglanceatglareatlookatclosely(端详)castaglanceat(扫视)exchangeaglancewithsb(与某人交换眼色)[Student]:Thewolflookedatthethreemeninthecar.[Polish]:[Student]:Macwassofrightenedthathequicklygotintothecar.[Polish]:Negativefeelingexpressionface:sweat,tears(rundown)body:tremble,throw,seize,dash,rush,shake,jumpvoice:yell,cry,shout,screamfeeling:hopeless,disappointed,desperate(绝望的),forceasmile（强颜欢笑）beseizedbyastrongsenseofpanic(惊慌),Afloodoffearwelledup(感情迸发)me.Withfearandpanicoverwhelming(充斥)me,I…Usevividdescription[Student]:Macfeltrelaxedwhenhefinallysatontotheseat.[Polish]:UsevividdescriptionPositivefeelingexpressionface/voice:wearasmile,grin(露出牙齿笑),laughheartily(开怀大笑),twitter(咯咯笑)body:takeadeepbreath,giveasigh,laughout(捧腹大笑)feeling:Myface/eyeslitup.Itfilledmymindwithabrightlight.Iletout/breathedasighofrelief.Myeyestwinkled(闪耀)withexcitement.Tearsofjoyfloodedmyeyes.Negativefeelingexpressionface:sweat,tears(rundown)body:tremble,throw,seize,dash,rush,shake,jumpvoice:yell,cry,shout,screamfeeling:hopeless,disappointed,desperate(绝望的),forceasmile（强颜欢笑）beseizedbyastrongsenseofpanic(惊慌),Afloodoffearwelledup(感情迸发)me.Withfearandpanicoverwhelming(充斥)me,I…Positivefeelingexpressionface/voice:wearasmile,grin(露牙齿笑),laughheartily(开怀大笑),twitter(咯咯笑)body:takeadeepbreath,giveasigh,laughout(捧腹大笑)feeling:Myface/eyeslitup.Itfilledmymindwithabrightlight.Iletout/breathedasighofrelief.Myeyestwinkled(闪耀)withexcitement.Tearsofjoyfloodedmyeyes.[Student]:Macwassofrightenedthathequicklygotintothecar.[Student]:Macfeltrelaxedwhenhefinallysatontothecar.Practice--UsevividdescriptionBeautifulsentencesfromourstudents1.TearsofreliefstreameddownMac’scheeks.(张玲)2.Withoutthinkingtwice,hequicklyjumpedoffhisbicycle…(孙德政)3.Macimmediatelyjumpedoffhisbicycleandrushedintothecarwiththeheartbeatingviolently…Becauseoffear,Maccouldn’tsayawordforalongtimeandtirednessstruckhimalot.(薛嘉弘)4.Theyfrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveanin