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读后续写2016年10月浙江卷OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.___________________________________________________________________________________________ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.________________________________________________________________________________________________InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatTomInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)JanecoupleInterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)1.Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.2.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)情感线：Jane的情感发展经历了以下变化：生气→恐惧→后悔→思念→希望→喜悦Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation五所写篇：人物所说（whattosay),所听（whattohear),所想（whattothink),所感（whattofeel),所做（whattodo)①HowdidJanefeelatthebeginning?②WhatdidJanedointheforest?③WhathappenedtoJane?④HowdidJanefeelandwhatdidJanedothen?首句解读：Para.1Butnomorehelicoptercameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation①WhatdidJanedothenextday?②What/WhodidJanefind?③Howwasthestoryended?Didshefindherwayoutbyherselfor…?④HowdidJanefeelintheend?/WhatdidJanelearnfromthisexperience?首句解读：Para.2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下划线词解读：Jane，Tom，lake，walked，climbed，atadistance，stream，Tohergreatjoy，helicopter，yellowblouse。Characters人物类Jane,TomPlaces地点类lake,atadistance,streamObjects事物类helicopter,yellowblouseBehaviour行为类walked,climbedFeelings情感类TohergreatjoyTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之准确的动作神态描写：后悔心理篇读后续写的评分原则之一是“内容的丰富性”。我们在描写情感的变化时，关注动词、形容词、副词等在写作中的使用，还可以通过面部表情、体态语言、虚拟语气、直接引语和修辞手法等体现心理。词块和句的积累：1.toone’sregret,beseizedwithregret2.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.3.Janeregrettedsayingwhatshehadsaid.4.Shestoodthere,withregretfultearsinhereyes.5.Shewasseizedwithregret,heartbeatingpainfullyandbangingagainstherribs.6.Shewasoverwhelmedwithanxiety,likeavolcanoeruptinginsideher.7.Hereyesmistedoverassheimmersedherselfingoodmemorieswithherhusband.当她沉浸在她和她爱人的美好回忆时，双眼蒙上了一层水雾。TheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之准确的动作神态描写：后悔心理篇Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.要是我没有单独离开农场那多好啊！(ifonly)_____________________________IfonlyIhadnotleftthefarmalone!2.接着从遥远的地方传来一个声音，使我们及其快乐。①Thencameavoiceinthedistance,_________________________.(运用非谓语动词结构)②Thencameavoiceinthedistance,_________________________.(运用定语从句)bathingherinextremejoy.whichbathedherinextremejoy.Possibleversion1Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.Therewasnothingbutsilence.Janewasextremelyfrightenedandmissedherhusband,Tom.Hereyesmistedoverassheimmersedherselfingoodmemorieswithherhusband.However,havingadeepbreath,Janekeptherwaybravely.Janeconcentratedalleffortsonwalkingdownalongthestream.Tohergreatjoy,sheeventuallyreachedanopenarea.Exhausted,Janesatonthegroundanddriftedofftosleep.Possibleversion1Paragraph2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Thesunshonelightly,bringingwarmthandhopetotheworld.Janestayedattheopenareapatientlytowaitforothers’help.Twohourslater,thehelicopterwhichshehadseenyesterdaycaughthereyes.Janetookoffheryellowblousetoflagitandyelledouttomakethehelicopternoticeher.Fortunately,thehelicopternoticedherandcamecloser,finallylandingattheopenarea.Herhusband,Tom,gotoutofthehelicopter.Surprisedandoverjoyed,Janeheldhimtightlyandtoldhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Atthemoment,themountainwasfilledwithlove.评点：文章以情感为线索，从害怕、后悔、不安，最后得救后的喜悦。正是有了前面的那些感受才能凸显得救后的喜悦。最后非谓语动词和动作描写的运用让我们真切地感受到她得救后的喜悦。Possibleversion2Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.“Ishouldn’thaveleftTom”,thoughtJane.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.Afterwalkingalongdistanceagain,itoccurredtoherthatshehadaboxofmatcheswithher.Shewaswildwithjoyandusedthemtoburnsomebranchessothatshecouldgetsomewarmth.Staringa