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EnglishEssay1:FindingwhatyouhavelostIamane(C)(E)ngineer,jobfolderisveryimportantformywork.WhenIworkin(AR)(a)laboratory,Ialwayskeepthefolderinmyhand,IcanwritedownanythingthatIfindduring(AR)(the)experiments.Itisconvenitent(SP)(convenient)forme.Ilostm(D)()oneofmyfoldersyesterday.Itwasjustmissing.Ilookedforitinmyofficeandlaboratory,Iaskedeveryone,Icouldn'tfinditout.(I(x))(WORDLIMIT)Ipreparedanotherfoldertoday,allfileshadbeenre-written.Ispentnearlywholedaytore-dotheexperimentsbecausealldatawerelostwiththefolder.Ifinishedallbeforegettingoffworkfinally.Iwenttothemeetingroomtohaveacupofcoffeetorelax.OhmyGod!Mylostfolderliesonthetable.Ithoughtaboutit,IhadashortmeetingwithoneclientinthismeetngroomyesterdayandIputmyfolderonthetable.IforgottobringitbackafterIsaidgoodbyetomyclient!NowIhavetwofoldersforonecase.OverallTeacherCommentsDearstudent,Thankyouforyourveryinterestingsubmission,itwasapleasuretoread.Youneedtoworkonwordlimit,capitalisation,andspelling.InsteadofwritingIlostmyoneofmyfoldersyoucanwriteitasIlostoneofmyfolders.Adefinitearticlesuchastheisusedtorefertoaspecificinstanceofthenoun,oftenalreadymentionedinthecontextoreasytoidentify.Useanbeforewordsbeginningwithvowelsorwhenaconsonantinitialhasavowelsound.Allpropernounslikethenamesofpeople,places,profession,nationality,days,months,etc,needtobecapitalized.Thepronoun'I'alwaysneedstobecapitalized.Wordlimitsareprescribednottomakeitdifficultforthestudentbuttoenablehimtowritebetterandimproveateverylevel,inordertoenhancehisvocabularyandwritingskills.Sopleasegiveimportancetothewordlimitandsendanotherwritingforuation,pertainingtothewordlimit.Goodluck-Tricy_I————EnglishEssay2:GivingadviceabouthealthAreyoustillonadiettoreducesomeweight?Igainedsomeweightrecently.Ihavebeentakingexercisestoloseweightfromdaytoday.Joggingisahealthyformofexercise.IloveYoga(C)(yoga)more.Ispendonehouroniteveryday.IfoundthatYogaisthebestwaytocurebackacheandagooddisciplinetohelpyourbodytorelax.Ithinkyoushouldsleepearly,don'tgotothebarssooftenanddon'tdrinksomuch.Healthyfoodcanhelpyourbodykeepingenergetic.Oh,mydearsister,whynottry?OverallTeacherCommentsDearYannie,thankyouforyoursubmission.Ithinkthatyouhavewrittenthehealthadvicenicelyhere.However,youreallyneedtotryandsticktothewordlimit.Youonlyneededtowrite50-70words.Youneedtoreviseyourcapitalizationin:Yoga(C)(yoga),usesmallletterasitisacommonnounnow.IhavereadthroughandtherearenomorecorrectionsthatIneedtomake.Youhaveobviouslyputinalotofeffortandhaveeditedyourworkbeforesubmittingit.Ilookforwardtoreadingyourwritingagaininthefuture.Keepupthegoodwork.............................................................................................Iwenttoseeagreatconcertlastnight.Thebestplayinthisconcertis(VT)(was)WolfganAmadeusMozart'sSerenade.Mozart'smusicisveryromantic,thethemeissimple,butit'sbrightandcheerful.Thelastcheerfulrondohasallthebrillianceofanoperaticfinale,it'ssoamazing.Doyouwanttoseeaconcertwithme?Wecanenjoytogether.OverallTeacherCommentsDearStudent,Youdidagreatjobindescribingaboutentertainment,asitwasclearlywrittenandeasilyunderstood.Youdidwellinkeepingyourwritingsimpleandshort.Checkouttheproperusageoftheessentialslikeverbtensestogainbettergradesasyouprogress.Pleasereviewmycorrectionsandworkonthem.Goodluckwithfutureassignments-Alan.............................................................................................IamverygladthatIhaveachancetotravell(SP)(travel)aroundBeijingforfree(I(x))(ofcost).Mytravellingplanisasfollows:Firstly,I'mgoingtotakeaplanetoBeijingairport.I'llvisit[[TianAnMen]](AR)(the)[(WC)(Tiananmen)]Square,(AR)(the)drum-towerandsomefamousalleies(WC)(alley)on(AR)(the)firstday.OnseconddayI'llgotoQinghua(PU)(,)and(D)()(AR)(the)Beijinguniversitytovisitmyfriends.I'llgo(PR)(for)shoppingwithmyfriendsinWangfujingstreetaftersupper.ThenI'llvisittheGreatWall.TheBird'sNestandtheWaterCubearemyfinaldestinationsonthefourthday.OverallTeacherCommentsDearstudent,Awellwrittenandthoughtoutresponsetothetopicathand.Youwereabletoexpressyourselfclearlyandconfidentlyinanamusingmanner.Youhaveagoodsenseofhumouranditiswonderfultoreadyourwriting!Youhavemadegreatuseofsimplesentencestructures.Youdidverywell,showingthatyouhavespentalotoftimereading.Reviewmycorrections,Adefinitearticle(the)isusedbeforesingularandpluralnounsthatrefertoaparticularmemberofagroup.Spellingscanruinanywriting,sotakecareofthem.Useappropriatewordsthatcanbeusedinthecontext.Useprepositionforisusedtoindicateadestinationeg:I'llgo(PR)(for)shopping..........................................................................................................................................................Ithinkallcolleaguesshouldwearappropriateclothesatwork.Dark,greyorelegantdarksuitsarebetterchoice.ShirtsandT-shirtswithcollarareacceptable.Shortskirts,sleevelesstops,plungingnecklines,orsportswearsarenotpermitted.WewearcasualdressonlyoneveryFridayif(I(x))(thereis)noformalactivity.OverallTeacherCommentsDearst

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