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1Module6TheTangPoems写作园地-诗歌评论[感悟范文]阅读下面这首小诗，然后按要求与提示写一篇短文。APoemofanIraqiChildMumistearing.Dad,wheredidyougo?Iamscaredfromhearttosoul.MumandIneededyousomuch.Butwhathappened?PeoplesaythatIamtooyoungtoknow.Iheardtheterriblesoundandsmelledthesmoke.Dad,comeback.Butwhathappened?Idon'tknow.MumandIloveyousomuch.Dad,wheredidyougo?Shesaysyouwillbeback.MumandImissedyousomuch.Withgoodnewsandhope.要求与提示：1．简述小诗内容。(诗中以一个小孩的口吻表明：伊拉克处于战乱之中，战争给伊拉克人民带来极大的痛苦)2．简单谈谈你内心的感受。(小诗很感人，和平对于国家、人民是多么重要)3．从欣赏的角度谈谈你对这首诗的看法。(语言简明扼要，但内涵丰富。体现出了他们心里充满着对和平的希望)4．可适当发挥想象。5．词数：不少于100词。[范文]ThisisapoemwrittenbyanIraqichild.WeareshownthatIraqisatwarandtheboy'sfatherhasgonetothebattlefieldforfreedom.Iraqipeoplearesufferingalotfromthewar.Theyarelongingforpeace.Toasmallchildwarseemsmeaningless,butfatherandfamilymeanmuchtohim.Thepoemtouchesmedeeply.Oneobviousmeaningofthepoemishowmuchpeacemeanstoacountryanditspeople.Althoughthedescriptionissimpleandtothepoint,themeaningofthepoemisrich.They2havetobeseparatedatthemoment,buttheystillhavehopeintheirmind.Theybelievevictorywillbelongtothemandtheyarelookingforwardtotheday.[技法讨论]本模块写作任务是写一首诗歌评论，旨在诗评的写作，大致可分为以下几个步骤：1．简述诗歌内容。当然这必须建立在很好地把握原诗主旨的基础之上，而非罗列原诗的诗句。2．谈谈自己的感受。一首好的诗歌，自然有动人之处。可侧重诗中最打动你的某一方面抒发自己的感想。3．评价诗歌的意义或作用。这一部分只是稍作点评即可，无需过多发挥。黄金表达1．Thisisapoemwrittenby...,whoisfamousas....2．We'reshownthat...3．Whatmoves/touchesmemostis...4．can'tcomparewith...5．ThereasonwhyIloveitisthat...亮点分析：亮点一：本文准确把握了诗歌中所流露的盼望父亲回家，渴望和平的思想情感；夹叙夹议，语言流畅，很好的完成了写作目的。亮点二：文中使用了一些语法结构，如，过去分词短语作状语，apoemwrittenbyanIraqichild；还使用了让步状语从句，Althoughthedescriptionissimpleandtothepoint，themeaningofthepoemisrich.使文章衔接自然，句式结构不单调，使文章富于变化。[类文演练]题目：请阅读唐朝诗人李白的《赠汪伦》，体会它的意境，谈谈你的看法。赠汪伦李白李白乘舟将欲行，忽闻岸上踏歌声。桃花潭水深千尺，不及汪伦送我情。ToWangLunI'monboard;We'reabouttosail，Whenthere'sstampingandsingingonshore；PeachBlossomPoolisathousandfeetdeep，Yetnotsodeep,WangLun,asyourloveforme.要求：31．不得照抄短诗原文；2．必须结合短诗的内容，发挥想象，适当展开；3．必须突出短诗主题，结构完整，语意连贯；4．短文不能写成诗歌形式；5．词数：120个左右。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________[联想词汇]1.由……书写________________答案：bewrittenby2.在离别时刻________________答案：atthisleavingmoment3.激动做某事________________答案：beexcitedtodosth.4.表达友谊________________答案：expressone'sfriendship[连词成句]1.《赠汪伦》是由杰出诗人李白写的。ToWangLun________________.答案：iswrittenbyLiBai,anoutstandingpoeminhistory2.在离别时刻，李白见到他最好的朋友很激动。________________，LiBai________________toseehisbestfriend.答案：Attheleavingmoment;isexcited3.语言难以表达他们的友谊。Nowordscan________________.答案：expresstheirfriendship4.我喜欢这首诗，是因为它能使我意识到友谊是很有价值的。Thereason________________isthatitmakesmerealise________________.答案：whyIloveit;howvaluablefriendshipis[连句成章]_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4答案：ToWangLuniswrittenbyLiBaiwhoamongotherpoetsstandsoutinthehallsofglory.Oneday,LiBaigoesonboard.Heisabouttosailwhenthere'sstampingandsingingonshore.Oh!HerecomesWangLuntoseehimoff,whoisLiBai'sbestfriend.LiBaiisveryexcitedtoseehisbestfriendatthisleavingmoment.Butheissad,too.Sohecan'tsayasimplesentence.Heknowsthatwordscan'texpresstheirfriendship.AlthoughthePeachBlossomPoolisonethousandfeetdeep,itcan'tmatchWangLun'sloveforhim.Ilovethispoem,becauseitmakesmerealizethatfriendshipisvaluableandweneedtruefriendship.Ihopeeveryonecanfindtruefriends.