英语续写讲解1

2016.10浙江高考作文续写1.OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp.andwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!shecried.Help!Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语：3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup剧情回顾精读文章OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom.“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocampandwalkedaway.Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace.sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!shecried.Help!Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落）somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow.Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Paragraph2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup那么，怎么编故事？1.增加冲突2.放大内心冲突人物之间的人物与环境之间的人物与时间之间的增加障碍高考阅卷评分依据1.与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。2.内容的丰富性，对所给关键词的涵盖情况。3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。4.上下文的连贯性。续写步骤1.精读文章确定线索。尊重原文的写作思路；原文中的时间线索，地点线索等。2.仔细审题目要求及提示句。3.回扣原文拟定草稿。4.标出续写部分的划线词。参考范文Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Atthatmoment(时间),shefeltalittlesad,butshewasn’tsofrightened(情感).Sheremindedherselfconstantly,(心理)“Tommusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybe(情感)hewasinoneofthemandwillreturnsoon(动作)!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”Shefeltasleep(动作)anddreamedofseeingTom(动作).Paragraph1Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Janehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Atthatmoment(时间),shefeltalittlesad,butshewasn’tsofrightened(情感).Sheremindedherselfconstantly,(心理)“Tommusthavecalledforthosehelicopters.Maybe(情感)hewasinoneofthemandwillreturnsoon(动作)!Ihavetoguidehimtomorrow.”Shefeltasleep(动作)anddreamedofseeingTom(动作).Paragraph2ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheatesomeberriesandthen(时间)walkedalongthestream,hoping(心理)tofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.Shewalkedandwalked,exhaustedbutfullofhope.Suddenly(时间),shespotted(动作)ahugeflatrock.Shemanaged(动作)toclimbontoitandwaitedwithpatience.Themoment(时间)thehelicopterappeared(动作)again.Theneareritgot(动作),themoreshewaved(动作)theyellowblouse.Tohergreatjoy,(情感)thehelicopterdidn’tmissJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.Tomjumpedoffthehelicopterandrushed(动作)towardsJane.Theyhuggedeachothertightly(情感)andburstintotears(情感).