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【话题解读】物品介绍类写作应注意以下几点：1.抓准特征、说明到位：物品的特征可能有很多，介绍时要注意详略得当。如果有“闪光点”，即这一物品区别于其他物品的地方，应重点介绍。2.层次分明、条理清晰：应采用恰当的说明顺序和角度，可以从物品的外观、构造、功能等方面来分层依次描述，内容不宜相互交叉。3.选用合适的说明方法：物品介绍类写作可采用下定义、举例子、列数字、作比较等不同的说明方法。要根据所介绍物品的特征，选用恰当的说明方法。【实例讲解】书包伴我学习，伴我成长，某英文报以“MySchoolbag”为题，举办中学生征文活动。请根据下列图表信息，写一篇短文。内容包括：书包的外形特征、用途和书包背后的课业问题以及课余你期望做的事情。提示：1.短文应包括图表中的全部信息，条理清楚，行文连贯，段落分明；2.短文中不能出现真实的人名和地名；3.词数不少于80，开头已给出，不计入总词数。MyschoolbagWhatitlookslikeWhatisusedforTheproblemsyourschoolbagmaybringThethingsyouexpecttodoinyourfreetime1.muchschoolwork2....1....2....MySchoolbagIhaveaschoolbag._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【分析】该书面表达要求介绍自己的书包，属于物品介绍。按照提示内容，具体可以分三段来写：第一段描写书包的外形特征及用途。外形特征可以从颜色、尺寸、材质等方面介绍；第二段说明自己遇到的课业问题。因为是课业问题且和书包有关，所以内容应围绕“学业负担重”展开；最后一段表达自己的期望。图表中的相应信息提到了“inyourfreetime”，结合前段对课业问题的介绍进行分析判断，可知此段应围绕“减负”“享受生活”等内容展开。标准范文MySchoolbagIhaveaschoolbag.Itisbigandblue.Itisusedforcarryingtheschoolthings,suchasbooks,pensandsoon.Myschoolbagisofgreathelptome.However,italsobringsmesomeproblems.Ihavetodosomuchhomework,soIputlotsofthingsinit.Insteadofenjoyingthewonderfulweekends,Iamforcedtohaveextraclasseswithit.Mybackhurtsalotbecauseofmyheavyschoolbag.Asamiddleschoolstudent,Ihopetohavemorefreetimetodevelopmyhobbies.Ihopemyschoolbagcansharemyjoyandhappinessratherthanbecomeaburden.【高分突破】MySchoolbagIhaveaschoolbag.It'sblue,whichismyfavoritecolor.Therearesomeyellowstarsonthefrontthatmaketheschoolbagcoolandspecial.Itcancarryallmyschoolthings,liketextbooks,notebooksandapencilbox.IlikemyschoolbagandItakegoodcareofit.However,afterusingitforonlyhalfayear,Ifoundsomeholesinit.Why?Iputtoomanythingsinit!Everyday,I'mbusywithmylessons,homeworkandtestsandmyschoolbagcarrieslotsofthings.Ilearntoomuch,andlikemypoorschoolbag,Ican'tstandthat.Actually,myschoolbagandIareboth“tired”.IhopeIcanhavemoretimetoread,tosingandtoplaywithmyfriends.IhopeIcanhavealighterschoolbagandahappierschoollife.【高分揭秘】1.作者用地道的语言完整地叙述了所有的内容要点，详略得当。在第一段对书包作介绍时，作者运用了一些表达情感色彩的话语，如myfavoritecolor,maketheschoolbagcoolandspecial等，增强了文章的可读性。2.习作过渡自然，由书包“不堪重负”导致破洞引出课业负担过重的话题，最后巧妙地使用lighterschoolbag表达了作者希望减负的心声，这些比喻的使用为习作增添了亮点。3.习作句式丰富，既有简单句，也有一些定语从句。从句的使用避免了句子过于单调。【素材积累】1.词汇形状：round,square,heart-shaped,star-shaped颜色：white,red,green,grey,gold,silver材质：cotton,leather,silk,wool,glass,metal,wood,stone,plastic,iron,steel外观：good-looking,fashionable,shiny,sharp其他：well-known,safe,valuable,healthy2.句子★Itisattractiveanditstandsabout10metershigh.★It'sagiftoflovefrommyparents.Itmeansalottome.★Itfeelssogoodtobewearingthelongbeautifuldress.★Althoughitisexpensive,Ithinkit'sworthbuying.It'shelpfulformystudy.★Theshoesaremadeofleather.Theycanmakepeople—especiallyyoungpeople,feelcomfortableandconfident.