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SectionⅤ写作园地读后续写——健康故事本单元的写作任务是读后续写中的“健康故事”主题。读后续写是阅读理解和书面表达的沟通桥梁。读后续写考查的是学生在阅读文章的基础上，分析文章的逻辑，运用准确丰富的语言，展现创造力和想象力。一、解题步骤读后续写一般遵循以下四个解题步骤：1．准确理解材料，理清人物事件。2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向。3．根据画线词语，确定续写细节。4．调整写作语言，完成读后续写。二、注意事项1．仔细揣摩原材料作者所表达的意图和主题。注意前后照应，注意隐含的情感因素。2．一定要注意与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接。千万不可忽略所提供的段落首句的限制而肆意创作。3．切忌大篇幅对白；应尽可能巧妙地设置情节，多关注动作描写和心理描述。4．在完成续写后，务必用下划线标出所用上的关键词语；不要因此而失分。一、开头常用语1．Peoplearebeginningtoattachmuchmoreimportancetotheirhealththesedaysthaneverbefore.现在人们开始比以往任何时候都更加重视自己的健康。2．Incurrentsociety,peoplehaveknowntheimportanceofkeepinghealthyandgoodlifehabit.在当今社会，人们已经意识到健康和良好生活习惯的重要性。3．Whenitcomestoheath,everybodyhashisownwaytokeephealthy,doingexercise,keepingabalanceddiet,etc.说到健康，每个人都有自己的方式来保持健康，锻炼身体，保持均衡的饮食等等。二、正文常用语1．Tobeginwith,exerciseisthemostimportantfactor.Doingexercisecannotonlybuildpeople'sbodybutalsorelaxthemselves.首先，锻炼是最重要的因素。锻炼不仅可以保持良好的身体健康也可以放松自己。2．Regularexercisestrengthensourheartsandlungs.Inaddition,itpreventsusfromputtingonweight.有规律的运动能强壮我们的心脏和肺。此外还能防止我们增加体重。3．Itisalsonecessarytokeepagooddiet.Thereisasaying,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”还必须保持一个良好的饮食习惯。俗话说，“一天一苹果，医生远离我。”4．Avoidfoodswithlotsofsugarandfat.Eatplentyofhighproteinfoods,vegetablesandfruits.避免高糖高脂肪的食物。多吃高蛋白食物、蔬菜和水果。5．Weshouldgetproperamountofsleep,becausewithoutenoughsleep,wewilloftenfeeltiredandirritable.我们应该保持适量的睡眠，因为没有足够的睡眠，我们会经常感到疲倦和易怒。三、结尾常用语1．Soifyoukeepthosewaysyouwillbemoreandmorehealthy.因此如果你能保持这种方式，你会越来越健康。2．Ithinkastrongwillisnecessaryifwewanttokeephealthy.我认为如果想要健康，强大的意愿是必须的。3．Wehavetogetridofthosebadhabitsthatdamageourhealth,suchasdrinkingandsmoking.我们必须戒掉那些损害我们健康的坏习惯，比如喝酒和抽烟。4．Lastbutnotleast,alwayskeepingagoodmoodcanmakehalftheworkwithdoubleresults.最后但并非最不重要的是要经常保持一个好心情，这样做起事来才可以事半功倍。5．Ifyoureallylovelife,followthesesuggestionsandstartahealthylifestyle.如果你真的热爱生活，那就遵循这些建议，开始健康的生活方式吧。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Michellewas8yearsoldwhensheheardhermomanddadtalkingaboutherlittlebrotherJack,now,onlyaninfant(婴儿).Hewasverysickandtheywerecompletelyoutofmoney.OnlyaverycostlyoperationcouldsaveJacknow,buttherewasnoonetowhomtheycouldturnforthemoneyneeded.Sheheardherdaddysaytohertearfulmom,“Onlyamiraclecansavehimnow.”Hearingthewords,Michellewenttoherbedroomandtookallthecoinsfromherlittlemoneybox.Aftercountingthecoinsthreetimes,sheslippedoutofthebackdoorandmadeherwaytothedrugstore6blocksaway...Shewaitedforalongtimebeforethepharmacist(药剂师)turnedaroundandaskedher,“Andwhatdoyouwant？”“Well,it'saboutmybrother，”Michelleanswered,“he'sreallyreallysick.AndIwanttobuyamiracle.”“Ibegyourpardon？”saidthepharmacist.“HisnameisJack.Andhehassomethingverybadgrowinginsidehisbody.Andmydaddysaysonlyamiraclecansavehimnow.Sohowmuchdoesamiraclecost？”“Wedon'tsellmiracleshere,littlegirl.Iamsorry.ButIcan'thelpyou.”Thepharmacistsaid.“Listen,Ihavethemoneytopayforit.”Withthesewords,Michellepouredoutallthecoinsfromherpocket.Atthistime,awell－dressedmanbehindMichellestoopeddownandaskedthelittlegirl,“Iamsellingthemiracleyouwant.Tellmehowmuchmoneyyouhave.”“Onedollarandelevencents.”Michelleansweredinalowvoice,“That'sallthemoneyIhave.ButIcangetsomemoreifIneedto.”“Well，”smiledtheman,“adollarandelevencents.Theexactpriceofamiracleforyoulittlebrother.Showmetheplacewhereyourbrotherlives.”注意：1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：Holdingtheman'shandfirmly,Michelletookhimhome.Paragraph2：Whenaskedwhyhechosetohelpthefamily,themandetailed,[精彩范文]Paragraph1：Holdingtheman'shandfirmly,Michelletookhimhome.Thelittlegirlwalkedinsuchahurrythatsheevenforgottointroduceherselftotheman.Herparentsweretoosurprisedtobelievetheireyes.Thatwell－dressedmanturnedouttobeasurgeon,specializinginneuralsurgery.Later,thelittlebrotherwastakenaway.Theoperationwascompletedwithpaymentofonedollarandelevencents.Anditwasn'tlongbeforeJackwashomeagainanddoingwell.Michellewasmorethanhappy.Nowsheknewtheexactpriceofamiracle:onedollarandelevencents,plusthefaithofalittlechild.答案Paragraph2：Whenaskedwhyhechosetohelpthefamily,themandetailed,“WhenIwasyoungmyself,Iwasonceinthesamesituationasthelittlebaby.Thelittlegirlremindedmeofmyownsister.Itwasshewhosavedmylife.Deeplyimpressedbyherinnocence,Iwasdeterminedtohelpthefamilyoutoftrouble.Itdoesn'tmatterhowmuchmoneysheactuallyhadwithher;whatmattersisherfaith,afaiththatmiraclesdoexist.”答案总评原文主要讲述了小女孩的弟弟病重，因家贫而无法救治。她听父母说只有奇迹可以救弟弟，于是天真地去药店买奇迹，恰好遇见一位陌生人，自称可以把奇迹卖给她。续写部分描述了小女孩的善良纯真带来了奇迹，医生来到她家竭力救治，遵循原文的情节发展，展现了人性的光辉。同时，续写部分与两段所给的开头段落语衔接也十分紧密。[亮点呈现](1)本文运用了非谓语动词(deeplyimpressedbyherinnocence)、名词性从句(whatmattersisherfaith)等语法结构，更是准确运用了specializingin,withpaymentof等高级短语，使得全文十分出彩。(2)衔接词Later,And,Now等用来承接故事情节的发展，行文流畅、连贯、自然。(3)本篇合理地使用了10个关键词语里的8个，符合要求。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Mymotherusedtoaskmewhatthemostimportantpartofthebodyis.ThroughtheyearsIwouldtakeaguessatwhatIthoughtwasthecorrectanswer.WhenIwasyounger,Ithoughtsoundwasveryimportanttousashumans,soIsaid,“Myears,Mommy.”Shesaid,“No.Manypeoplearedeaf.Buttheyaredoingwellintheirlife.YoukeepthinkingaboutitandIwillaskyouagainsoon.”Severalyearspassedbeforesheaskedmeagain.Sincemaking