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写作专题讲析第七讲打造写作亮点，提升写作档次提升写作档次的窍门就是增加文章中的亮点句式，打造亮点句子，巧妙布局谋篇。1．词汇的选择和使用要多样性词汇的选择要新颖独到，在有把握的前提下，使用在阅读中碰到的高级词汇，相信阅卷者会对你的文章刮目相看。试体会下列句子黑体部分被括号中的高级词汇替代后的效果。①Aboutthemoneyyoucharge，doesitcovertheentrancefeesforvisitingtheplaceslisted？(Asfor)②Someofmyclassmatesareforthemove.(infavorof)2．语言结构要丰富、多变在确保行文准确流畅的前提下，需要文字清新简练，语句灵活多变，以使文章的语言结构更加丰富多彩。(1)删减赘言。删减不必要的词，句子会显得明快干练，焕发新的生机。试体会删去黑体部分后的效果。Ittookseveralmonthsofhardworktocompletetheproject.(2)用介词或名词代替动词或从句。试体会黑体部分被括号中的词替代后的效果。Theflathasanareaof100squaremetresandthereisabedroom，abathroom，andakitchen.(with)(3)使用短语结构来简化从句或合并短句。常见的结构有介词短语、名词短语、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、同位语等。I'llwritetoyouthemomentIarriveinBeijing.→OnmyarrivalinBeijing，I'llwritetoyou.(4)通过合并，将意义相关的几个句子用一定的连接方式连接起来，或通过紧缩，去掉一些多余的成分，可以避免句子冗长累赘，松散无力，使句子凝炼，层次清晰。Icanfollowmyowninterests.Icanreadbooks，visitmuseumsandtakecomputerlessons.→Icanfollowmyowninterests，suchasreadingbooks，visitingmuseumsandtakingcomputerlessons.(5)增加复杂句式，改变“主谓宾”的简单句，换上句中的其他成分，或有意识地使用一些特殊效果的定语从句、倒装句、强调句、感叹句、介词短语、短语修饰语、副词状语等，这样能增加文章的节奏感和韵律美。Youcanworkouttheproblemonlyinthisway.→Onlyinthiswaycanyouworkouttheproblem.→Itisonlyinthiswaythatyoucanworkouttheproblem.3．巧布局，善谋篇，层次清晰(1)开头段——开门见山，点明主旨好的开端是成功的一半。而开门见山往往是阅卷人青睐的方法之一。开头点明主题，即首先用事实、观点、名言等开头吸引读者，进而直接表明文章的主旨。(2)主体段——衔接自然，内容连贯主体段是由一个或一个以上的自然段组成，主要用来陈述事实或列举事例，按照时间、空间、逻辑、重要性的顺序，使用对比、分类、说明等手段，对主体句进行拓展，当然每个自然段是文章的组成部分，同时本身又是一个整体，也要有自己的主体句，所以对于占文章70%篇章的主体段落来说，这一段落的支持材料要统一筹划，合理安排。(3)结尾段——简洁有效，首尾呼应结尾部分是给评卷人留下深刻印象的最后机会。结尾部分是对文章的总结和思想的升华，简短有力，言简意赅，意味深长的结尾最会打动阅卷人。常用开头句式(黑体部分)：First，Ithinkeveryoneneedsfriendsandiseagertogetfriendship.Firstofall，wemustmakefulluseofevery45－minutelesson.Nowadays/Recently，peopleinmanybigcitiesarecomplainingabouttheheavytraffic.Inthefirstplace，shecanreadattherateof100wordsaminute.Tobeginwith，smokingshouldbebannedinpublicareas.Generallyspeaking，themoreyoupractise，themoreskillfullyyoucanwriteinEnglish.Astheproverbsays/Asthesayinggoes，“Timeismoney.”Ascanbeseenfromthetable，nearlyeveryoneownsonemobilephoneinChina.WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet，computersplayanimportantroleinpeople'slife.Itgoeswithoutsayingthatitpaystokeepearlyhours.Thereisnodenyingthatsuccessfulbusinessliesinahealthybodyandmind.Itisbelievedthathealthisabovewealth.Itiswellknownthatanelephantisaverykindandgentleanimal.I'mexcitedtolearnthatwearegoingtostartamagazine.I'mgladtohearthatyouwillcometoourschoolasanexchangestudent.Asisknowntoall，shoesplayanimportantroleinourlife，foritcanprotectourfeetfrombeinghurt.常用结尾句式(黑体部分)：Allinall，travelingisthebestchoicetorechargeourselvesandgetreadyforthenewchallenges.Inconclusion，agoodcitizenshouldobservetrafficregulations.Inaword，successisimportant，andsoisfailure，becauseit'sthemotherofsuccess.Tosumup，environmentalprotectionisofgreatimportance，whichcanmakeuslivemorecomfortablyandhealthily.Onthewhole，Ifindabikemoreenjoyablethanamotorcycle.I'dappreciateitifyoucoulddeliverthemassoonaspossible.Itishightimethatwedidsomethingtopreventtheenvironmentfrombeingpolluted.Onlywithcombinedeffortscanweexpectourhometowntakeonanewlookinthenearfuture.Wecan，therefore，cometotheconclusionthatnothingissopreciousaspeaceintheworld.Fromwhathasdiscussedabove，wemaydrawtheconclusionthatyoumusthaveself－confidenceifyouwanttoachievesomething.Inshort，notonlyhastheinclusionpoisonedChinese，itmayalsobringaboutdistancebetweentheChinesepeople.Inaword，mylifewillbemuchricherandmorecolorful.I'llbegladifyoucanconsidermyrecommendation.学即练用恰当的主题句和支持句或段落展开的适当形式补全短文Goodafternoon，everyone.Welcometoourschool！Highschoolstudents1.________(面对)achoicebetweenartsandscience.2.________(对我来说这是不容易做出的选择)．Aftercarefulconsideration，though3.________(我决定把理科作为我的主要学习科目)．Thereasonsareasfollows.4．________(首先，在中国理科毕业生要比文科毕业生需求量大)．Second，thesciencemajorhelpsmeachievemychildhooddreamofbecomingascientist.5.________(再次，我父母希望我在大学学习理科，因为他们认为作为理科生我会有更美好的前途).6.________(最后但仍然重要)，myphysicsteacherismyrolemodel,7.________(对我的决定影响重大)．ItisforthesereasonsthatIfinally8.________(做出选择)．Thanks!答案：1.arefacedwith2．Itwasnotaneasychoiceformetomake3．Idecideonscienceasmymainsubjectofstudy4．First，sciencegraduatesareingreaterdemandthanartsonesinChina5．Third，myparentswishmetostudyscienceatcollegebecausetheybelieveIwillhaveabrighterfutureasasciencestudent6．Lastbutnotleast7．whoseinfluenceonmehadalottodowithmydecision8．mademychoice